Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 「I do, I do like」は重複しているため、「Yes, I do.」のように簡潔に始めましょう。「snowy going by」は不自然なので、「watching the scenery go by」や「looking at the view outside」と言い換えます。また、「preserve the moment to take the picture by using smartphones」は、「take photos to capture the moment」のように自然に表現できます。最初に結論を述べ、その後に理由と具体例を1つ加えると、より効果的で流暢な回答になります。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I prefer a window seat because I enjoy watching the scenery go by during the journey. I can also take photos of interesting views to capture the moment.

Sugerencia: 「Yes, I had I had」や「journey」の単複を修正し、「Yes, I did. We went on a couple of long journeys...」と答えましょう。「drew drawbars」は文脈上「drove us」または「drove the car」と考えられますが、正確でない表現は避け、「My dad drove us to...」のように明確に伝えてください。「by curve」「struggle with a curve」も意味が不明瞭なので、目的地や旅行中の感想を具体的に説明しましょう。例えば、場所、所要時間、印象に残ったことをリンク語でつなぐと、内容と論理性が向上します。

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I went on a couple of long journeys with my family when I was a child. My dad usually drove us to the countryside, and some trips took several hours. I sometimes felt uncomfortable on winding roads, but I enjoyed spending time with my family.

× I do, I do like taking a window seat because...

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking a window seat because...

The repeated structure “I do, I do like” is not grammatically natural. Use “Yes, I do” as a complete answer, followed by the main sentence.

× I enjoy snowy going by during the trip

✓ I enjoy watching the snow go by during the trip

After “enjoy,” use a gerund or a noun phrase. “Snowy” is an adjective and cannot function as the object of “enjoy.” The natural expression is “enjoy watching the snow go by.”

× I would like to preserve the moment to take the picture by using smartphones.

✓ I would like to preserve the moment by taking pictures with my smartphone.

To explain the method used to preserve a moment, use “by + -ing,” not “to take ... by.” Use “with” to introduce the device: “with my smartphone.”

× I had a couple of long journey with my family as a kid.

✓ I had a couple of long journeys with my family as a kid.

“A couple of” refers to two or more items, so the noun after it must be plural: “journeys.”

× My dad always drew drawbars to where we went by curve then I always struggle with a curve.

✓ My dad always drove us to places we visited by car, but I always struggled with cars.

The story is about childhood, so past-tense verbs are needed. Use “drove” instead of “drew” and “struggled” instead of “struggle.” The natural expression is “by car,” not “by curve.”

× My dad always drove us to places we visited by car, then I always struggled with cars.

✓ My dad always drove us to places we visited by car, but I always struggled with cars.

“But” is appropriate because the second clause contrasts with the first: the father enjoyed or used car travel, while the speaker struggled with it.