Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more fluent and avoid fillers (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct grammar (past tense) and clearer vocabulary for toys and rides.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I used to love going to the park near my house because it had many playground equipment and games. For example, there was a small motorbike ride and colorful slides that my friends and I enjoyed.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Use a topic sentence about current habits, then briefly compare with the past using linking words (e.g. "but", "however"). Be specific about why parks are enjoyable now.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Nowadays I often go for a short walk to relax and exercise, whereas when I was younger I mainly went to play on the rides and toys. The fresh air and green surroundings help me feel calm.

Sugerencia: Give a clear reason and specific benefits using linking words. Use correct vocabulary (trees, reduce temperature, improve air quality). Avoid vague phrases and filler words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would provide shade and trees, which can reduce city temperatures and improve air quality. In addition, parks offer places for people to exercise and socialize.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear statement about your preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Use correct modal verbs and phrasing (e.g. "I would like a small park near my apartment"). Keep it concise and coherent with linking words like "for example".

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like a new park near my apartment. It would help cool the neighborhood and improve air quality, and for example a small green space with walking paths and benches would be perfect for morning walks and for children to play.

× Yes, I too, uh, be, uh, yeah, I did because, uh, in my part. In my park have a many toys and game like motor like small motorbike paint paint.

✓ Yes, me too. I did, because in my part of town there was a park. My park had many toys and games, for example a small motorbike ride.

Problems: 'I too' should be 'me too' conversationally; 'be' is an incorrect verb form here and filler words should be removed; 'in my part' is incomplete — use 'in my part of town'; 'In my park have' has incorrect word order and verb form (there was/there were needed); 'a many' is wrong quantifier — use 'many' without 'a' or 'a lot of'; 'toys and game' needs plural 'games'; the phrase 'like motor like small motorbike paint paint' is ungrammatical and unclear — assume intended 'a small motorbike ride'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use correct subject-verb order and plural nouns where needed.

× Yes, I still enjoy go to the bar.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to the park.

Problem: After 'enjoy' the verb should be in -ing form (gerund). Also 'go to the bar' changes meaning; context requires 'park'. Suggestion: use 'enjoy' + verb-ing and correct the noun to match context.

× When I was younger I used to go to a park that have a lot of toy and game.

✓ When I was younger I used to go to a park that had a lot of toys and games.

Problems: 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'used to' and past context; 'toy' and 'game' should be plural. Suggestion: maintain past tense and plural nouns.

× There was even a small motorbike ride that my friend and I could play on.

✓ There was even a small motorbike ride that my friend and I could play on.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses past tense 'was' and modal 'could' for ability in the past. No change needed.

× It was really fun and make me feel relaxed.

✓ It was really fun and made me feel relaxed.

Problem: 'make' should be past tense 'made' to match 'was' and the past context. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent within the sentence.

× Yes I do because uh more park have many tree uh and have the earth can. Reduce the Templars.

✓ Yes, I do, because more parks have many trees and can help the earth by reducing temperatures.

Problems: 'more park' should be plural 'more parks'; 'have many tree' requires plural 'trees'; 'have the earth can. Reduce the Templars' is ungrammatical and unclear — likely meant 'can help the earth reduce temperatures'. 'Templars' is incorrect word. Suggestion: use plural nouns, correct verb forms and clear vocabulary ('temperatures').

× Yes I could more park week 3 could help cool the city and improve air quality and they would provide green space for people to relax and exercise.

✓ Yes. More parks could help cool the city, improve air quality, and provide green spaces for people to relax and exercise.

Problems: 'I could more park week 3' is ungrammatical and unclear. Remove 'I' and number 'week 3'. Use modal 'could' to show possibility and plural 'parks'. 'Green space' can be plural 'green spaces' or 'green space' depending on count; use plural here to match 'parks'. Suggestion: express possibility with 'could' and maintain parallel structure in the list of benefits.

× For example, a small park near my a apartment would be great for morning walk and for children too.

✓ For example, a small park near my apartment would be great for morning walks and for children too.

Problems: 'near my a apartment' contains an extra article 'a' — should be 'near my apartment'; 'morning walk' should be plural or include an article: 'morning walks' or 'a morning walk'. Suggestion: remove the extra article and use correct noun number or include an article.