Travelling— Part 1 Informe

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Part 1

Examinador

Do you often ride a bicycle?

Candidato

No, I barely ride bicycle 'cause my balancing is bad, thus I can't ride bicycle very well.

Examinador

What transport do you often use when travelling?

Candidato

Mostly I take a flight to arrive to other country and when I arrive at that country I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use metro to reach every place.

Examinador

Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?

Candidato

Yes, because I'm a nature person so I like to see the view of the nature so I'll often I'll always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking transfer.

Examinador

Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?

Candidato

I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

Evaluación

Total

Total: 5.5Fluidez y coherencia: 5.5Pronunciación: 5.5Gramática: 5.0Recurso léxico: 5.5

Part 1

Do you often ride a bicycle?

Puntuación: 68.0

Sugerencia: 回答直接,能够说明不常骑自行车的原因,但有冠词、搭配和连接词问题。应说“ride a bicycle”,而不是“ride bicycle”;“my balancing is bad”不自然,建议改为“I have poor balance”。此外,“'cause”和“thus”同时使用略显生硬,口语中可以用“because”或“so”连接。可以补充一个具体结果,例如平时选择步行或乘坐公共交通,但总长度控制在2—3句。

Ejemplo: No, I hardly ever ride a bicycle because I have poor balance. I usually walk or take the bus instead, as I feel much safer that way.

What transport do you often use when travelling?

Puntuación: 72.0

Sugerencia: 回答内容完整,涵盖了长途和当地交通方式,也给出了原因。但句子过长,信息层次不够清晰;应使用“take a flight to another country”和“use the local metro”这类更自然的表达。“arrive at that country”应改为“arrive in that country”。建议拆成两句,并用“Once I arrive...”清楚地衔接旅行前后;“almost use metro to reach every place”可改为“the metro can take me to most places”。

Ejemplo: When I travel abroad, I usually take a flight to another country. Once I arrive, I normally use the local metro because it is convenient and can take me to most places.

Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?

Puntuación: 65.0

Sugerencia: 回答观点明确,也说明了喜欢靠窗座位的原因,但存在明显重复和语法问题,例如“so”重复使用、“I'll often I'll always”重复,以及“the view of the nature”不自然。建议用“enjoy nature”或“admire the scenery”表达,并将“taking transfer”改为“taking public transport”或直接说“travelling”。可以补充一个具体场景,例如在飞机上看云或风景,使答案更生动。

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat because I enjoy looking at the scenery while I travel. For example, on a plane, I like watching the clouds and the landscape below.

Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?

Puntuación: 60.0

Sugerencia: 回答基本回应了问题,但时态、数量和词语搭配错误较多。“many time”应改为“many times”;讲童年经历时应使用一般过去时,如“travelled”;“I wasn't considered as a long journey”主语错误,应改为“they weren't really long journeys”。“travel at other country”应改为“travel to other countries”,并可具体说明通常是短途旅行还是去附近城市。

Ejemplo: I travelled with my family many times when I was a child, but the trips were usually quite short. My parents had busy jobs, so we mostly visited nearby cities rather than travelling abroad for a long time.

Gramática

22: Article errors(冠词错误)

× No, I barely ride bicycle 'cause my balancing is bad, thus I can't ride bicycle very well.

✓ No, I barely ride a bicycle 'cause my balancing is bad, thus I can't ride a bicycle very well.

可数名词 bicycle 表示“一辆自行车”时,前面需要使用不定冠词 a。第二次出现 bicycle 时也需要保留 a。建议注意:单数可数名词通常不能单独使用。

11: Incorrect use of prepositions(介词使用错误)

× Mostly I take a flight to arrive to other country and when I arrive at that country I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use metro to reach every place.

✓ Mostly I take a flight to arrive in another country, and when I arrive in that country, I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use the metro to reach every place.

