Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar mistakes (e.g., 'I prefer to sit by the window on a plane' and 'I prefer aisle seats on buses and cars because sitting by the window makes my headache worse'). Also use a wider range of simple vocabulary correctly (e.g., 'aisle' not 'ail') and keep to under five sentences.

Ejemplo: I usually prefer to sit by the window when I fly because I enjoy the view and it feels more private. However, on buses or in cars I choose an aisle or middle seat because looking out the window can worsen my headaches. Therefore, my choice depends on the type of vehicle.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and correct phrasing (e.g., 'We weren't wealthy' rather than 'we're not that wealthy' when referring to childhood). Provide specifics: approximate distance, frequency, how you felt, or a brief memorable detail. Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' appropriately and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often took very long bus journeys with my family when I was a child because we couldn't afford to fly. For example, we once travelled about a thousand kilometres by bus and it took more than a day; I remember feeling tired but excited to visit relatives at the end of the trip.

× It depends on the vehicle for instance if it's plane, I prefer to sit in window, but when it comes to bus or car, I have to prefer to ail seats because I have a headache and when I say to window it's increases.

✓ It depends on the vehicle. For instance, if it's a plane, I prefer to sit by the window, but when it comes to a bus or car, I prefer to sit in the aisle seats because I get a headache and sitting by the window makes it worse.

Multiple preposition and article errors: 'sit in window' should be 'sit by the window' (correct preposition for location relative to window) and 'in window' missing article. 'when it comes to bus or car' needs articles: 'a bus or car'. 'ail seats' is a misspelling of 'aisle seats' and requires preposition 'in' or 'on' -> normally 'in the aisle seats' or 'sit in the aisle seats'; 'when I say to window it's increases' is ungrammatical and the meaning is 'sitting by the window makes it worse' so use 'sitting by the window makes it worse' or 'it makes my headache worse'. Suggestions: use articles ('a', 'the') with singular countable nouns, use 'by' with 'window', use 'aisle' spelled correctly, and express cause-effect clearly using 'makes' + object (e.g., 'makes it worse').

× When we're not that wealthy, we have to use bus although it's about a thousand kilometer.

✓ When we weren't that wealthy, we had to travel by bus even though it was about a thousand kilometers.

Tense and number errors: The context asks about childhood (past), so present tense 'we're not that wealthy' and 'we have to use bus' are wrong; use past 'we weren't' and 'we had to'. Also preposition and article: 'use bus' should be 'travel by bus'. Unit agreement: 'a thousand kilometer' needs plural 'kilometers'. Use 'even though' rather than 'although' for smoother contrast. Suggestions: match past tense to childhood context, use 'travel by' with transport, pluralize units appropriately.

× So yes, I have a long journey a lot of long journey in my childhood

✓ So yes, I had a lot of long journeys in my childhood.

Sentence structure and tense errors: 'I have a long journey a lot of long journey' is repetitive and ungrammatical. Since referring to childhood, use past tense 'I had'. Count noun 'journey' must be plural when saying 'a lot of', so 'a lot of long journeys'. Suggestions: simplify to 'I had a lot of long journeys in my childhood' or 'I went on many long journeys as a child'.