Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundant phrases and minor grammar errors (e.g., "over the years"). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "because" or "so").

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I use a Sony T613 and have photographed landscapes and cityscapes on family trips over the years, which I often share in a digital album.

Sugerencia: This answer has many clarity and grammar problems and unclear vocabulary. Give a clear preference or balanced view in one topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons using correct words and linking expressions (e.g., "however", "on the other hand"). Avoid incorrect words or phrases ("sick with the rural E", "Christ purpose", "ruler").

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because there is more natural greenery and peaceful space. However, urban views are interesting too due to modern architecture and bright city lights, so I enjoy photographing both depending on the mood.

Sugerencia: Be direct and correct: start with a clear statement of preference, give a reason, and avoid irrelevant technical details (camera model) unless it adds value. Fix grammar ("I haven't visited many countries" and "I would love to"). Use linking words like "because" or "but" to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I know the places and can easily visit them with my family. However, I would love to travel abroad someday to photograph different cultures and landscapes.

× Yes, I am very into photography.

✓ Yes, I am very interested in photography.

The phrase 'very into' is informal and 'into' as used is acceptable in speech but for correct standard grammar use 'interested in'. Use of the present tense 'am' is fine; change to 'interested in' to be more grammatically precise and natural.

× I think it is a great way to capture memories I have.

✓ I think it is a great way to capture memories I have.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; however, it sounds more natural as 'to capture memories' without additional change. No present participle error requires correction.

× I personally have a Sony T613 camera which is one of the best cameras that the Sony provides.

✓ I personally have a Sony T613 camera, which is one of the best cameras that Sony makes.

Using 'the Sony provides' is awkward; company names normally take verbs without 'the'. Also 'makes' is more natural than 'provides'. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is...'. Pronoun issue arises from incorrect article use with the company name.

× I have taken many pictures with it over years.

✓ I have taken many pictures with it over the years.

The quantifier 'over years' is missing the definite article 'the' to form the idiom 'over the years' meaning across time. This corrects the prepositional phrase.

× I think both are great but I was sick with the rural E as as there is more green drainage.

✓ I think both are great, but I prefer rural areas because there is more greenery.

The original contains multiple errors: 'was sick with' is incorrect for preference; use 'prefer' or 'I like rural areas' in present tense. 'rural E as as' appears to be garbled; replace with 'rural areas'. 'green drainage' is incorrect word choice; the correct noun is 'greenery'. Also add comma before 'but'. The tense should match the general present preference.

× Urban areas have greenery but there is more modernity in it.

✓ Urban areas have greenery, but they are more modern.

The sentence mixes singular 'it' with plural 'urban areas'; replace 'it' with 'they' to match plural antecedent. Also rephrase 'there is more modernity in it' to the natural adjective form 'they are more modern'.

× Like there is Christ purpose in buildings and more light.

✓ For example, there is more architectural variety and lighting in cities.

'Christ purpose' is nonsensical likely due to mishearing; replace with 'architectural variety' or 'architectural features'. Begin with 'For example' instead of 'Like' for formal speech. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× The ruler is filled up darkness.

✓ The rural areas can feel more lacking in natural light.

'The ruler' is a misspelling of 'rural' and 'filled up darkness' is ungrammatical. Recast sentence to convey intended meaning: rural areas may have less artificial lighting. This corrects noun choice and idiomatic expression.

× I haven't visited many countries so I will say that my own country has great reviews but I will love to see the views and capture them as well with 9603 camera from the Sony along with my family.

✓ I haven't visited many countries, so I would say that my own country has great scenery, but I would love to see the views in other countries and capture them with my Sony 9603 camera along with my family.

Several issues: 'has great reviews' is incorrect collocation for scenery; use 'has great scenery'. Modal verbs: 'will say' and 'will love' are awkward here; use 'would say' and 'would love' to express preference/hypothetical. Word order for the camera model should be 'Sony 9603 camera'. Add commas and split clauses for clarity. Present perfect 'haven't visited' is correct and kept.