表示“到达某个国家”时,arrive 后面通常使用介词 in,而不是 to 或 at。arrive at 通常用于较小的地点,例如 arrive at the station。建议记忆:arrive in + 大地点,arrive at + 小地点。

22: Article errors(冠词错误)

× Mostly I take a flight to arrive to other country and when I arrive at that country I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use metro to reach every place.

✓ Mostly I take a flight to arrive in another country, and when I arrive in that country, I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use the metro to reach every place.

country 是单数可数名词,前面不能直接使用 other,需要使用 another,或者说 another country。metro 在这里指当地的地铁系统,是特指概念,因此使用 the metro。建议区分:another + 单数可数名词,other + 复数名词或不可数名词。

16: Incorrect conjunction use(连词使用错误)

× Yes, because I'm a nature person so I like to see the view of the nature so I'll often I'll always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking transfer.

✓ Yes, because I'm a nature person, I like to see views of nature, so I always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking a transfer.

because 和 so 都可以表示因果关系,但通常不能在同一个原因结构中重复使用。可以使用“because..., ...”或“..., so...”,不能使用“because..., so...”。建议选择一个连词表达原因和结果。

22: Article errors(冠词错误)

× Yes, because I'm a nature person so I like to see the view of the nature so I'll often I'll always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking transfer.

✓ Yes, because I'm a nature person, I like to see views of nature, so I always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking a transfer.

nature 表示自然这一抽象概念时,通常不使用 the。transfer 在这里作为单数可数名词使用,前面需要加 a。建议判断名词是可数还是不可数,并注意单数可数名词前必须有冠词或其他限定词。

26: Sentence structure errors(句子结构错误)

× Yes, because I'm a nature person so I like to see the view of the nature so I'll often I'll always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking transfer.

✓ Yes, because I'm a nature person, I like to see views of nature, so I always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking a transfer.

I'll often I'll always 中重复使用了两个主语和助动词,句子结构不完整且不自然。这里表达的是经常性的习惯,直接使用一般现在时 I always choose 更合适。建议检查句子中是否重复出现主语、助动词或相同成分。

1: Singular and plural issue(单复数错误)

× I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

✓ I traveled with my family many times when I was a child, but it wasn't considered a long journey 'cause they had jobs, so we couldn't travel to other countries for a very long time.

many 后面必须接可数名词复数,因此应使用 many times,而不是 many time。other 后面表示多个国家时使用复数 countries。建议记忆:many + 可数名词复数。

5: Past tense issue(过去时错误)

× I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

✓ I traveled with my family many times when I was a child, but it wasn't considered a long journey 'cause they had jobs, so we couldn't travel to other countries for a very long time.

when I was a child 明确表示过去时间,因此主句应使用一般过去时 traveled,而不是现在完成时 have traveled。过去发生的 have jobs 和 can't travel 也应分别改为 had jobs 和 couldn't travel。建议看到明确的过去时间标志时,优先使用一般过去时。

11: Incorrect use of prepositions(介词使用错误)

× I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

✓ I traveled with my family many times when I was a child, but it wasn't considered a long journey 'cause they had jobs, so we couldn't travel to other countries for a very long time.

表示“去其他国家旅行”时,应使用 travel to,而不是 travel at。表示持续一段时间时,应使用 for a very long time,而不是 in a very long time。建议记忆:travel to + 地点,for + 一段持续时间。

21: Incorrect passive voice(被动语态错误)

× I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

✓ I traveled with my family many times when I was a child, but it wasn't considered a long journey 'cause they had jobs, so we couldn't travel to other countries for a very long time.

原句中 I wasn't considered as a long journey 的主语 I 不能被认为是“一次长途旅行”,主语和被动结构不匹配。应使用 it 指代这次旅行,并说 it wasn't considered a long journey。同时,consider 后面直接接宾语,不需要 as。建议使用被动语态时,确认主语确实是动作的承受者,并检查主语和补语是否逻辑一致。

Vocabulario

Bad— Substandard; Harmful; Unpleasant; Inauspicious; Severe
Long— Lengthy; Soon; Yearn for
Many— Numerous; A great/good deal of
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