Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeated words, filler sounds (uh, um), and grammatical errors (e.g., tense and auxiliary use).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often played games like tag and hide-and-seek with neighborhood friends, but I sometimes felt scared on high slides, so I preferred gentler equipment.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief detail using a linking word. Correct small grammar (use 'near my house' rather than 'near to my house') and avoid redundancy.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For example, I often take my little brother to the nearby park because it has a safe playground and open space where he can run around.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear opinion followed by specific reasons and use linking words (for example, because, so). Remove filler words and duplicate words. Expand slightly with a concrete benefit or suggestion.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide safe places for families and children to relax. For instance, more parks with benches and shaded play areas would encourage outdoor activities and community gatherings.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, complete answer: state whether you want to visit parks in the future, specify one or two parks or countries, and explain why using linking words. Remove repetitions and filler; fix grammar ("abroad from my country" should be "abroad").

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit several parks in the future, especially famous national parks abroad such as Yellowstone in the USA and Banff in Canada, because they offer spectacular scenery and unique wildlife experiences.

× Yes, I did. I already went to, to parks when I was young and uh, I played many games, but I already, I always been, uh, I was always been, uh, scared when I played those games.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to go to parks when I was young and I played many games, but I was always scared when I played those games.

The original sentence mixes past simple forms with incorrect 'already' and 'I always been' which is an ungrammatical form. Use 'used to' to describe habitual past actions ('used to go') and simple past 'was' for states ('I was always scared'). Remove unnecessary 'already' which is not appropriate in this context. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense forms for past habits and states.

× Yes, I still like going to parks, especially to take my little brother because we have a park in my city near to my house.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks, especially to take my little brother because we have a park in my city near my house.

The phrase 'near to my house' is incorrect preposition usage; use 'near my house' without 'to'. The rest is present simple and appropriate for current habits. Suggestion: Omit 'to' after 'near' when indicating proximity.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Uh. Especially for for families and the children to go and relax there. So it's a good spot.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, especially for families and children to go and relax. They would be good spots.

Fragmentation and repetition: 'Especially for for families and the children...' contains duplicated 'for' and an unnecessary article 'the' before 'children'. The second sentence 'So it's a good spot' is vague and mismatched number — 'parks' is plural, so use 'They would be good spots.' Also combine fragments into a coherent sentence. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, avoid unnecessary articles, and keep number agreement.

× Yes, there are, there are any yes, there are perks that I want to go in the future uh, but most of them are abroad uh, my country and I like them because they have uh their, they have uh special and.

✓ Yes, there are parks that I want to visit in the future, but most of them are abroad. I like them because they are special.

Multiple problems: repetition ('there are' several times), wrong word 'perks' instead of 'parks', incorrect use of 'any', incorrect verb 'want to go' collocation — use 'want to visit' for places, and sentence fragments ('they have uh special and') incomplete description. Also 'abroad my country' is incorrect order; say 'abroad' alone or 'outside my country'. Suggestion: Use clear vocabulary ('parks'), proper collocations ('visit a park'), and complete sentences; avoid filler words and repetition.