Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. "work as a child", "HMM") and excessive hesitation. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas. Keep it to 2–4 concise sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a fun escape. For example, I used to spend hours on the swings and play games on the grass with friends. Those visits felt carefree and made my weekends special.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid long, unclear explanations about other people's opinions. Reduce repetition ("still" and "because" twice) and filler words ("uh"). Provide one clear reason and one short specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect reason and example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a busy day. For instance, I often walk there to clear my mind and read a book on a bench for half an hour.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion (yes/no) first, then support it with a specific reason and one suggestion. Remove hesitations and repetition. Use linking words like "because", "so", or "for example" to organise your answer and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are currently only a few public green spaces. For example, adding small neighbourhood parks would give families a nearby place to exercise and children to play safely.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct answer naming the park, then give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit. Avoid vague or confusing phrases ("modern boundary") and filler words. Use linking words such as "because", "for example", or "and" to make the response coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Madan Bhandari Park in Ulabari because it is famous for its beautiful scenery and historical monuments. I want to walk around the gardens and learn about the local history there.

× I still like going to work as a child because it was a cute free time.

✓ I used to like going to the park as a child because it was a pleasant free time.

The original mixes present tense 'I still like' with 'as a child' (past). This is a sentence structure and tense mismatch. Also 'work' is likely wrong context and 'cute free time' is unidiomatic. Use 'used to' for past habits and 'pleasant' for natural adjective choice. Suggestion: replace 'I still like' with 'I used to like', 'work' with 'the park', and 'cute free time' with 'a pleasant free time.'

× Or I could just enjoy HMM and have fun without any worries about financial issues and nervousness, where I especially enjoy playing on the swing and going Parkway.

✓ I could just enjoy myself and have fun without any worries about financial issues or nervousness; I especially enjoyed playing on the swings and going to the park.

Problems: inappropriate preposition 'going Parkway' (missing 'to' and incorrect noun), awkward 'enjoy HMM' (unclear), and tense inconsistency. Also 'playing on the swing' should be plural 'swings' and 'enjoy' should match past context 'enjoyed'. Use 'enjoy myself' instead of 'enjoy HMM', 'going to the park' instead of 'going Parkway', and correct verb tense.

× I still definitely like going to parks now because it is still a stress free time for me because according to my parents, they always, uh, declare me that uh, until they are having uh, residing in my life as a, uh, guide I don't have to worry about.

✓ I definitely still like going to parks because it is a stress-free time for me. My parents always tell me that as long as they are in my life to guide me, I do not need to worry.

Errors include wordy and incorrect phrases: 'declare me that' is wrong (use 'tell me that'), 'until they are having residing in my life' is ungrammatical; use 'as long as they are in my life'. Also hyphenate 'stress-free' and remove filler words. Adjust present tense and subject-verb constructions for clarity.

× I probably like to see more parks in my city because, uh, it has, uh, only a few, uh, parks in my cities that have been, uh, being prominent.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because it has only a few parks.

Use 'would like' for expressing preference rather than 'probably like'. Remove redundant and ungrammatical phrases 'parks in my cities that have been being prominent'. Keep simple present 'it has only a few parks.' This corrects modal usage and simplifies meaning.

× But, uh, according to my perspective, I would like to have some more parks in my city that should be developed as well as.

✓ From my perspective, I would like the city to develop more parks.

Original is wordy and uses incorrect phrase 'should be developed as well as.' Simplify to clear subject and verb: 'I would like the city to develop more parks' or 'I would like more parks to be developed.' This fixes sentence structure and awkward phrasing.

× I definitely like to go a park called Madan Bhandari, which is lies in the Ulabari, uh, and it is especially known for its breathtaking, uh, beauty and historical monuments where we can know the history of modern boundary there about enjoying as well.

✓ I would definitely like to go to a park called Madan Bhandari, which lies in Ulabari. It is known for its breathtaking beauty and historical monuments where we can learn about modern history.

Errors: 'go a park' should be 'go to a park'; 'which is lies' has extra auxiliary 'is'—use 'which lies in Ulabari.' 'We can know the history' is nonnative; use 'learn about the history.' 'Modern boundary' is unclear; changed to 'modern history' for coherence. Removed filler words and corrected verb forms and prepositions.