Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, correct verb forms, and add one specific supporting detail. Keep it under 5 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to play tag and climb trees with my friends every weekend, and those outings are among my fondest childhood memories.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation and fillers, use correct verb forms and pronouns, and provide a specific reason and example. Use a linking word to contrast past and present.

Ejemplo: I still like parks, but I don't visit them as often now because I'm very busy with work. However, I try to go occasionally to watch children playing, which I find relaxing and uplifting.

Sugerencia: Respond directly, avoid repetitive phrases and incorrect grammar (possessive/plural forms), and give a specific reason or suggestion about quantity or type of parks. Use a linking word to explain why.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and for families to relax. For example, smaller neighborhood parks would make it easier for parents to take their kids outside daily.

Sugerencia: Give a clear affirmative or negative start, remove fillers, use correct grammar (e.g., 'look' not 'looks/likes', 'spend time there'), and add one specific detail about what appeals to you and when you might go.

Ejemplo: Yes, I recently discovered some large parks in New York City that look very relaxing, such as Central Park. I would love to visit next year to walk the trails and relax by the ponds.

× Well, to be honest, yes, since I, I'm really excited about playing games as a child and I really like my childhood, uh, memories.

✓ Well, to be honest, yes, I was really excited about playing games as a child and I really like my childhood memories.

The student mixes present tense 'I'm really excited' with reference to childhood. This is a tense consistency error (present vs past). Change to past tense 'was really excited' to match 'as a child'. Also remove the extraneous comma and filler words and the comma in 'childhood memories'. Suggestion: use past tense when referring to past experiences and keep clauses concise.

× So yes, I really want to going to park as a child.

✓ So yes, I really wanted to go to parks as a child.

The phrase 'want to going' is incorrect: after 'want to' you need the base form 'go', not the -ing form. Also tense should be past 'wanted' to match 'as a child', and 'park' should be plural or with article ('parks' or 'the park'). Suggestion: use 'want to' + base verb, and ensure number agreement.

× Well, to be honest, I, uh, since I'm a really busy person, uh, I can't uh, going to parks, but I uh, often forced myself to going park and see, uh, children's while they are playing, uh, and uh, seeing them.

✓ Well, to be honest, since I'm a really busy person, I can't go to parks, but I often force myself to go to parks and watch children while they are playing.

Multiple errors: 'can't going' should be 'can't go' (use base verb after modal/auxiliary), and 'forced myself' should be present 'force myself' to match ongoing habit. 'Going park' should be 'go to parks'. 'Children's' is a possessive error; use plural 'children'. Also reduce fillers and make tense consistent (present simple for habits). Suggestion: after modal verbs use base verb, use present simple for habitual actions, and use plural nouns not possessive when referring to children generally.

× Uh, yes, since I really like children's and, uh, watching, watching them while they are playing with uh, each other, uh, I really enjoyed to watching, uh, many parks with different children.

✓ Yes, I really like children and enjoy watching them play with each other; I really enjoy visiting many parks with different children.

Errors include 'children's' (incorrect possessive) and 'enjoyed to watching' (incorrect verb pattern). Use 'like children' (plural noun), 'enjoy watching' (verb + -ing), and maintain consistent present tense 'enjoy' if describing current preferences. Also 'play with each other' is the natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'enjoy' + gerund and avoid unnecessary repetition of words like 'watching, watching'.

× Well, I recently, uh, found some, uh, big parks in New York City that, uh, they look likes very relaxing and I really want to spend uh, time in there, so yeah.

✓ Well, I recently found some big parks in New York City that look very relaxing and I really want to spend time there.

Redundant subject 'they' after 'that' is incorrect; in relative clauses 'that' already refers to the parks so omit 'they'. 'Look likes' is wrong: use 'look' (base verb) or 'looked' depending on tense; 'likes' is incorrect. 'Spend time in there' should be 'spend time there'. Suggestion: in relative clauses do not add an extra subject, use 'look' for plural subject, and use 'spend time there' for location phrases.