Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms and articles, and add one specific detail. Limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like "also" or "for example."

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were relaxing and fun. For example, I often played on the swings and tried the small rides with my friends. I also enjoyed playing outdoor games like tag and football on the grass.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and correct phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, fix collocations ("go to the park", "improve my health"), and add a specific activity. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so."

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park in my free time because it has fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. I often go for a brisk walk there to improve my fitness. Sometimes I sit on a bench and read or meet a friend.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and hesitations. Provide a direct answer about whether you want more parks or not, then give a reason with one specific detail. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" and keep it concise.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces are limited in some neighbourhoods. For example, new small parks would give families nearby places to relax and for children to play on weekends.

Sugerencia: Clarify your position and avoid contradiction. If you don't want to visit new parks, explain clearly why with specific reasons (e.g. many good parks nearby). Remove filler words and repeat information only once. Use linking words like "because" or "since."

Ejemplo: No, I don't plan to search for new parks in the future because my neighbourhood already has several good parks that I visit regularly. Since they are nearby and well-maintained, I prefer to keep going to those with my family.

× Yes, I very much like to go to the parks because it gives it gives us a relaxing vibes and we play.

✓ Yes, I very much liked going to parks because they gave us a relaxing feeling and we played.

Tense consistency and subject-verb agreement: The examiner asked about childhood, so past tense is required. 'Like' should be 'liked' and 'to go' changed to 'going' for natural phrasing in past. 'It gives it gives' is a repeated phrase and should be removed. 'Parks' is plural so the verb must match: 'they gave'. 'A relaxing vibes' mixes singular article with plural noun; change to 'a relaxing feeling' or 'relaxing vibes' without 'a'. Also change 'we play' to past 'we played'. Suggestion: use past tense throughout when describing past habits and ensure noun-verb agreement and correct article use.

× Yes, I like to go to park in my leisure time, uh, because I can enjoy the, uh, fresh atmos.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the park in my leisure time because I can enjoy the fresh atmosphere.

Article and word choice: 'go to park' needs the definite article 'the' (go to the park) when speaking generally about a usual place. 'Fresh atmos.' is incomplete and should be 'fresh atmosphere'. Tense is present and correct for current habit; maintain present tense but fix article and complete the noun.

× I can enjoy the fresh atmosphere there and, uh, walk a walk there for improve my health.

✓ I can enjoy the fresh atmosphere there and take a walk to improve my health.

Incorrect verb forms and phrase choice: 'walk a walk' is incorrect; use 'take a walk' or 'go for a walk'. 'for improve my health' is ungrammatical; after 'for' use a noun or gerund ('for improving my health') or better 'to improve my health' (infinitive of purpose). Suggest using 'take a walk to improve my health'.

× Umm, yes, there are a lot of parks in my city, uh, where I live, uh, uh, where I live and umm, and I love to explore new parks, uh, every weekend with my family, uh.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of parks in my city where I live, and I love to explore new parks every weekend with my family.

Redundancy and filler words: 'where I live' is repeated; remove repetition. Fillers like 'uh' and 'umm' should be omitted in written form. Present tense 'there are' is appropriate for current facts. Clean sentence for clarity and conciseness: keep single 'where I live' and remove extra conjunctions.

× Uh, no, uh, I don't want to go, I don't want to go and explore the new parks in my future because in my locality there are, umm, many parks, uh, where I, where I can enjoy the atmosphere and the atmosphere and.

✓ No, I don't want to explore new parks in the future because there are many parks in my locality where I can enjoy the atmosphere.

Tense and redundancy: 'in my future' is unnatural; use 'in the future'. Repetition 'I don't want to go, I don't want to go and explore' is redundant; simplify to 'I don't want to explore'. Remove repeated phrases 'where I,' and duplicate 'the atmosphere and the atmosphere and'. Present tense 'don't want' is correct for current preference about future actions. Clean sentence for clarity and correct use of articles and phrases.