Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce redundancy and correct small grammar issues (e.g., use past tense consistently: "we played", "we lay" -> "we would lie"). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my father and I often played soccer on the field, and afterwards we would lie on the grass and talk about our day, which helped me relax and feel closer to him.

Sugerencia: Remove fillers ("uh") and tighten the structure: give a direct topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetitive phrases ("I like walking" and "getting a good walk" say same thing).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax. For instance, I often go for a brisk walk there to clear my mind and have some quiet alone time.

Sugerencia: Make your opinion precise and avoid repeating the same idea. Start with a direct statement, then support it with a reason and an example. Improve grammar ("in such a developing city") and vary vocabulary (e.g., "residents" rather than "people").

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would allow residents to connect with nature in our rapidly developing city; for example, new green spaces can reduce stress and provide safe play areas for children.

Sugerencia: Be specific and avoid repeating phrases. Use correct grammar ("it has" not "it have") and combine related points. Give a brief reason why you want to visit and, if possible, a detail about the park.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Unity Park in Addis Ababa because it houses many animals and diverse plant species; I’m especially interested in seeing the native wildlife exhibits and the historical gardens.

× 'Yes, I used to go to the park with my family, especially my father, where we play soccer on the field or lay down on the grass and have a good conversation and it was an amazing experience because it helps me unwind and bond with my father.'

✓ 'Yes, I used to go to the park with my family, especially my father, where we played soccer on the field or lay down on the grass and had good conversations; it was an amazing experience because it helped me unwind and bond with my father.'

'Present tense verbs play and have are inconsistent with the past-time marker used to; the sentence describes habitual actions in the past, so verbs should be in past tense (played, had) and the clause about the experience should also be past (helped). Use of past tense keeps temporal consistency and clarity.'

× 'Yes, I do uh, like going to the parks because the first thing is it helps me relax and also I like walking so parks are a great place to have alone time while getting a good walk.'

✓ 'Yes, I do like going to parks because firstly it helps me relax and I also like walking, so parks are a great place to have alone time while getting a good walk.'

'Redundant filler uh removed; the phrase the parks is unnecessary here, general plural parks is better. 'The first thing is' is informal and awkward; use firstly. The verbs and tense are present and appropriate; adjustments improve clarity and formality.'

× 'Yes, and in fact, authorities are building different parks across the city and it really helps the people to connect with nature especially in such developing city.'

✓ 'Yes, in fact authorities are building different parks across the city, and it really helps people connect with nature, especially in a developing city.'

'It helps the people' is wordy; use 'helps people'. 'Such developing city' is ungrammatical; use 'a developing city'. Present continuous 'are building' is correct because this is a current ongoing action; corrections focus on article use and idiomatic phrasing (Grammar problem type 17 and 11 also relevant, but main issue fixed within present tense consistency).'

× 'And yes, I would love to see a lot of parks in the future.'

✓ 'Yes, I would love to see many parks in the future.'

'A lot of' is conversational; 'many' is more appropriate and concise in this context. The original tense and modality (would love) suit a future preference; change improves register and clarity.'

× 'Yes, there is one park that I would love to visit here in Addis Ababa, which is the Unity Park because it has a lot of animals to visit and also it have a lot of different species to visit.'

✓ 'Yes, there is one park that I would love to visit here in Addis Ababa, Unity Park, because it has many animals and different species to see.'

'It have' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'it has' should be used. Also 'a lot of animals to visit' is awkward—animals are seen or observed, not visited. Replaced with 'many animals' and 'to see' for correct collocation and clarity.'