Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repeating similar ideas (e.g., 'I really liked'). Use a linking word to connect the reason.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because my parents often took me there. For example, my dad and I used to walk along the pond every weekend, which felt relaxing and gave us time to talk.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct topic sentence, correct small grammar and avoid unnecessary words (like '7' and 'parts'). Use one clear reason with a linking word and a specific example of what you enjoy doing in local parks.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because they help me relax. For instance, I often read a book on a bench in the small park near my house because it is quiet and green.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, correct word choice ('parks' not 'parts'), and organize reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because' / 'therefore'). Provide one specific benefit of more parks to strengthen your point.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because urban green spaces improve air quality and people's health. For example, having more trees and lawns could reduce pollution and give residents places to exercise.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opening sentence, remove fillers ('uh'), correct grammar ("because of its" not "because it of it's"), and use one or two specific activities you plan to do. Keep it concise and natural.

Ejemplo: Yes, I'd like to visit Kislevak National Park because it has a large area and diverse wildlife. There, I plan to cycle on the trails with my family and have a picnic near a lake.

× 'I always walked in the park with my dad or my mom, and I really liked spending time with them.'

✓ 'I used to walk in the park with my dad or my mom, and I really liked spending time with them.'

'Walked' is grammatically correct past tense but 'used to walk' is more natural to express habitual past actions that no longer occur. Use 'used to' to indicate repeated past habits clearly.'

× 'Yes, I still like to go to the park 7 now when I'm already an adult.'

✓ 'Yes, I still like to go to the park now that I'm an adult.'

'7' is a typo and 'when I'm already an adult' is awkward. Use 'now that' to show the change of state to adulthood; keep present tense 'still like' consistent.'

× 'My parents made me to understand that nature is a part of ourselves and I really like the parts that are near my house.'

✓ 'My parents made me understand that nature is a part of ourselves, and I really like the areas that are near my house.'

'Make' as a causative verb is followed by the base form without 'to', so 'made me understand' is correct, not 'made me to understand'. Also 'parts' is better as 'areas' when referring to green spaces; 'ourselves' is acceptable but 'us' would be simpler.'

× 'Yes, I think I would like to see more parts in my city.'

✓ 'Yes, I think I would like to see more parks in my city.'

'Parts' is the wrong word here; the intended meaning is 'parks' or 'green areas'. This is a word choice error relating to quantifier/ noun selection; replacing with 'parks' corrects meaning.'

× 'As I already said, I really appreciate nature and the bad part of the living in the city is that uh, the air there is really contaminated.'

✓ 'As I already said, I really appreciate nature, and the bad part of living in the city is that the air there is very polluted.'

'Of the living' is incorrect; use 'living in the city' without 'the'. 'Contaminated' is grammatically correct but 'polluted' is the natural collocation for air. Also remove filler 'uh' and adjust article use.'

× 'So I would truly like to visit or see more green parts in my city.'

✓ 'So I would truly like to visit or see more green areas in my city.'

'Green parts' is unnatural; use 'green areas' or 'green spaces' to refer to parks and natural places. This fixes the noun choice and quantifier collocation.'

× 'Yes, uh, the only park I want to visit in the future is National Park of Kislevak.'

✓ 'Yes, the only park I want to visit in the future is the National Park of Kislevak.'

'National Park' as a specific place needs the definite article 'the' before it. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. The phrase order is otherwise fine.'

× 'I've heard of it because it of it's big territory and variety of animals that you can meet there.'

✓ 'I've heard of it because of its large territory and the variety of animals you can see there.'

'Because it of it's' is ungrammatical. Correct form is 'because of its' with possessive 'its' (no apostrophe). 'It's' is a contraction for 'it is' which is incorrect here. Use 'large' instead of 'big' for better register, and 'see' rather than 'meet' when referring to encountering animals.'

× 'I want to ride a bike with my family there and have a little picnic.'

✓ 'I want to ride a bike with my family there and have a small picnic.'

'Ride a bike' is correct; 'have a little picnic' is understandable but 'small picnic' or 'a picnic' is more natural. No -ing correction needed, but this suggests a lexical improvement rather than a grammatical error; kept because it improves naturalness.'