Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cevap doğrudan ve doğal ancak fazlaca tekrar ve dolgu kelimeleri var. Daha kısa, daha yapılandırılmış bir konu cümlesi kurun, gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve örnek/ayrıntı ekleyerek cümle sayısını 3-4 ile sınırlayın. Ayrıca 'me and my sister' yerine daha uygun 'my sister and I' kullanın.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My sister and I were very active, so our mother took us there almost every day so we could run around and play games. I remember we often climbed trees and played hide-and-seek, which made those visits memorable.

Sugerencia: Cevap belirsiz ve konuşma dili fazla; net bir konu cümlesi eksik. Konuyu doğrudan cevaplayın, sebep belirtin ve bir örnek verin. Doldurucu ifadeleri (uh, I mean, basically) çıkarın ve 'me and my friends' yerine 'my friends and I' kullanın.

Ejemplo: I still enjoy going to parks, but I don't visit them often these days because I'm busy. When my friends and I do go during summer, we usually sit and chat or have a small picnic and sometimes eat snacks while enjoying the outdoors.

Sugerencia: Cevap kısa ve biraz kararsız. Daha net bir görüş belirtin, nedenini açıklayın ve bir öneri ekleyin. Gereksiz ifadeleri çıkarın ve cümle yapısını düzeltin (ör. 'more parks than and there' ifadesi hatalı).

Ejemplo: I think Istanbul already has many parks, but more would still be beneficial. Additional green spaces could reduce crowding and provide more places for exercise and family activities, especially in dense neighbourhoods.

Sugerencia: Cevapta tekrar ve dolgu kelimeler var, ayrıca dilbilgisi hataları bulunuyor ('England's park' belirsiz, 'a great for' yanlış). Konuyu net ifade edin, parka dair spesifik bir özellik ve nedenini ekleyin. Günlük ifadeleri daha resmi alternatiflerle değiştirin ('wanna'→'want to').

Ejemplo: There is a park in England near the royal palace that I would like to visit again. I went there on a school trip and enjoyed its wide paths and peaceful lawns, which are perfect for morning runs and outdoor exercise.

× Me and my sister were really, uh, active and we would never stay in our own places.

✓ My sister and I were really active and we would never stay in our own places.

Using 'Me and my sister' as the subject is incorrect; the subjective form 'I' should be used and it is polite to mention the other person first. Use 'My sister and I' as the subject.

× but me and my friends, we hang out everywhere.

✓ but my friends and I hang out everywhere.

As a subject, 'me' is incorrect; use the subjective form 'I'. Also place others before 'I' for natural English order: 'my friends and I'.

× We do side quests during the summer so if we do end up in a park we end up either eating chips in it or hanging in that area basically.

✓ We do side quests during the summer, so if we end up in a park we either eat chips there or hang out in the area.

Use 'there' instead of 'in it' for places and 'hang out' is the correct phrasal verb rather than 'hanging' alone. Also adjust word order and remove redundant phrases for clarity.

× Oh, we already have a lot of parks in Istanbul, in my opinion. But I guess there's no harm in having more parks than and there.

✓ Oh, we already have a lot of parks in Istanbul, in my opinion. But I guess there's no harm in having more parks there.

The phrase 'than and there' is ungrammatical and likely a slip. Remove the extraneous words and use 'there' to refer to the city. Keep sentences concise.

× Umm, I really enjoy England's, uh, England's park, uh, it's right next to the palace and I went there once thanks to the school trip and I really loved it.

✓ Umm, I really enjoy England's park; it's right next to the palace, and I went there once on a school trip and I really loved it.

Repeat of 'England's' is redundant; a possessive like 'England's park' is acceptable but more natural would be 'a park in England' or specific name. Also change 'thanks to the school trip' to 'on a school trip' for natural phrasing and add punctuation to separate clauses.

× It's a great for a morning walk, a morning run.

✓ It's great for a morning walk or a morning run.

The indefinite article 'a' before 'great' is incorrect; use the adjective 'great' without 'a'. Use 'or' instead of comma to present alternatives.

× And since I wanna exercise in the future, I think that place would be awesome place.

✓ And since I want to exercise in the future, I think that place would be an awesome place.

Colloquial 'wanna' should be 'want to' in formal speech. Missing article before 'awesome place': use 'an awesome place'. Also avoid repeating 'place' twice; better: 'would be an awesome place for that.'