Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 시제와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 답변은 직접적인 주제문으로 시작하고, 추가 설명은 연결어를 사용해 명확하고 구체적으로 이어야 합니다. 예: ‘I liked going to parks as a child.’로 시작한 뒤 언제, 누구와 갔는지(예: 가족, 친구), 어떤 활동(예: 자전거 타기, 소풍), 그로 인한 느낌(즐거움, 기운이 남) 등을 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 또한 ‘in front of my apartment’ 같은 장소 표현은 문맥에 맞게 배치하고 불필요한 단어(‘to me’)는 제거하세요.

Ejemplo: I liked going to parks as a child. There were small parks in front of my apartment where I often rode my bike and played with friends. Because we spent time outdoors and exercised, I usually felt happy and full of energy afterwards.

Sugerencia: 응답이 긍정적이지만 문법과 표현에 개선이 필요합니다. ‘Yes I am’은 부자연스럽고 ‘I like picnic at Park’도 어색합니다. 주제문으로 ‘Yes, I still enjoy going to parks’처럼 시작하고, 장소(공원 이름), 위치 설명(Hangang 근처), 활동(배달음식 먹기), 이유(왜 행복한지)를 연결어로 논리적으로 제시하세요. 또한 시제 일관성을 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. My favorite is Ducom Park, which is located near the Hangang River. I often go there with friends and we order delivery food to enjoy a picnic. Those relaxed gatherings always make me feel very happy.

Sugerencia: 표현과 문법이 많이 어색합니다. 질문에 바로 답한 뒤 이유와 구체적 예를 연결하세요. 예를 들어 ‘Yes, I would’로 시작하고 ‘새로운 공원을 방문하면 상쾌함을 느끼며 가족과 함께 걷는 것이 스트레스를 줄인다’는 식으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. ‘working with my family’는 의미가 모호하니 ‘walking with my family’처럼 정확한 동사를 사용하세요. 또한 ‘seek more new parts’ 대신 ‘discover more parks’를 쓰세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Visiting new parks with my family refreshes me, and walking together helps us relax. For that reason, I enjoy discovering new green spaces whenever I can.

Sugerencia: 응답이 의도는 알 수 있지만 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 많습니다. ‘Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in the future’처럼 명확한 주제문을 쓰고, 위치(large city), 이유(보고 싶었던 풍경), 하고 싶은 활동(걷기, 달리기, 운동)을 연결어로 자연스럽게 설명하세요. ‘It surprised me if I can go there’는 의미가 불분명하므로 ‘I would be excited to go there’로 바꾸세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in the future. It is in a large city and I have always been curious about its scenery. I would love to walk there with a friend, go for a run, or do other exercises in the wide open space.

× Yes, I am in front of my apartment there are small parks so I usually ride a bike or work.

✓ Yes. In front of my apartment there are small parks, so I usually ride a bike or walk.

The original sentence is a run-on with missing punctuation and an incorrect verb 'work' instead of 'walk'. Break into clauses and use the correct verb. Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' when joining independent clauses and correct 'work' to 'walk' to match the intended activity. Suggestion: Separate ideas with a period or comma + conjunction, and choose verbs that match the action described.

× We walk with my friend or family.

✓ I walk with my friend or my family.

The subject 'We' conflicts with earlier 'I' and the phrase 'my friend or family' needs possessive consistency. Use 'I' to match previous sentences and include 'my' before 'family' for clarity. Suggestion: Maintain consistent subjects across sentences and use possessive adjectives for clarity.

× It makes me happy and energized to me.

✓ It makes me feel happy and energized.

Redundant phrasing 'to me' is unnecessary after 'makes me'. Also use 'feel' after 'makes me' to form a natural expression. Suggestion: Avoid repeating the object and include a linking verb like 'feel' for natural expression.

× Yes I am. I like picnic at Park.

✓ Yes, I do. I like having picnics in parks.

'Yes I am' is inappropriate; respond 'Yes, I do' to 'Do you still like...'. 'I like picnic at Park' has noun/verb and article errors; use 'having picnics' and plural 'parks' or 'the park' depending on context. Suggestion: Use 'do' for short answers to 'Do' questions and use gerund or plural form for habitual activities.

× My favorite spot is Ducom Park. It is located middle of Hangang and I used to go there with my friends and eat some delivery food.

✓ My favorite spot is Ducom Park. It is located in the middle of the Han River area, and I used to go there with my friends and eat delivery food.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'the middle' and missing article 'the' before 'middle'. 'Hangang' is better rendered as 'the Han River area' in English; 'some' before 'delivery food' is unnecessary. Add a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. Suggestion: Use 'in the middle of' for location and include definite article when necessary; simplify quantifiers like 'some' when not needed.

× It makes me very happy.

✓ It makes me very happy.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Suggestion: None.

× Yes, sometimes I go to new park with my family for walking.

✓ Yes, sometimes I go to a new park with my family for a walk.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'new park'. 'For walking' is unnatural; use 'for a walk' to express purpose. Suggestion: Use articles before singular countable nouns and prefer 'for a walk' for the activity.

× New park made me feel refreshed and working with my family made me relaxing so I like seek more new parts.

✓ The new park made me feel refreshed, and spending time with my family made me relaxed, so I like to look for more new parks.

Tense and form problems: add 'the' before 'new park', use past tense 'made' correctly but change 'working with' to 'spending time with' to match meaning. 'Made me relaxing' is incorrect; use 'made me relaxed' or 'made me feel relaxed'. 'I like seek' should be 'I like to look for' or 'I want to seek'. 'parts' is a typo for 'parks'. Suggestion: Keep consistent tense, use correct verb forms for causative 'make' + object + adjective, and correct vocabulary typos.

× Yes, I want to go to Central Park. It is located at Big City and it surprised me if I can go there.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Central Park. It is located in a big city, and I would be surprised if I could go there.

Preposition: use 'in' a big city. 'It surprised me if I can go there' mixes tenses and modality; use conditional phrasing 'I would be surprised if I could go there' or 'I will be surprised if I can go there'. Suggestion: Match tense and modality in conditional expressions and use correct prepositions for location.

× I want walk me my friend or running or other exercise there.

✓ I want to walk there with my friend or go running or do other exercises there.

Unclear and ungrammatical pronoun and verb order. Use 'walk there with my friend' for clarity and parallel structure 'go running' or 'do other exercises'. Suggestion: Use parallel gerund or infinitive forms and place the object/location appropriately.