Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid incorrect words (e.g. 'prayed' is wrong here), reduce repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'also' or 'and'). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I was very active and often played badminton with my parents, and we would sometimes have picnics together. Those afternoons made me feel happy and relaxed.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give one clear reason with concise wording. Avoid filler sounds ('uh') and repetition. Use a linking word to add a brief extra detail or example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Not really. These days I prefer watching movies and dramas at home because I don't have the stamina to walk around parks for long. For example, I usually spend weekends catching up on series instead of going out.

Sugerencia: Be more decisive and correct grammar: use 'I think so' or 'Yes' with a reason. Avoid filler words and correct verb forms and noun agreement. Give a specific benefit and briefly explain how parks help children. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Parks encourage children to be more imaginative and active because they can run, explore, and play with others. For example, playgrounds help kids invent games and develop social skills.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence about the park you want to visit and fix tense and word order. Be specific about why the park is special and add a short detail (memory or feature). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid hesitations.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Unisawa Park. I used to go there as a child and it brings back nostalgic memories; for instance, I remember playing on the swings and having picnics with my family, which always made me happy.

× Yes, because I was so active when I was a child, I prayed.

✓ Yes, because I was so active when I was a child, I played.

The student used 'prayed' which is the past tense of 'pray' and means to speak to a deity; contextually they intended the verb 'play'. This is a word choice error rather than a tense error; however it affects meaning. Suggestion: use 'play/played' for games or activities. Ensure verb choice matches intended action.

× I always prayed badminton with my parents and also I sometimes picnic with my mother and I was so happy and comfortable and cozy.

✓ I always played badminton with my parents and sometimes picnicked with my mother, and I felt very happy and comfortable.

Multiple issues: 'prayed badminton' is incorrect verb choice; 'picnic' should be used as the verb 'picnicked' (past tense) or 'had picnics' — per list only verb + -ing or past tense corrections are allowed, so corrected to 'picnicked'. Also sentence was awkward and repeated adjectives; 'felt very' is natural. Suggestion: use 'played badminton' and 'picnicked' for past activities and simplify adjective use.

× No, because recently I prefer to watch movie and drama, uh, than going to park because I don't have enough uh, stamina for going to park, so I want to stay at home.

✓ No, because recently I prefer watching movies and dramas to going to the park, because I don't have enough stamina for going to the park, so I want to stay at home.

When expressing preferences with 'prefer', use the gerund or the structure 'prefer X to Y' (prefer watching to going). Also pluralize 'movie' and 'drama' to 'movies and dramas' for general activities. Include the definite article 'the' with 'park' when speaking about parks in general in this context. Suggestion: use 'prefer watching X to Y' and pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally.

× I prefer to watch movie and drama, uh, than going to park

✓ I prefer watching movies and dramas to going to the park

After 'prefer', when contrasting two activities, use 'prefer X to Y' and use gerunds for activities: 'watching' and 'going'. Also pluralize countable nouns and include 'the' before 'park' when referring generally. Suggestion: choose 'prefer doing A to doing B' or 'prefer to do A rather than do B'.

× I think so because going to the park makes make children to be more creative and more, uh, imaginative and also children is gonna be, uh, more creative person.

✓ I think so because going to the park makes children more creative and more imaginative, and children are likely to become more creative people.

Errors: duplicate 'makes make' — only 'makes' is needed. After 'makes' use the base form without 'to' (make children more creative). 'Children is' is subject-verb agreement; use 'children are'. 'Gonna' is informal; use 'likely to become' for formal speech. Also 'person' should be plural 'people' to match 'children'. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use correct verb form after 'make', match plural subjects with plural verbs, and avoid informal contractions in tests.

× Yes, I when I was a child, I go to particular park.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I went to a particular park.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'when I was a child' with present tense 'go'. Use the past tense 'went'. Also add the article 'a' before 'particular park'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions and include articles with singular countable nouns.

× It was, it is na, it's called Unisawa Park and I want to go there because it makes me nostalgic and happy.

✓ It was — it's called Unisawa Park, and I want to go there because it makes me feel nostalgic and happy.

The student shifts awkwardly between past and present tense. If the park's name still applies, say 'it's called Unisawa Park'. Add the verb 'feel' after 'makes me' for natural English. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and include 'feel' to express emotions caused by something.