Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Fix tense and word order (use past simple consistently), remove fillers and redundancy. Use linking words like "usually" or "often" to make the timeline clear.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. Usually after dinner I would go with my brother or friends, and we often played on the swings or had picnics near the pond.

Sugerencia: Improve fluency by using natural phrasing and correcting grammar (use "feel stressed" instead of "feel the very stressful"). Keep it concise: one topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word (e.g., "because").

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax when I'm stressed. For example, if I have many assignments, I take a walk there to clear my mind and focus better.

Sugerencia: Use simpler, accurate vocabulary and organize the idea: a clear opinion, then one specific reason. Avoid uncertain or incorrect technical terms (e.g., "biophiliac" → "biophilic"; "suspended sustainable developments" is unclear). Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I study interior design and appreciate biophilic design. For example, more green spaces would improve residents' wellbeing and support sustainable urban development.

Sugerencia: Be direct and avoid fillers. Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific detail about where you go and why. Use present/future simple appropriately ("I don't have a specific park I want to visit"; "I usually go to parks near my home").

Ejemplo: I don't have a particular park I want to visit, but I usually go to nearby parks close to my home or school. I go there whenever I have free time to read or relax.

× Yes, I really like to go to a park.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to parks.

The question asks about childhood (past). The student used present tense 'like' which mismatches time. Change to past tense 'liked' and plural 'parks' to reflect repeated childhood activity. Use gerund 'going' for natural collocation.

× When I was a little child I especially I after I finish my dinner with my family, I will went to the park with my brother or some friends.

✓ When I was a child, especially after I finished dinner with my family, I would go to the park with my brother or some friends.

Multiple errors: tense and auxiliary misuse. 'When I was a little child' is acceptable but 'a child' is more natural. 'After I finish' should be past 'after I finished'. 'I will went' mixes future 'will' with past 'went'; use 'would go' or 'went'. 'Especially' placement adjusted. Use commas for clarity.

× Yes, I still really enjoy going to the park, especially when I feel the very stressful or I have to do many assignments or some projects from school, I will go to the park and relax.

✓ Yes, I still really enjoy going to the park, especially when I feel very stressed or when I have many assignments or projects from school; I go to the park to relax.

Use adjective 'stressed' instead of 'stressful' to describe a person. Remove unnecessary article 'the'. Replace 'I will go' with simple present 'I go' for habitual action. Use 'when' for parallel clauses and a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses.

× Yes, I really love to see more and more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I would really like to see more parks in my city.

The question asks about preference for future development; 'would like' is more natural for desires. 'Love to see more and more parks' is wordy; 'more parks' suffices. Use 'see' meaning 'have' parks in the city.

× You know, I'm a interior design student.

✓ You know, I'm an interior design student.

Use the article 'an' before vowel sound 'interior'. This is an article/phonetic rule affecting adjective phrase.

× I know the importance of the biophiliac design and the natural world is very important for the city development, especially the suspended sustainable developments.

✓ I know the importance of biophilic design; the natural world is very important for city development, especially for sustainable, resilient developments.

'Biophilic' is the correct adjective form, not 'biophiliac'. Avoid repeating 'important'. 'City development' without 'the' is natural. 'Suspended sustainable developments' is unclear; perhaps 'sustainable, resilient developments' better expresses meaning. Use semicolon to link related ideas.

× No, I don't have a specific one to I really want to go to, but I just will uh, select some parts around my home or my umm, school.

✓ No, I don't have a specific park I really want to go to, but I will just choose some places near my home or my school.

Remove extra 'to' and reorder 'a specific one I really want to go to'. Use 'will choose' for future intention; 'select' is formal—'choose' is more natural. 'Parts' replaced with 'places'. Remove filler sounds in written answer.

× I just go there when I have time.

✓ I usually go there when I have time.

Add 'usually' to indicate habitual action; original sentence is grammatically acceptable but adding an adverb clarifies frequency. Present simple 'go' matches habitual meaning.