Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details, using linking words (for example, "because" or "and"). Correct verb tenses (e.g., "I preferred"), plural forms, and articles. Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child because I often went there with friends and sometimes with my grandmother. For example, we would walk among the trees in the evenings and she would teach me about different plants, which I found both beautiful and educational.

Sugerencia: Use a direct topic sentence and correct present tense forms. Avoid filler phrases like "If you talk about in this modern era." Limit to one or two clear supporting points and use linking words ("because," "so"). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "relaxed" rather than "relaxed mind").

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go with friends because being in nature helps me relax and improves my mood, and we often learn about local plants and birds while walking.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons. Correct grammar ("There are only two or three parks") and remove redundancies. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and give one concrete example (e.g., "spacious lawns for families").

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city. There are only two or three now, and although they are beautiful and spacious, having more parks would give residents additional places to exercise, relax, and spend time with family in the evenings.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer and a specific future plan. Use clear conditional phrasing ("If I have the opportunity...") and correct country name/form ("Canada" not "the Canada"). Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Mention one reason why that park appeals to you.

Ejemplo: I don't have a specific local park in mind, but if I could visit any park in the future, I would choose a national park in Canada because I have seen photos of vast forests and lakes there and I want to experience the scenery and wildlife in person.

× Yes, whenever when I was a child, I usually prefer to go to park with my friends and sometime with my grandmother because we have spare time in the evening and spending the time in the nature, it seems to be very beautiful and it's also give valuable knowledge about the nature, how the plants are growing and so more.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I usually preferred to go to the park with my friends and sometimes with my grandmother because we had spare time in the evening and spent time in nature; it seemed very beautiful and it also gave valuable knowledge about nature, such as how plants grow.

Problems: sentence contains redundant conjunctions ('whenever when'), wrong verb tenses (present 'prefer' vs past 'was a child', present 'have' vs past 'had', gerund use 'spending' instead of past 'spent'), article errors ('go to park' should be 'go to the park'), adverb form ('sometime' -> 'sometimes'), incorrect verb form 'give' -> 'gave', and wordiness ('and so more'). Suggestion: remove redundant words, match verb tenses to past narrative, use correct articles, use plural/verb forms correctly, and replace vague phrase with specific example 'such as how plants grow'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent past tense throughout the sentence.

× If you talk about in this modern era, yes I like to go park daily with my friends because it gave us a very very good vibe from the nature and also spending time in nature can make us relaxed mind and also a good knowledge.

✓ In this modern era, yes, I like to go to the park daily with my friends because it gives us a very good feeling from nature, and spending time in nature can relax our minds and provide useful knowledge.

Problems: unnecessary phrase 'If you talk about', missing article 'to the park', inconsistent tense ('gave' should be present 'gives' to match 'I like'), awkward word choices ('vibe' -> 'feeling', 'relaxed mind' -> 'relax our minds'), and gerund/infinitive clarity. Suggestion: remove filler phrase, use correct articles, maintain present tense for habitual actions, choose natural collocations ('gives a good feeling', 'relax our minds', 'provide knowledge').

× If you talk about my city, there are only two to three parks, no more than but the park which are which are in my city that are very beautiful and they have it is it was very spacious and every individual spend their spare time in the spare time of their evenings.

✓ In my city, there are only two or three parks, no more than that, but the parks in my city are very beautiful and spacious, and many people spend their spare time there in the evenings.

Problems: unnecessary 'If you talk about', incorrect phrase 'two to three' better as 'two or three', incorrect relative clause and repetition ('which are which are'), subject-verb agreement ('park' -> 'parks' and 'are' not 'is'), tense confusion ('have it is it was'), verb form 'spend' should agree with 'many people' -> 'spend' (keeps plural) but sentence improved to 'many people spend'. Article issues and redundancy ('spare time in the spare time'). Suggestion: simplify structure, use correct plural nouns and agreement, remove repetition, and place time phrase 'in the evenings' at sentence end for clarity.

× Since we if talk about a park that I want to visit in the future and I do not think about that park yet. But yes, if I have opportunity to visit visit that kind of park, I will definitely choose a park which is situated in the Canada and that was a very beautiful park.

✓ If we talk about a park I want to visit in the future, I have not thought about a specific park yet. But if I have the opportunity to visit such a park, I will definitely choose a park in Canada because it would be very beautiful.

Problems: mixed and redundant subordinators ('Since we if talk about'), awkward tense use ('do not think about that park yet' -> present perfect 'have not thought about a specific park yet'), duplicated word 'visit visit', missing article 'the opportunity', incorrect preposition/article 'in the Canada' -> 'in Canada', tense inconsistency in final clause ('that was' -> 'would be' to express hypothetical future). Suggestion: simplify conditional structure, use present perfect to indicate an action not yet completed, include definite article where needed, correct prepositions, and use 'would be' or 'would seem' for hypothetical descriptions.