Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful to answer the question directly and stay on topic. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child."), then give 1–2 specific supporting details (where you played, what you did) using linking words. Avoid irrelevant statements (e.g., about current hobbies) in this response. Also correct basic grammar (tense and articles) and reduce repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I often played tag and rode a small bicycle there with my neighbors, which helped me make friends. Because the park was near my house, I went almost every weekend and liked the open space and swings.

Sugerencia: Your answer is mostly relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Begin with a direct response ("Not really" or "Only sometimes") and then explain with a reason and an example. Use linking words such as "however" or "unless" to make the logic smoother. Correct modal verb usage and word order for naturalness.

Ejemplo: Not really — I only go to parks occasionally. For instance, I would go if friends invited me to meet there; otherwise I prefer to spend free time at home watching films, so I usually don't visit parks by myself.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and add more specific reasons and a wider perspective. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 2 specific benefits of more parks (for children’s play, public health, community space) using linking words like "because" and "also." Avoid repeating phrases and the abrupt negative personal comment; instead contrast briefly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they offer safe places for children to play and encourage families to spend time outdoors. Moreover, parks improve air quality and provide green spaces for exercise and relaxation, although personally I may visit them less often.

Sugerencia: Be specific and correct unclear phrases (e.g., "Everyone Park" and "room destination" are unclear). Begin with a clear statement of the park name and location, then explain why you want to visit with specific reasons (features, attractions). Use correct vocabulary for travel (destination, attraction) and avoid hesitation words. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes — I would like to visit Everland Park in South Korea, which is a famous theme park. I want to go because it has many rides, seasonal festivals, and beautiful gardens, and visiting would let me experience Korean culture. I hope to save money and travel there within the next few years.

× Yes, I love going to work.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks.

The student is answering a question about childhood ('Did you like going to parks as a child?') so the past tense should be used. 'Love' is present; change to 'loved'. Also the content 'going to work' is likely incorrect contextually; it should be 'going to parks.' Use past simple for habitual past actions: 'I loved going to parks.'

× When I was a child, I remember that I always wanted to go outside of our house because I want to play with other kids.

✓ When I was a child, I remember that I always wanted to go outside our house because I wanted to play with other kids.

Mixed tenses: 'When I was a child' and 'always wanted' are past, but 'I want' is present. Use past 'wanted' to keep tense consistency. Also 'go outside of our house' is awkward; 'go outside our house' or 'leave the house' is better.

× But now that I am adult, I am al already 21 years old.

✓ But now that I am an adult, I am already 21 years old.

Missing article 'an' before 'adult' (article problem but primarily pronoun/article mix). Typo 'al already' should be 'already'. Use 'an adult' because 'adult' is a singular countable noun starting with a vowel sound.

× I like spending my free time alone.

✓ I like spending my free time alone.

Sentence is correct; present simple is appropriate to express current habitual preference. No change needed.

× I like watching movies.

✓ I like watching movies.

Sentence is correct; present simple expresses current preference. No change needed.

× Maybe if my friends asked me to hang out with them then I will probably go.

✓ Maybe if my friends asked me to hang out with them, I would probably go.

Conditional sentence: 'if my friends asked' is second conditional (unlikely/polite), so the result clause should use 'would' not 'will'. Also add a comma after the if-clause and remove redundant 'then'.

× But on a random if you ask me that if I want to go in the park on a random day just by myself, I don't think I will do that because like what I've said earlier, I like spending my free time alone.

✓ But if you ask me on a random day whether I want to go to the park by myself, I don't think I would, because as I said earlier, I like spending my free time alone.

Awkward word order and redundancy: 'on a random if you ask me that if' is ungrammatical. Use 'if you ask me on a random day whether' and 'go to the park' (preposition 'to' for destinations). Use 'would' to match hypothetical preference. Replace informal 'like what I've said earlier' with 'as I said earlier.' Remove redundant phrases.

× I would say yes because I think children will enjoy those parks.

✓ I would say yes because I think children would enjoy those parks.

Context asks about future desire to see more parks; using 'would' matches a hypothetical opinion. 'Will' implies certainty; 'would' is more appropriate with 'I would say.'

× I think they will love it because they will be able to play so many games in parks.

✓ I think they would love them because they would be able to play many games in parks.

Consistency with previous sentence: use 'would' for hypothetical. 'Parks' is plural, so 'them' refers to 'parks.' 'So many games' is informal; 'many games' is preferable. Also keep modal consistency.

× But for me, I don't think I will enjoy the park anymore.

✓ But for me, I don't think I would enjoy the parks anymore.

Maintain conditional/modal consistency: 'would' fits hypothetical future enjoyment. Use plural 'parks' to match earlier reference or keep 'the park' consistently; here plural fits context. 'Anymore' is acceptable.

× Umm, I really want to go to Everyone Park, it is located in Korea because Korea is my favorite country.

✓ Umm, I really want to go to Everyone Park; it is located in Korea, which is my favorite country.

Run-on sentence needs separation (semicolon or period). Add 'which' to link 'Korea' as the favorite country. Commas needed for clause clarity. Proper nouns fine.

× I really want to go there and Everyone is one of my room destination there, and I hope one day I will be able to go there with my own money.

✓ I really want to go there and Everyone Park is one of my top destinations, and I hope one day I will be able to go there with my own money.

'Everyone is one of my room destination' is ungrammatical: 'Everyone' likely refers to 'Everyone Park' and 'room destination' is incorrect word choice. Use 'Everyone Park is one of my top destinations.' 'Top destinations' is a common collocation. 'I hope one day I will be able to go there with my own money' is acceptable, but consider 'I hope to go there someday with my own money' for conciseness.