Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make your answer grammatically correct, more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear words (e.g. “academic”) and redundant phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks with my grandparents when I was a child. For example, there was a large square in one park where many families gathered, and I used to sit there eating snacks while watching people and performances.

Sugerencia: Improve fluency by removing hesitations and correcting verb forms; keep it concise and include a linking phrase to explain reason and result. Use precise vocabulary such as “relieve stress” or “clear my mind.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially when I feel stressed. For instance, I often ride my bike there because cycling helps relieve my anxiety and clears my mind.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion, then explain with a clear reason using linking words. Correct plural and article use, and avoid contradictory fragments. If suggesting alternatives, state them clearly.

Ejemplo: I don't think we need many more parks in my city because we already have enough green spaces. Instead, I believe the government should prioritize spending on healthcare and education to address more urgent needs.

Sugerencia: Remove fillers and organize your answer: give a clear statement, then a supporting detail with a reason. Correct grammar (e.g., “parks” not “parts”) and use descriptive vocabulary.

Ejemplo: To be honest, I have visited most parks in my city, so I don't have new ones on my list. However, I would happily revisit Yuexiu Park because it is very beautiful and has lovely gardens and historic sites.

× Yes, and my grandparents always took me to the parks.

✓ Yes, my grandparents always took me to the park.

Use of the definite article is wrong: 'the parks' implies specific multiple parks; native phrasing for childhood visits is usually 'the park' or 'parks' without 'the'. Use 'the park' when referring to a familiar local park or 'parks' without 'the' for parks in general. Suggestion: choose 'the park' if you mean a specific place you visited regularly.

× I still remember there is a square in the park is very big and academic many people and but I always eating some snack in.

✓ I still remember there was a square in the park that was very big and attracted many people, and I always ate some snacks there.

Multiple errors: tense and structure. 'There is' should match past context, so use 'there was' (Grammar problem type 3 and 5). 'is very big and academic many people' is ungrammatical; 'academic' is wrong word choice; correct is 'attracted many people' or 'had many people'. 'I always eating' uses incorrect verb form; use past simple 'I always ate'. Also add 'there' to show location. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use correct verb forms and vocabulary.

× Yes uh, especially when I feels, when I feel stressed, I will ride, ride a bike in, in the park and I think it can help me alleviate my anxiety and help me refresh myself.

✓ Yes, especially when I feel stressed, I ride a bike in the park because it helps me alleviate my anxiety and refresh myself.

Errors: 'feels' is third person singular but subject is 'I', so use 'feel' (type 2). Using 'will ride' is unnecessary for habitual action; use present simple 'ride' (type 6). 'Help me refresh myself' is acceptable but 'helps me' agrees with singular subject 'it' (type 27). Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions, match verb forms to subjects, and remove hesitations.

× I think the number of park in my city is enough and I think the government should spend more money in medicine or education parts.

✓ I think the number of parks in my city is enough, and the government should spend more money on healthcare or education.

'Number of park' should be plural: 'number of parks' (type 1). Preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'spend money on' (type 11). 'Medicine or education parts' is awkward; use 'healthcare or education' or 'medical care and education'. Suggestion: use plural nouns after 'number of' and the correct preposition 'on' with 'spend money'.

× Not on the parts and but they can build.

✓ Not on parks, but on other services; they can still build new parks if needed.

This fragment is ungrammatical and unclear. Conjunctions 'and but' are redundant and incorrect (type 16). Also 'parts' is vague. Suggest rephrasing to contrast funding priorities: 'Not on parks, but on other services' or 'They should prioritize healthcare and education rather than building more parks.'

× Umm, to be honest, I, I've already been to all parks in my city, so I haven't had any parts I want to go in the future, but I can go to Yuexiu Park, uh, repeatedly because there is very beautiful.

✓ To be honest, I've already been to all the parks in my city, so I don't have any parks I want to visit in the future, but I can go to Yuexiu Park repeatedly because it is very beautiful.

Errors: 'all parks' typically needs the definite article 'the parks' when referring to parks in the city (type 22). 'I haven't had any parts I want to go' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't have any parks I want to visit' (sentence structure error, type 26). 'There is very beautiful' should be 'it is very beautiful' (incorrect use of pronoun 'there' and verb 'is' for subject; type 12 and 6). Suggest using correct articles, clearer sentence structure, and correct pronouns.