Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 「Yes, I do.」の後に、理由を1つ明確に述べると、より直接的で自然な回答になります。「windowside」は不自然なので「by the window」または「a window seat」を使いましょう。また、文が長くつながりすぎているため、「because」「so」「Later」などで区切り、最後まで完結させてください。「the topic comes up in the conversation」はこの文脈では不自然なので、「I can show the photos to my friends and talk about the trip」のように具体的に表現するとよいです。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I always try to get a window seat because I enjoy looking at the scenery and taking photos during the journey. Later, I can show the pictures to my friends and talk about the trip.

Sugerencia: 最初の「Yes I hired I had」は言い直しが重なっているため、「Yes, I did.」と簡潔に始めましょう。旅行先や活動については、正確で理解しやすい語句を使う必要があります。「climb up top of the mountain」は「climb to the top of the mountain」、「the puf from there was burst taking」や「it was good manually」は意味が伝わらないため、「the view from the top was breathtaking」や「it was a memorable experience for all of us」のように言い換えてください。具体的な場所、移動時間、感想を順序立てて述べると、内容と流れが大きく改善します。

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family and I took a long journey to Mount Fozzie. We climbed to the top of the mountain, and the breathtaking view made the trip a memorable experience for all of us.

× I definitely like sitting by windowside.

✓ I definitely like sitting by the window.

The preposition by is correct, but windowside is not normally used in this expression. Use by the window to describe a seat next to a window.

× I definitely like sitting by windowside and I always take a window seat.

✓ I definitely like sitting by the window, and I always take a window seat.

The singular countable noun window needs the definite article the when referring to a specific window beside the seat. The phrase a window seat is correct because it refers to one seat of a general type.

× Yes I do, I definitely like sitting by windowside and I always take a window seat because I can take photos to capture the moment during the trip, then I can look back on it later and the topic comes up in the conversation. I can show

✓ Yes, I do. I definitely like sitting by the window, and I always take a window seat because I can take photos during the trip. I can look back at them later and show them to people if the topic comes up in conversation.

The original response contains a run-on sentence joined by commas, and the final clause I can show is incomplete because it does not say what you can show or to whom. Use shorter complete sentences and add an object such as them.

× Yes I hired I had a long journey with my family as a kid.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a long journey with my family when I was a child.

The phrase Yes I hired is an incomplete and incorrect interruption. Because the question uses Did you have..., the natural short answer is Yes, I did. The sentence should then continue with the complete statement I had a long journey.

× We went to Mount Fozzie to climb up top of the mountain.

✓ We went to Mount Fozzie to climb to the top of the mountain.

The singular countable noun top needs the definite article the because it refers to the specific top of the mountain. The phrase climb to the top is also the natural expression.

× The puf from there was burst taking.

✓ The view from there was breathtaking.

The original phrase contains an incorrect word form and does not form a meaningful English expression. Breathtaking is the correct present-participle adjective for something that is extremely beautiful or impressive.

× Then it was good manually for us.

✓ It was a really memorable experience for us.

Good manually is not a correct English adjective or adverb combination. Use a clear adjective phrase such as a really memorable experience to describe how the journey felt.

× The view from there was breathtaking, then it was good manually for us.

✓ The view from there was breathtaking, and it was a really memorable experience for us.

Then indicates a sequence of events, but the second clause describes the result or overall impression of the trip. The conjunction and is more appropriate for joining these two related descriptions.