Part 1
Examinador
Do you prefer typing or handwriting?
Candidato
I prefer the handwriting on paper because the sense of touch of paper is very good for me and I can express my feeling on the paper. The papers touch is very soft and this I can.
Examinador
Do you type on a desktop or laptop keyboard every day?
Candidato
Almost every day I use desktop keyboard rather than laptop keyboard because it's large laptop keyboard and the touch of desktop keyboard is deeper and very indeed very good feeling rather than left of.
Examinador
When did you learn how to type on a keyboard?
Candidato
Not in the school Highlands by myself typing is one of important skill on working as her Bill Grant Horn employees. But in school we are didn't learn from the teacher that is pro.
Examinador
How do you improve your typing?
Candidato
Through using typing games, Typing games in Japan called Sushida is very convenient method. You as more fast retype the more reward we gain.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting?
Puntuación: 52.0Sugerencia: 応答の構成を明確にし、冗長な表現や文法ミスを直してください。まず主旨文で好みをはっきり述べ、次に具体的な理由を1〜2文で述べます。例えば“the sense of touch”や“express my feeling”は自然な表現に置き換え、冠詞や複数形に注意してください。語彙は適切ですが、文を短くして明瞭にします。
Ejemplo: I prefer handwriting because I find writing on paper more satisfying. The texture of paper helps me focus, and I feel I can express my thoughts more naturally when I write by hand.
Do you type on a desktop or laptop keyboard every day?
Puntuación: 40.0Sugerencia: 発言が混乱しているので、比較の論理を整理してください。まずどちらを使うかを明確に述べ、次に2つの具体的な比較理由(サイズ、打鍵感など)を簡潔に述べます。不要な語や語順の誤りを避け、形容詞や名詞の一致に注意してください。
Ejemplo: I use a desktop keyboard almost every day because the keys are larger and the keystroke is deeper. These features make typing more comfortable and accurate for long sessions.
When did you learn how to type on a keyboard?
Puntuación: 30.0Sugerencia: 意味が伝わりにくいので、時や場所を整理して簡潔に答えてください。まず“when”に直接答え(例:I learned as a child/at university/at work)、次に自己学習か学校で学んだかを一文で説明します。文法(時制、冠詞、前置詞)を正しく使い、不要な固有名詞や不明瞭な語は省いてください。
Ejemplo: I learned to type mainly by myself when I was a teenager. My school did not teach typing, so I practiced using online exercises and typing software.
How do you improve your typing?
Puntuación: 55.0Sugerencia: 改善方法を具体的かつ論理的に述べ、接続詞で流れを整えてください。まず手段(typing games)を述べ、次にそのゲームの具体的な仕組みや得られる効果(スピード向上、正確さ)を説明します。固有名詞は正確に表記し、文法的に自然な表現に直してください。
Ejemplo: I improve my typing by playing typing games. For example, a popular game in Japan called Sushida rewards you for typing faster and more accurately, which motivates me to practice regularly and improve my speed.
× I prefer the handwriting on paper because the sense of touch of paper is very good for me and I can express my feeling on the paper.
✓ I prefer handwriting on paper because the sense of touch of paper is very pleasant for me and I can express my feelings on it.
記事(the/a)と可算名詞の使い方が不自然です。'handwriting' を特定のものとして扱わず一般的に言うために冠詞を省き、'feeling' は可算複数の感情を表すため複数形にしました。また 'on the paper' を繰り返さず代名詞 'it' に置き換え、文を自然にしました。改善のために、可算/不可算と特定性(定冠詞)の使い分けを復習してください.
× The papers touch is very soft and this I can.
✓ The paper's texture is very soft and I like that.
'papers touch' は不自然な名詞の結合で、所有格を使って 'paper's texture' とするのが自然です。'this I can' は意味が通じないので 'I like that' のような明確な表現に修正しました。具体的に言いたい内容を先に考え、英語の自然な語順に従って書いてください.
× Almost every day I use desktop keyboard rather than laptop keyboard because it's large laptop keyboard and the touch of desktop keyboard is deeper and very indeed very good feeling rather than left of.
✓ Almost every day I use a desktop keyboard rather than a laptop keyboard because the desktop keyboard is larger and its keys have a deeper, better feel.
単数形の可算名詞には冠詞が必要です(a desktop keyboard)。'it's large laptop keyboard' は意味が逆で修正しました。'the touch of desktop keyboard is deeper' は自然な英語では 'its keys have a deeper feel' のように表現します。冗長な副詞や誤った語順を避け、名詞の所有を明確にしてください.
× Not in the school Highlands by myself typing is one of important skill on working as her Bill Grant Horn employees.
✓ Not at school; I learned to type by myself in the Highlands. Typing is an important skill for work.
過去に学んだことを述べるので過去形 'learned' を使う必要があります。また 'one of important skill' は単数・冠詞の誤りで 'an important skill' にし、'on working as her Bill Grant Horn employees' は意味不明瞭なので一般的に職場で必要な技術であることを伝える表現に整理しました。明確な時制と簡潔な語順を心がけてください.
× But in school we are didn't learn from the teacher that is pro.
✓ But at school we didn't learn it from a teacher who was a professional.
'we are didn't learn' は二重否定と助動詞の誤用です。過去形 'didn't learn' が正しく、'from the teacher that is pro' は関係詞と冠詞の使い方が不自然なので 'from a teacher who was a professional' としました。正しい助動詞の形と関係代名詞の使い方を確認してください.
× Through using typing games, Typing games in Japan called Sushida is very convenient method.
✓ By using typing games; a typing game in Japan called Sushida is a very convenient method.
'Through using' より 'by using' のほうが自然です。複数形と単数形の一致、冠詞の追加が必要です。'Typing games ... is' は主語と動詞の数の不一致を生むので 'a typing game ... is' または 'Typing games ... are' に揃えてください.
× You as more fast retype the more reward we gain.
✓ The faster you type, the more rewards we gain.
比較の構文は 'The + comparative, the + comparative' を使います。'more fast' は誤りで 'faster' が正しい比較級です。また 'retype' は不要で 'type' のほうが自然です。比較構文のパターンを練習してください.