Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (e.g., “Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child”), then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words and avoid filler sounds. Use precise verbs and nouns (e.g., “made friends,” “discover new activities”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because I often made new friends on the swings and joined informal games. Moreover, I discovered new activities like kite-flying and feeding ducks, which made my visits exciting.

Sugerencia: Use a concise present-tense topic sentence and avoid repetition. Include one clear reason with a linked additional detail. Replace vague phrases with specific benefits and remove repeated words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and reduce stress. In addition, walking there keeps me active and improves my fitness, especially when I walk for 30 minutes each morning.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and grammatically. State your preference (yes/no) then explain briefly with specific reasons. Avoid hesitations and fix tense and article errors (e.g., “parks,” “haven't gone”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks because although my city has several, many are small or poorly maintained. For example, adding more well-equipped parks would give families better places for exercise and relaxation.

Sugerencia: Be specific about destinations and explain why with concrete details. Avoid vague or metaphorical phrases like “time travel person.” Use clear linking words and correct grammar (e.g., “parks in Italy” or “European parks”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit parks in Italy, such as Villa Borghese in Rome, because it has beautiful gardens, historic sculptures and peaceful walking paths. Visiting such parks would let me enjoy both nature and cultural landmarks.

× Yes, I like going to parks as a child because uh, it helps me to make new friends and wonder to new things and everything.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because it helped me make new friends and discover new things.

The speaker refers to childhood, a past time, so present tense 'like' and 'helps' are incorrect (Grammar Problem Type 6). Use past simple 'liked' and 'helped'. Also 'wonder to new things' is ungrammatical; use 'discover new things' or 'wonder about new things'. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'and everything' for clarity.

× Yes, I like going to parks now because aside from it helps me relax, it also helps me to become more active and more healthy as I walk as I walk through the park.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now because, besides helping me relax, it also helps me become more active and healthier when I walk through the park.

The main clause is present tense and acceptable, but the phrase 'aside from it helps me relax' is ungrammatical; use a gerund phrase 'besides helping me relax' (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 8). Also use comparative 'healthier' instead of 'more healthy', and remove repeated 'as I walk'. Use 'when I walk' for clarity.

× I live in a city where there's a lot of park but I haven't go umm go explore more but I want to so I am still exploring the parks in my area.

✓ I live in a city where there are a lot of parks, but I haven't gone to explore many of them yet; I want to, so I am still exploring the parks in my area.

Use plural 'parks' instead of singular 'park' after 'a lot of' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Also 'there's' (there is) should match plural 'parks' as 'there are' (Grammar Problem Type 3/27). 'I haven't go' is incorrect; use present perfect 'I haven't gone' (Grammar Problem Type 5). Add 'to' after 'gone' and improve sentence structure for clarity.

× Yeah, I want to go to Umm Italy's park or any par any parks in Europe, because aside from it's has good ambiance, it also umm makes you like time travel person.

✓ Yeah, I want to go to parks in Italy or other parks in Europe, because they have a good atmosphere and they make you feel like a time traveler.

'Italy's park' is awkward; use 'parks in Italy' (Grammar Problem Type 22 and 26). Fix repetition 'par any parks'. 'Aside from it's has' is ungrammatical; use 'they have' or 'because they have' (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 13). 'Makes you like time travel person' is incorrect phrasing; use 'make you feel like a time traveler'.

× It's really good place to explore.

✓ It's a really good place to explore.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'really good place' (Grammar Problem Type 22). The sentence structure requires the article to be grammatical.