Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms or articles.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I used to play on the swings and have picnics with my family, which helped me relax after a busy week.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use correct phrases. Use one linking word (e.g., 'because') and give a clear, specific reason. Avoid unclear expressions like 'lower the abundance.'

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because walking among trees relaxes my eyes and helps me feel less stressed after working on a computer.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion then add a clear reason with correct grammar. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' and avoid unclear vocabulary (e.g., 'urban S constructions').

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide safe spaces for children to play, so city planners should include them in new developments.

Sugerencia: Be precise and fluent. Start with a clear statement of intent, then give specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and incorrect article use.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York because it is world-famous, beautifully designed, and has many well-maintained gardens and walking paths to explore.

× Yes, I like going to a park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.

Tense inconsistency: the question asks about the past (as a child), so use past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. Also plural 'parks' is more natural when speaking generally. Suggestion: use past tense when referring to past habits.

× In fact I also like going to parks right now because I think park is a place which can makes a persons to come down and feel relaxed and it can help me escape from the work.

✓ In fact, I also like going to parks right now because I think a park is a place that can help a person calm down and feel relaxed, and it can help me escape from work.

Multiple errors: article use ('park' needs an article 'a park'); verb form ('makes' should be 'help' or 'helps' depending on subject; here 'that can help a person' is correct); incorrect pluralization and pronoun use ('persons' -> 'a person'); unnecessary 'to' after 'makes' was incorrect; 'the work' should be 'work' without article. Suggestions: use 'a park' for a general singular, use 'help' with 'can', use singular 'a person', and omit 'the' before uncountable 'work'.

× Yes, like I said, I still like going to a parks right now and I think the park is a place that could relax my eyes and make myself to lower the abundance.

✓ Yes, like I said, I still like going to parks right now, and I think a park is a place that can relax my eyes and help me reduce stress.

Errors: article and number ('a parks' is incorrect; use 'parks' or 'a park'); modal/tense choice ('could' is acceptable but 'can' fits present habitual action better); reflexive and infinitive ('make myself to lower the abundance' is ungrammatical: use 'help me reduce stress'). 'Abundance' is wrong word choice. Suggestions: use correct article/number, use 'help me reduce stress' or 'relax me' for clarity.

× Yes, more and more parks in our city is always a good thing and I think the park's construction need to be under the consideration in the urban S constructions.

✓ Yes, more and more parks in our city are always a good thing, and I think park construction needs to be carefully considered in urban planning.

Subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'more and more parks' requires plural verb 'are' not 'is'. Possessive 'the park's construction' is awkward; use 'park construction' as an uncountable concept. 'Need' must agree with singular noun 'construction' -> 'needs'. 'Under the consideration in the urban S constructions' is unclear; correct to 'carefully considered in urban planning'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use standard collocations like 'park construction' and 'urban planning'. },{