Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly in the first sentence, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid repeating “because I enjoy” and use more natural phrases such as “watching the scenery” and “especially on long journeys.” Also, separate ideas with linking words and correct the run-on sentence by using full stops or conjunctions.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery outside. It makes the journey more relaxing and less boring, especially when the trip is long.

Sugerencia: Use the past tense consistently because you are describing a childhood experience: “I had,” “I was,” and “we went.” Answer the question directly, then provide specific details such as your age, destination, reason for travelling, and how you felt. The response is incomplete, and some expressions are unclear; use natural wording such as “a nine-night festival” and avoid ending with an unfinished phrase.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was six years old. We travelled to Amarji Temple to attend a nine-night religious festival. The journey was tiring, but I enjoyed spending time with my family and visiting such an important place.

× I usually prefer sitting by the window when I am travelling because I enjoy because I enjoy looking outside and watching scenery, it makes my journey more relaxing and less boring and if the journey is longer then I usually prefer that

✓ I usually prefer sitting by the window when I am travelling because I enjoy looking outside and watching the scenery. It makes my journey more relaxing and less boring, especially when the journey is long.

The phrase because I enjoy is repeated, and the original answer joins several complete ideas with commas and conjunctions, creating a run-on sentence. Remove the repetition and divide the ideas into two clear sentences. This will make your answer easier to understand.

× I usually prefer sitting by the window when I am travelling because I enjoy because I enjoy looking outside and watching scenery, it makes my journey more relaxing and less boring and if the journey is longer then I usually prefer that

✓ I usually prefer sitting by the window when I am travelling because I enjoy looking outside and watching the scenery. It makes my journey more relaxing and less boring, especially when the journey is long.

Scenery is usually an uncountable noun, and in this context you are referring to the particular scenery outside the window. Therefore, use the definite article: the scenery. Practise using the when referring to something specific or already understood from the context.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family as a child while I am six years old because at the time we are going to Amarji Temple for Durshan Inner Festival of nine nights of

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was six years old. At that time, we went to Amarji Temple for the nine-night Durshan Inner Festival.

The question asks about a childhood experience, so you need the past tense. Change have to had, am to was, and are going to to went. Use the past tense consistently when describing events that happened when you were a child.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family as a child while I am six years old because at the time we are going to Amarji Temple for Durshan Inner Festival of nine nights of

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was six years old. At that time, we went to Amarji Temple for the nine-night Durshan Inner Festival.

The festival is a specific event, so use the definite article the before its description: the nine-night Durshan Inner Festival. Also, nine-night functions as a compound adjective and remains singular before the noun.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family as a child while I am six years old because at the time we are going to Amarji Temple for Durshan Inner Festival of nine nights of

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was six years old. At that time, we went to Amarji Temple for the nine-night Durshan Inner Festival.

The original response ends with of, so the sentence is incomplete. It also contains too many ideas joined together without clear punctuation. Finish the noun phrase and separate the answer into two complete sentences. Use when I was six years old to express the time more naturally.