Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and start with a clear topic sentence. Avoid repetition and use specific details and linking words to make reasons clearer. For example, combine reasons into one or two sentences and add a brief example or result.

Ejemplo: Not really. I rarely went to parks as a child because local parks in the Philippines were poorly maintained and often dirty, so my parents didn’t feel they were safe. As a result, they usually avoided taking me there or letting me play outside alone.

Sugerencia: Correct small grammar errors and remove redundant phrases. Use one clear topic sentence, follow with linked supporting details (activities and reasons), and include a short personal comment or example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Living in China has changed my view because parks here are clean and well maintained, so people can stay for hours. For example, my friends and I often have picnics or barbecues there, which makes parks a great place to relax and socialize.

Sugerencia: Avoid hesitations and correct grammar (remove repeated fragments). Give one clear reason and a specific example of what additional parks could offer your city to strengthen the answer.

Ejemplo: Yes. I would like more parks because themed, well-maintained parks encourage outdoor activities and community life. For instance, a new park with playgrounds and garden areas would give families a safe place to relax and children somewhere healthy to play.

Sugerencia: Use more formal phrasing (avoid slang like 'wanna') and make comparisons clearer by using linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a brief comparison.

Ejemplo: Yes. I would like to visit parks in Shanghai, especially those with views of the Oriental Pearl Tower, because the skyline is impressive. For example, I imagine cycling around the riverside parks and enjoying spectacular views, which I think would be more dramatic than parks in Zhuhai.

× 'Parks in China is there.'

✓ 'Parks in China are common.'

'Parks' is plural, so the verb must be 'are' not 'is'. The original 'is there' is also awkward; replace with 'are common' to convey existence and frequency clearly.'

× 'Parks in China are very clean, well maintained and it's good to stay around for a long time.'

✓ 'Parks in China are very clean and well maintained, and they are good places to stay for a long time.'

Mixing 'parks' (plural) with 'it's' (singular) causes a number mismatch and awkward phrasing. Use 'they are' to match plural subject, and change 'stay around' to 'stay' or 'good places to stay' for natural present-tense description.'

× 'We can do barbecues, do picnics and enjoy each other's company, especially with friends and family.'

✓ 'We can have barbecues, have picnics, and enjoy each other's company, especially with friends and family.'

'Do barbecues' and 'do picnics' are understandable but unidiomatic. Use 'have' for activities like barbecues and picnics; verbs are parallel and agree with plural subject 'we'.'},{

× 'Yes, I do want to see more parks in my city because parks in China, they have a different they have different themes.'

✓ 'Yes, I do want to see more parks in my city because parks in China have different themes.'

The original repeats phrases and inserts an unnecessary pronoun 'they', causing redundancy and a break in subject-verb flow. Use 'parks ... have' to keep subject and verb agreement and remove repetition.'

× 'They have, umm, very well maintained.'

✓ 'They are very well maintained.'

'Well maintained' is an adjective phrase describing parks and needs a form of 'be' (are) to link it to the subject. The original lacks the linking verb, so the sentence is incomplete.'

× 'People can sleep in the parks, do picnics and just spend time around with family.'

✓ 'People can sleep in the parks, have picnics, and just spend time with family.'

'Spend time around with family' is awkward; the correct prepositional phrase is 'spend time with family'. Also 'do picnics' is unidiomatic; use 'have picnics'.'

× 'Yes I do. I wanna visit the parks in Shanghai where we can see the Oriental tower.'

✓ 'Yes, I do. I want to visit the parks in Shanghai where we can see the Oriental Tower.'

'Wanna' is informal spoken contraction; use 'want to' in a formal or written response. Capitalize 'Tower' as part of a proper name. Modal 'can' is fine for ability but keep 'want to' for intent.'

× 'It looks very cool.'

✓ 'It looks very cool.'

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed; included here only to indicate it fits the context and tense.

× 'The view is spectacular, especially comparing to to Zhuhai city.'

✓ 'The view is spectacular, especially compared to Zhuhai.'

Use 'compared to' or 'compared with' for comparisons, not 'comparing to'. Remove the duplicate 'to' and the redundant word 'city' when the place name alone suffices. This corrects the comparison structure.'