Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and correct grammar, give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'swings', 'have picnics') and avoid small errors. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child. There was a park next to our house where my friends and I would play on the swings, run races and sometimes have picnics on the grass.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence, fix grammatical mistakes and be concise. Use a linking word to add reason and give a specific example of what you do there to show relevance.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy parks, and I appreciate them more as an adult because they help me relax. For example, I often sit on a bench and read or take a short walk after work to clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Provide a direct topic sentence, then expand with clear reasons and one specific example. Avoid sentence fragments and repeat ideas more precisely.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because children need safe spaces to play and socialise. For instance, adding small neighbourhood parks with playgrounds would encourage outdoor activities and community interaction.

Sugerencia: Make your answer complete and grammatically correct. Give a clear topic sentence and then one specific detail. Clarify unclear points (e.g., what 'Rd. rules' means) and avoid trailing off. Use linking words to explain purpose.

Ejemplo: I don't have a specific park in mind, but I would like parks that offer educational facilities. For example, a traffic-safety park where children can learn road rules and practice riding bicycles safely would be very useful.

× Of course. Actually, there's a nearby park in our house and I used to play there with my friends.

✓ Of course. Actually, there's a park near our house and I used to play there with my friends.

The phrase 'a nearby park in our house' is incorrect use of 'in'. Use 'near' to indicate proximity to the house. 'There's a park near our house' correctly uses 'there is' (there be) plus correct preposition.

× We used to play swigs, run around and sometimes do picnic.

✓ We used to play swings, run around and sometimes have a picnic.

The word 'swigs' is a misspelling of 'swings'. 'Do picnic' is incorrect collocation; the correct verb is 'have' for 'have a picnic'. This requires correct verb choice and noun form.

× Yes, I still like going to parks, in fact I appreciate it more now than I'm an adult.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks; in fact I appreciate them more now that I'm an adult.

Mismatch in reference: 'parks' is plural so refer with 'them'. The comparative clause should be 'now that I'm an adult' not 'than I'm an adult'. Also punctuation improved for clarity.

× It just feels relaxing and just to nothing after work.

✓ It just feels relaxing and like doing nothing after work.

The phrase 'just to nothing' is ungrammatical. Use 'like doing nothing' or 'as if doing nothing' where 'doing' is the gerund form required after 'like' to express activity.

× I would like to see more parks in our city for children to have space to play and to socialize with their friends.

✓ I would like to see more parks in our city so that children have space to play and socialize with their friends.

Original sentence is understandable but awkward: 'for children to have' is acceptable but 'so that children have' makes purpose clearer and parallelizes 'play and socialize' without extra 'to' before the second verb.

× Just run around and enjoy being a kid.

✓ They can just run around and enjoy being kids.

Fragment: 'Just run around...' lacks a subject in context. Adding 'They can' connects to previous sentence about children. Also 'kid' should be plural 'kids' to match 'children'.

× Nothing in particular really, but I really want a park that they can learn Rd. rules, they can learn to drive on their own and just.

✓ Nothing in particular, really, but I would like a park where children can learn road rules, practice riding or driving safely on their own, and so on.

Run-on and unclear fragments: 'park that they can learn Rd. rules' is ungrammatical — use 'a park where children can learn road rules'. Abbreviations like 'Rd.' should be written 'road'. 'They can learn to drive on their own and just.' is incomplete; expand to 'practice riding or driving safely on their own, and so on' to complete the idea. Also 'I really want a park' changed to 'I would like a park' for formality and consistency.