Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically consistent, reduce hesitations and repetition, and give a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently for childhood (e.g., 'I liked'). Link ideas with a short connective and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

Ejemplo: I liked going to parks as a child because they were safe places to play with other children. For example, I often played tag and soccer there, and I even made a few close friends from those weekly visits.

Sugerencia: Correct small grammar errors and combine sentences to sound more natural. Replace repeated words (e.g., 'enjoyable') with varied vocabulary and use a linking phrase to connect memory and current use. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because the atmosphere is relaxing and it reminds me of my childhood. Nowadays I often meet friends there; we sit on a bench and catch up, which makes it a pleasant social habit.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clear linking words to explain reasons (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Provide one or two specific benefits of more parks and avoid vague words like 'inhabited' here.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would provide green spaces and cleaner air, which is important because the city is crowded. As a result, residents would have peaceful places to exercise and relax.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and fix grammatical errors (e.g., 'a famous park that I want to visit is Park Güell in Barcelona, which was designed by Gaudí'). Use precise names and one supporting detail about why you want to visit (architecture, views).

Ejemplo: One park I would like to visit is Park Güell in Barcelona, which was designed by Antoni Gaudí. I want to see its unique mosaic structures and sweeping city views because they are often described as visually stunning.

× Yes, I like going to the park as a child, uh, uh, they going to the park was enjoyable for me because when I went to the park, I could play with other children and uh yeah, even made friends who were in make friends, make friends.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child. Going to the park was enjoyable for me because when I went there I could play with other children and even made friends.

The student mixes present tense ('I like') with a childhood context; past tense ('liked') is required. 'They going to the park' is ungrammatical and should be rephrased as 'Going to the park' or 'It was enjoyable.' Remove filler repetition ('make friends, make friends') and simplify to 'even made friends.' Use consistent past tense when referring to childhood activities. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits: 'I liked going to the park as a child.' Keep sentences concise and avoid filler repetitions.

× Actually, yes, I still go to the park because it's enjoyable. The ambience is enjoyable for me and it's reminds me of childhood memories. And these days I meet my friends in the park and we sit on the bench and talk about everything.

✓ Actually, yes, I still go to the park because it's enjoyable. The ambience is enjoyable for me and it reminds me of childhood memories. These days I meet my friends in the park and we sit on the bench and talk about everything.

'It's reminds' incorrectly combines the contraction 'it's' with the verb 'reminds'; the correct subject-verb form is 'it reminds'. The rest is present habitual so present simple ('I still go', 'I meet') is correct. Remove the extra 'And' and combine sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'it reminds me' for correct subject-verb agreement and avoid redundant conjunctions at sentence start.

× Actually, yes. See, See. More park means having more beautiful landscape, having more fresh air, because these days cities are crowded and inhabited, and inhabitants can run away to park, run away from.

✓ Actually, yes. More parks mean more beautiful landscapes and more fresh air, because these days cities are crowded, and residents can escape to parks.

'More park' should be plural 'More parks' to match the idea of increasing number. 'Means having' is awkward; use 'mean' with plural subject and parallel nouns: 'more beautiful landscapes and more fresh air.' 'Inhabited' is misused; use 'crowded' for cities and 'residents' instead of 'inhabitants' for natural phrasing. 'Run away to park' is informal and unclear; 'escape to parks' is appropriate. Suggestion: Make subjects and verbs agree in number and use natural collocations: 'parks mean' and 'residents can escape to parks.'

× Yes, uh, one of the famous park which I want to visit is uh, Gaudi park in Barcelona in Spain and it's designed by Gaudi, uh, architecture, one of the famous architectures around the world.

✓ Yes, one of the famous parks I want to visit is Gaudi Park in Barcelona, Spain, and it was designed by Gaudi, a famous architect.

'One of the famous park' should be 'one of the famous parks' (plural after 'one of the'). 'Which I want to visit' is acceptable but 'I want to visit' after the noun is more natural. 'It's designed by Gaudi, architecture, one of the famous architectures' is ungrammatical: 'architecture' is the field, not a person. Use 'it was designed by Gaudi, a famous architect.' Also use past simple 'was designed' to describe a completed action. Suggestion: Use 'one of the famous parks' and refer to Gaudi as 'a famous architect.' Use past simple when describing the design as a completed fact.

× And, uh, I think it's will be attractive. I heard some landscape there is mesmerizing.

✓ And I think it will be attractive. I heard the landscaping there is mesmerizing.

'It's will be' incorrectly combines 'it's' and 'will'; correct future tense is 'it will be.' 'I heard some landscape there is mesmerizing' is awkward: 'landscaping' or 'the landscape there' is better, and 'I heard the landscaping there is mesmerizing' matches common usage. Suggestion: Use 'it will be' for future statements and use 'landscaping' or 'the landscape' for natural phrasing; combine into clear sentences.