Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more fluent, organized and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, correct word choice (e.g., "play on the swings" not "plane swing"), and keep to 2–4 concise sentences with specific details (how often, favorite activity, or a memory). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and slides with my brothers and sisters, and we sometimes had picnics there. However, we didn’t go very often because we usually stayed at home and played video games instead.

Sugerencia: Provide a direct topic sentence and expand with one or two clear supporting reasons. Avoid short fragments and ambiguous phrases like "the incident at the park." Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") and correct verb forms ("shopping" not "do shopping").

Ejemplo: Not really. I prefer going to shopping malls because I enjoy browsing stores and it’s more convenient for me. Also, malls have cafes and cinemas, so I can relax and socialise there.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and cleanly: state your opinion then give one or two specific reasons or examples of facilities you want. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy (e.g., "that we can enjoy them" is unnecessary). Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space and places for exercise. For example, new parks with playgrounds, walking paths and sports courts would benefit families and young people.

Sugerencia: Be concise and factual: give the park name, when you expect to go or why you want to go, and specific features you expect to enjoy. Correct word choice ("parts" -> "park", "facilities" not "velocity"), avoid repetition, and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I want to visit Salman's Park when it opens. Although I don't know the exact opening date, I’m excited because it will be very large and is expected to have many facilities such as walking trails, playgrounds and sports areas.

× Yeah, when I was a child, I did like to go to the park and plane swing with my sisters and brothers, uh, also slide in with them, but we didn't do that often and stood, uh, we stayed, uh, at home and playing a video game. Wishes something I like too.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to go to the park and swing on the swings with my sisters and brothers, and also slide with them, but we did not do that often; we usually stayed at home and played video games. I also liked wishful things.

The student mixed past simple forms and continuous forms incorrectly. Use past simple 'liked', 'swing', 'slide', 'did not do', and 'played' for habitual past actions. 'Playing' should be changed to 'played' to match past tense. Also 'plane swing' is incorrect word choice and 'video game' should be plural 'video games' for general activities. Suggestion: keep all verbs describing past habits in past simple and use correct nouns ('swing on the swings', 'slide').

× Not much. Instead of going to the park, I prefer going to the malls and do shopping. It gives me a great joy. Uh, the incident at the park.

✓ Not really. Instead of going to the park, I prefer going to the malls and doing shopping. It gives me great joy.

Mixing 'prefer' with base verb 'do' is incorrect: after 'prefer' when using a gerund form use 'doing' or use the infinitive 'to do'. Also 'not much' is informal; 'not really' is clearer. 'It gives me a great joy' should be 'It gives me great joy' (no article). Suggestion: use 'doing shopping' or 'shopping' after 'prefer', and remove unnecessary articles.

× Yes, I'd like to say a lot of large beautiful parks in my city that contain many facilities that we can enjoy them.

✓ Yes, I would like to have many large, beautiful parks in my city that contain many facilities we can enjoy.

The original sentence has redundant and incorrect structure: 'I'd like to say' is wrong for expressing desire; use 'I would like to have'. 'That contain many facilities that we can enjoy them' is redundant because both 'that' and 'them' refer to the same noun. Remove 'them' and use a relative clause: 'facilities we can enjoy'. Also adjective order should be 'large, beautiful parks'. Suggestion: use 'I would like to have' and avoid redundant pronouns in relative clauses.

× Yes, there is a parts called Salman's Park. It's going to open soon.

✓ Yes, there is a park called Salman's Park. It's going to open soon.

Subject and noun count disagree: 'parts' (plural) with singular 'a' is incorrect. Use singular 'a park' or plural without 'a'. Also the phrase 'called Salman's Park' needs to follow 'a park'. Suggestion: match article and noun number: 'a park called Salman's Park'.

× I'm not sure about the time yet, but I'm I'm very excited to go to it because it's the biggest park.

✓ I'm not sure about the opening date yet, but I'm very excited to go because it will be the biggest park.

Mixes present 'it's the biggest park' with future expectation; use future 'will be' for expected future status. Also repeated 'I'm' should be single. 'Time' is vague; 'opening date' is clearer. Suggestion: avoid repetition and choose tense that matches meaning (future for future states).

× It's going to be the biggest park in the world and it's gonna contain a lot of velocity that we can.

✓ It is going to be the biggest park in the world and it will contain a lot of facilities that we can use.

Several errors: 'gonna' is informal; use 'will' or 'is going to'. 'Velocity' is the wrong noun—likely 'facilities'. The clause 'that we can' is incomplete; add a verb 'use' or 'enjoy'. Also avoid double future forms mixing; use consistent 'will contain'. Suggestion: replace incorrect nouns and complete the relative clause with a verb.