Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise, correct obvious mistakes, and use a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words (umm). Also correct the place-name error (“Paris” → “parks”) and use past tense consistently. Use a linking word to connect reason.

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t like going to parks when I was a child. I grew up in a small town with almost no public parks, so I rarely had the chance to play outside. As a result, I didn’t form a habit of visiting parks.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, then add specific details and a clear linking phrase. Remove fillers and unclear phrases (e.g., “prejudice”—explain what you mean). Keep to 2–4 sentences max and use present tense for current habits.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I study near West Lake in Hangzhou, so I often visit that large, scenic park to relax after classes. However, when I was a freshman I felt shy about going alone, but now I go regularly with friends.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and simply, then give two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and word confusion (e.g., “decoding pro protect”). Use specific benefits of more parks (health, environment, recreation).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would improve air quality and give people places to exercise and relax. In addition, they would help protect green areas and benefit the whole community.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct statement of interest, then give specific examples of parks or countries and one reason. Avoid vague phrases like “upward” and “leave a lot of things in the board.” Use linking words (because, for example) and correct grammar (I want → I would like).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit famous parks abroad, such as Stanley Park in Canada or Hyde Park in London, because they all offer different landscapes and cultural experiences. For example, Stanley Park has vast sea views, while Hyde Park is known for its historic monuments.

× No, I didn't like going to Paris as a child 'cause when I, umm, when I was a small child, I live in a small town where there were not many opportunities for me to go to the park because there aren't many parks around my house.

✓ No, I didn't like going to parks as a child because when I was a small child, I lived in a small town where there were not many opportunities for me to go to the park because there weren't many parks around my house.

The sentence mixes past and present verbs incorrectly. 'I live' and 'there aren't' should be in the past tense to match 'didn't like' and 'when I was a small child'. Use past simple 'lived' and 'weren't'. Also 'Paris' is likely a typo for 'parks'; correct to 'parks'. Suggestion: keep all time references consistent by using past tense when talking about childhood events.

× Umm, yes, umm, umm, nowadays I study in college, uh, nearby the Westlake in Hangzhou. So uh, that is a natural park for me. And umm, as a freshman of the college, I always have a little prejudice. So when I go to parks.

✓ Umm, yes, nowadays I study at college near West Lake in Hangzhou, so that is a natural park for me. As a freshman at college, I had a little prejudice, so I did not often go to parks.

The original mixes present and past meaning and contains incomplete sentence. 'Study in college' is better as 'study at college' or 'study at university'. 'Westlake' should be 'West Lake'. The clause 'I always have a little prejudice' conflicts with talking about being a freshman (past context), so change to past 'had'. The final fragment 'So when I go to parks.' is incomplete; turn into complete past meaning 'so I did not often go to parks.' Suggestion: ensure prepositions and place names are correct and complete sentences express full ideas.

× With the development of decoding umm pro protect on the nature protective environment is an important umm, it's an important calling for the whole society and all of the citizens.

✓ With development and increased protection of the natural environment, environmental protection is an important responsibility for society and all citizens.

The original contains word choice errors and poor sentence structure ('decoding umm pro protect on the nature protective environment' is ungrammatical). Replace with clear noun phrases: 'development and increased protection of the natural environment'. 'Calling' is awkward; 'responsibility' fits better. Suggestion: simplify and use standard collocations like 'environmental protection' and 'all citizens'.

× Umm yeah I wanna go to some parks upward cause I haven't been to other countries and I believe that different countries have different parks and there will be different views for me and there still leave a lot of things in the board.

✓ Umm, yeah, I want to go to parks abroad because I haven't been to other countries, and I believe that different countries have different parks and different views for me, and there are still many things I want to see.

Informal 'wanna' should be 'want to'. 'Upward' is incorrect for traveling abroad; use 'abroad' or 'in other countries'. 'There still leave a lot of things in the board' is ungrammatical; change to 'there are still many things I want to see'. Suggestion: use standard modal/verb forms and clearer phrases for travel ('abroad'), and avoid literal translations that break English syntax.