Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically accurate, avoid hesitations, and provide a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Replace vague or incorrect phrases (e.g. “had touched me to ride bicycle”) with natural expressions. Keep the answer within 2–4 sentences and use a linking word if adding a detail.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents, and my father taught me how to ride a bicycle on the park paths, which I remember fondly.

Sugerencia: Speak more naturally and use accurate vocabulary to describe feelings. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like “the breast is atmosphere.” Give one or two clear reasons with a linking phrase. Use words like ‘relaxed,’ ‘peaceful,’ or ‘fresh air.’

Ejemplo: Absolutely. I still enjoy going to parks because the fresh air and green spaces help me relax, and walking there makes me feel peaceful after a busy day.

Sugerencia: Be concise and accurate. Start with a direct response, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. ‘because’ and ‘so’). Use correct collocations (e.g. ‘air quality,’ ‘people’s health,’ ‘encourage exercise’). Avoid confusing words like “president's health.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and encourage people to exercise more, which helps public health.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct answer and then one or two specific reasons. Remove hesitations and correct incorrect phrases (e.g. “is law about many historical events”). Say ‘national park’ with details like ‘wildlife,’ ‘scenery,’ or ‘history.’ Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘and.’

Ejemplo: I would like to visit a national park in the future because I enjoy discovering new landscapes and wildlife, and I am also interested in the history and stories associated with some parks.

× I really love going to park when I was a child with my parents and if I remember correctly, my father, uh, had touched me to ride bicycle here.

✓ I really loved going to the park when I was a child with my parents and, if I remember correctly, my father taught me to ride a bicycle here.

Past tense and word choice: 'love' should be 'loved' to match 'when I was a child' (past time). 'going to park' is missing the definite article 'the'. 'had touched me to ride bicycle' is incorrect phrasing; use 'taught me to ride a bicycle' (simple past). Use 'a' before 'bicycle'. Suggestions: Use simple past for finished past events, include articles (the/a), and use correct verb 'teach' with past form 'taught'.

× Absolutely yes. This is mainly because I feel eco friendly and really blessed at the park and I really love the uh breast is atmosphere here.

✓ Absolutely yes. This is mainly because I feel environmentally friendly and really blessed at the park, and I really love the peaceful atmosphere here.

Word choice and adjective/adverb form: 'eco friendly' should be 'environmentally friendly' (adverbial form modifying 'feel' or use 'eco-friendly' as adjective). 'breast is atmosphere' is nonsensical; likely intended 'peaceful atmosphere'. Keep present simple 'feel' and 'love' because these are present states. Suggestion: choose appropriate collocations (e.g., 'peaceful atmosphere', 'feel relaxed').

× For sure, I think that a lot of persons can, uh, improve the air quality, also enhance the quality of, uh, people exercise that can improve, uh, president's health.

✓ For sure, I think that many people can improve air quality and also enhance the quality of people's exercise, which can improve public health.

Count noun and collocation: 'a lot of persons' is unidiomatic; use 'many people'. 'People exercise' needs possessive or rephrasing: 'people's exercise' or 'people's physical activity'. 'president's health' is wrong meaning; likely 'public health'. Also remove unnecessary articles: 'improve air quality' (no 'the'). Suggestion: use common collocations ('many people', 'public health') and correct possessive forms.

× Uh, I'm not sure about that, but I think the National Park will be my, uh, will be the best option for me for in the future.

✓ Uh, I'm not sure about that, but I think the National Park would be the best option for me in the future.

Tense and modal choice: Repeating 'will be' is redundant. Use conditional 'would be' to express a hypothetical future preference. Also remove extra 'for' before 'in the future'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and choose appropriate modal (would) for preferences.

× Uh, this is simply because I would love to discover more. Also is law about many historical events in this park.

✓ This is simply because I would love to discover more, and there are also many historical sites and events associated with this park.

Sentence structure and 'there be' issue: 'Also is law about many historical events' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'there are' to introduce existence (Grammar Problem Type 3), and 'historical sites and events associated with this park' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use 'there are' to state existence and reorder words to form a clear noun phrase.