Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., “umm”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “one because” → “one reason is that”, “which is specifically important for a nurturing a child” → “which was important for my development”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. One reason was that I could run around freely and explore nature, which helped my physical development; additionally, I often met friends there and we spent hours playing together.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense and smoother linking phrases. Replace awkward phrases (“use to go as frequent”) with natural expressions (“go as often”). Use connectors like “because” and “also” clearly, and combine reasons into one coherent sentence. Avoid vague quantifiers (“the amount of mosquitoes is large”) by being specific.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy parks, but I don't go as often as I did as a child because most of my friends have moved away and there are a lot of mosquitoes in the local parks, which makes visits uncomfortable.

Sugerencia: Make the response clearer and more natural. Begin with a direct statement, then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because” and “therefore”). Avoid awkward phrasing (“infrastructure ahead of me”, “parks are definitely recommended to be held in this”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Because our city is dominated by skyscrapers and concrete, we have very few places to relax in nature; therefore, adding more parks would improve residents’ well-being and provide green spaces for families.

Sugerencia: Start directly and avoid repeating similar phrases. Use specific supporting details and link them concisely. Correct small awkwardness (“seen it on post” → “seen posts about it”). Keep it within four or five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes — I would love to visit Central Park. I grew up seeing it in films, books, and social media, and it always looked peaceful and full of people enjoying outdoor activities; visiting would let me experience that atmosphere in person.

× I did indeed like going to the park as a child, one because umm, I can run around freely and just reconnect with nature, which is specifically important for a nurturing a child.

✓ I did indeed like going to the park as a child, one reason being that I could run around freely and reconnect with nature, which is especially important for nurturing a child.

The original sentence uses 'one because' and 'which is specifically important for a nurturing a child', which are awkward and include incorrect participle/phrase forms. 'One reason being that' correctly introduces the explanation using a present participle clause. 'Could' matches past reference 'as a child'. 'Especially' is the correct adverb and 'nurturing a child' should be 'nurturing a child' without extra article. Suggestion: use 'one reason being that' or 'one reason is that' and keep tense consistent for past experiences.

× And apart from that, I get to meet my friends and spend some quality time with them.

✓ Apart from that, I got to meet my friends and spend some quality time with them.

The sentence refers to childhood habits (past), so the verb should be in past tense. 'Get to meet' is present; change to 'got to meet' to match 'as a child'. Suggestion: ensure verb tenses align with the time frame mentioned.

× I do really enjoy going to parks now, however I don't really use to go as frequent as I was when I was a child.

✓ I really enjoy going to parks now; however, I didn't use to go as frequently as I did when I was a child.

The phrase 'don't really use to' is incorrect; the correct form for past habitual actions is 'didn't use to'. Also 'as frequent' should be 'as frequently' (adverb). Maintain tense consistency: compare present enjoyment with past habit using 'didn't use to'. Suggestion: use 'use to' only in negative past with 'didn't use to'.

× One because my friends have all left the neighborhood and secondly because the amount of mosquitoes that are at the park is large so I don't want to get bitten much.

✓ One reason is that my friends have all left the neighborhood, and secondly, there are a lot of mosquitoes in the park, so I don't want to get bitten.

'Amount of mosquitoes' is incorrect; countable noun 'mosquitoes' requires 'number of' or 'a lot of'. 'Is large' is awkward; better to say 'there are a lot of mosquitoes'. 'Get bitten much' is unnatural; 'get bitten' suffices or 'get bitten often'. Suggestion: use 'a lot of' or 'a large number of' with countable nouns and simplify phrasing.

× Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because there are too many large skyscrapers and just infrastructure ahead of me that we barely have any specific location to enjoy nature itself.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because there are too many skyscrapers and other infrastructure, and we hardly have any places to enjoy nature.

The original sentence has confusing structure ('ahead of me that we barely have any specific location') and redundant words ('large skyscrapers', 'itself'). Simplify and correct word order: 'skyscrapers and other infrastructure' and 'hardly have any places' is natural. Suggestion: avoid redundant modifiers and keep clauses clear and concise.

× So a large number of parks are definitely recommended to be held in this.

✓ So a large number of parks should definitely be created or built in the city.

'Recommended to be held in this' is ungrammatical and unclear. Parks are 'created', 'built', or 'established', not 'held'. Also 'in this' lacks a clear noun. Suggestion: use verbs appropriate to the noun (create/build parks) and specify location ('in the city').

× There is. In fact, I would love to go to Central Park.

✓ Yes, there is. In fact, I would love to go to Central Park.

The short reply 'There is.' is odd as an answer to 'Are there any parks you want to go to'? Use 'Yes, there is' to confirm existence. 'There is' alone is acceptable in speech but adding 'Yes' makes it clearer. Suggestion: include a confirmation word for clarity.

× I've seen it in the movies growing up and I've seen people posting about it.

✓ I've seen it in movies while growing up, and I've seen people post about it.

'In the movies growing up' needs clearer preposition and timing: 'in movies while growing up'. Also 'people posting about it' is fine colloquially but 'people post about it' is more direct. Suggestion: place time expressions clearly and use parallel verb forms.

× I've read it in books, magazines, and I've even seen it on post and it just looks so peaceful and it looks like a place where you can talk with many people.

✓ I've read about it in books and magazines, and I've even seen posts about it; it looks so peaceful and like a place where you can meet and talk with people.

'Read it in books' should be 'read about it'. 'Seen it on post' is incorrect; use 'seen posts about it' or 'seen it in posts'. Also 'talk with many people' is awkward; 'meet and talk with people' is better. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('read about', 'posts about') and vary verbs to avoid repetition.

× So yes, I would love to go there one day.

✓ So yes, I would love to go there one day.

This sentence is correct. It matches the future intention and requires no change; present conditional 'would love' appropriately expresses desire for a future action.