Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition; correct grammar and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also fix doubled words and plural/singular agreement.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because photography helps me preserve memories. For example, when I visit natural landscapes I take wide shots of valleys and close-ups of flowers, so later I can remember the atmosphere and colors clearly.

Sugerencia: Improve sentence accuracy and coherence: correct grammar errors, avoid unclear phrases (e.g., 'crowding land cities'), and use linking words to connect reasons. Provide a concise topic sentence followed by specific examples or comparisons.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because they have beautiful landscapes and far less pollution than cities. For instance, I enjoy walking through lush fields and listening to birds, which feels much more peaceful compared with the noise and crowds in urban areas.

Sugerencia: Fix grammar and register: correct subject-verb agreement, use precise linking words, and avoid vague comparisons. Give one clear reason and a specific example of a foreign landscape you prefer to strengthen the answer.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because my country often suffers heavy pollution, especially in winter when the air feels very smoggy. For example, I admire the clear mountain scenery in Switzerland, where the air is cleaner and the landscapes are well preserved.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photography helps me preserve memories.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photography helps me preserve memories.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct. The verb forms and structure are appropriate.

× I enjoy visiting new places, especially natural landscapes and and I keep my many photographs from my trip to look back on later.

✓ I enjoy visiting new places, especially natural landscapes, and I keep many photographs from my trips to look back on later.

Errors: repeated word 'and and', unnecessary determiner 'my' before 'many photographs', singular 'trip' inconsistent with general habit. Correction: remove duplicate 'and', delete 'my' before 'many', pluralize 'trip' to 'trips' to match the habitual action. Use a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× Personally, I prefer rural areas because they offer beautiful landscapes and far less pollution and crowding land cities.

✓ Personally, I prefer rural areas because they offer beautiful landscapes and far less pollution and crowding than cities.

Error: incorrect phrase 'crowding land cities' likely typo; conjunction/word choice incorrect. Correction: replace with 'crowding than cities' to make a correct comparison structure using 'than'. Also keep parallel structure 'less pollution and crowding'.

× The atmosphere feels much more tranquil there.

✓ The atmosphere feels much more tranquil there.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 'Much more tranquil' is an acceptable comparative adverb/adjective usage.

× I enjoy walking through lush fields and breathing fresher areas unlike we see in urban areas.

✓ I enjoy walking through lush fields and breathing fresher air unlike what we see in urban areas.

Errors: 'breathing fresher areas' is incorrect collocation; 'air' is the correct noun. Also 'unlike we see' is missing 'what' to introduce the clause. Correction: use 'air' and 'what we see' to form a proper contrast clause.

× I prefer views in foreign countries because my country have lots of pollution and during winter time it gets choked.

✓ I prefer views in foreign countries because my country has a lot of pollution and during winter it becomes choked.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'my country have' should be 'my country has'. 'lots of' is informal; use 'a lot of' or 'much' and 'during winter time' is wordy — 'during winter' is better. 'It gets choked' is awkward; 'becomes choked' is more natural. These changes correct agreement and improve register.

× On the other hands, countries in European continent have far better landscapes.

✓ On the other hand, countries in the European continent have far better landscapes.

Errors: incorrect phrase 'On the other hands' should be 'On the other hand' (singular). Missing article 'the' before 'European continent'. Also 'countries in the European continent' is acceptable; alternatively 'European countries' is more natural. This corrects conjunction form and article use.