Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and use linking words (e.g., "because," "for example").

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because they were fun and gave me freedom to play. For example, I often played tag with neighborhood friends and we spent hours on the swings, which made me very happy.

Sugerencia: Use a clear present-tense statement and give a concise reason with one specific example. Reduce hesitations and informal fillers. Use correct vocabulary ("technology", "social media") and linking words (e.g., "because", "so").

Ejemplo: Not really — I rarely go to parks now because technology makes it easy to socialize online. For instance, I usually chat with friends on social media or play games on my phone instead of meeting them outdoors.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion with one clear reason and a specific benefit. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition. Use vocabulary like "benefit," "outdoor activities," and linking phrases such as "because" and "for example."

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide children with outdoor activities and a break from screens. For example, parks give kids space to run, play sports, and learn social skills.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a specific example of a park or country and explain why using clear comparative language. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations. Use linking words such as "because," "for example," and comparative structures like "bigger than" or "more diverse."

Ejemplo: Yes, I'd like to visit parks abroad, especially large city parks like Central Park in New York, because they are spacious and offer many activities. For example, Central Park has wide lawns, lakes, and cultural events, which seem more varied than parks in my hometown.

× Yes, I like going to parks when I was a child because I find it very enjoyable and as a child back then I really want to go outside and play with other friends or other people that makes me happy.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I found it very enjoyable, and as a child I really wanted to go outside and play with friends or other people; that made me happy.

The original mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past: 'like' -> 'liked', 'find' -> 'found', 'want' -> 'wanted', and 'makes' -> 'made'. Also remove redundant phrases ('as a child back then') and simplify for clarity. Use past tense consistently to match the time frame. Suggestion: Identify the time frame (past) and use past tense verbs for all actions referring to that period.

× I'm honestly I can't find myself to go to parks at my age because nowadays we have a very tech tacky world whereas we can umm socialize through social medias and game and play games on app.

✓ To be honest, I don't find myself going to parks at my age because nowadays we live in a very tech-savvy world where we can socialize through social media and play games on apps.

Errors include tense and form: 'I'm honestly I can't find myself to go' is awkward and mixes forms. Use present simple for current habits: 'I don't find myself going'. 'Tech tacky' is incorrect; use 'tech-savvy'. 'Social medias' should be 'social media' (uncountable). 'Game and play games on app' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'play games on apps'. Suggestion: Use standard phrases ('To be honest'), present simple for current states, correct compound adjectives ('tech-savvy'), and uncountable nouns ('social media').

× Me personally, I want to see more parks in our city because I think it is very important for us or for the children rather to have this kind of experience that that doesn't include technological world, technology world.

✓ Personally, I would like to see more parks in our city because I think it is very important for children to have experiences that do not involve the technological world.

Issues: 'Me personally' is colloquial and ungrammatical as a subject; use 'Personally' or 'I personally'. 'I want to see' is acceptable but 'I would like to see' is more polite. 'For us or for the children rather' is unclear and redundant; focus on 'children'. 'That that doesn't include technological world, technology world' has repetition and incorrect noun phrase; use 'that do not involve the technological world'. Also change verb agreement: 'experiences that do not involve' (plural subject 'experiences'). Suggestion: Use clearer subject forms, avoid repetition, and match plural subjects with plural verbs and pronouns.

× I want to try umm other countries parks because as far as I can I can see their parts are really great and umm it is very wide and if I'm gonna compare it to my country it is most umm, I don't know.

✓ I want to visit parks in other countries because, as far as I can tell, their parks are really great and very spacious; if I compare them to the parks in my country, they are mostly better, but I'm not sure.

Problems: 'other countries parks' should be 'parks in other countries' (word order). 'As far as I can I can see' is redundant; use 'as far as I can tell'. 'Their parts' is a typo for 'their parks'. 'It is very wide' should be 'they are very spacious' to agree with plural 'parks'. 'If I'm gonna compare' is informal; use 'if I compare'. 'It is most' is unclear; 'they are mostly better' is clearer. Maintain consistent tense and correct plural agreement. Suggestion: Use correct noun order ('parks in other countries'), avoid fillers ('umm'), use formal future/conditional forms ('I want to visit', 'if I compare'), and ensure plural agreement.