Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and naturalness: use past tense consistently, correct subject-verb agreement, and make the sentence more concise. Add one supporting detail and a linking word. For example, say you enjoyed specific activities and why they mattered.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they satisfied my curiosity and let me explore nature. For example, I loved climbing trees and watching insects, which taught me to observe things closely.

Sugerencia: Make sentences more formal and concise, avoid informal contractions and repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about activities and how they help your daughter emotionally or physically.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still visit parks regularly with my daughter because I want her to enjoy an active childhood rather than spending time on screens. For example, playing on swings and running around helps her release energy and improves her mood.

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and word choice: avoid vague phrases like “in progress” and correct repetition. Provide a specific reason and an example of activities. Use a linking word to show cause and effect.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks because they improve residents' quality of life and provide safe places for children to play. For instance, parks offer playgrounds and sports areas where kids can exercise and socialize.

Sugerencia: Refine phrasing and be concise: use correct prepositions, avoid redundancy, and add one specific historical detail or attraction to make the answer more vivid.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Luneta Park in Manila with my family because it is rich in history. For example, I want my daughter to see the Rizal Monument and learn about the park's role in Philippine history.

× Yes, as a child I like going to parks because it helps me in my curiosity and help me explore more.

✓ Yes, as a child I liked going to parks because they helped my curiosity and helped me explore more.

The sentence mixes present tense with a past time reference 'as a child'. Use past tense 'liked' and 'helped'. Also 'parks' is plural so use plural verb 'they helped'. Use parallel verbs: 'helped' and 'helped'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and match subjects and verbs.

× Yes, in fact, I always go to parks now with my daughter 'cause I want her to enjoy her childhood staying on a park instead of playing mobile games or watching on iPad or TV.

✓ Yes, in fact, I always go to parks now with my daughter because I want her to enjoy her childhood playing in a park instead of playing mobile games or watching an iPad or TV.

Use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'. Use 'playing in a park' not 'staying on a park' (incorrect preposition and verb). Use article 'an' before 'iPad'. Keep present tense consistent. Suggestion: use 'playing in a park' and include articles where needed.

× And I think it would be a great help for her to be able to manage her moods.

✓ And I think it would greatly help her to manage her moods.

Original phrasing is awkward; 'would be a great help for her to be able to manage' is wordy. Use 'would greatly help her to manage' or 'would help her manage'. Also 'manage her moods' is fine. Suggestion: prefer concise verb + object constructions.

× Yes, because seeing more parks in the city means your city is in progress and some kids might enjoy the park because they they can do a lot of activities in it.

✓ Yes, because seeing more parks in the city shows that the city is progressing, and some kids might enjoy the parks because they can do many activities in them.

Avoid switching to 'your city' when speaking about 'the city'—use consistent reference. Remove duplicated 'they'. Use plural agreement: 'parks' with 'them' and 'many activities' instead of 'a lot of activities'. Suggestion: maintain consistent pronouns and plural agreement.

× There is one specific park that I want to go to in the future with my family, especially my daughter because it has a lot of history into it.

✓ There is one specific park that I want to visit in the future with my family, especially my daughter, because it has a lot of history.

Use 'visit' rather than 'go to' for clarity. 'A lot of history into it' is ungrammatical—use 'has a lot of history'. Add comma before 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'visit' and the phrase 'has a lot of history'.

× It is called Luneta Park which is located in the Manila, Philippines.

✓ It is called Luneta Park, which is located in Manila, Philippines.

Do not use 'the' before city names like Manila. Add a comma before the relative clause. Suggestion: remove 'the' when naming cities: 'in Manila, Philippines'.