Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택을 정리하고 불필요한 반복을 줄여 자연스럽고 명확하게 말하세요. 주제문으로 바로 답한 후 이유를 1~2개로 간결하게 제시하고, 연결어(for example, because, so 등)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요. 발음이나 문법에서 'watch out the window' → 'look out of the window', 'summon pass through by me keep constantly' 같은 부분은 의미가 불분명하니 'be disturbed by people passing' 같은 표현으로 바꾸세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I enjoy looking out at the scenery. For example, on train journeys I like to watch the changing landscapes, and sitting by the window also helps me avoid being disturbed by people walking past.

Sugerencia: 과거 회상 시 시제와 문장 연결을 정확히 사용하세요. 같은 정보를 반복하기보다 이유와 결과를 간결히 연결해 말하세요. 예: 주제문(짧은 대답) → 이유(아버지의 근무) → 결과(하루 여행만 가능했다). 연결어(so, therefore, because)를 적절히 쓰면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't. When I was a child my father worked six days a week, so we only had one day off together. Therefore, our family trips were usually day trips and we never went on long journeys.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I want to watch out the window to see a view and also I don't like to summon pass through by me keep constantly.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I want to look out of the window to see the view, and I don't like people constantly passing by me.

Multiple errors: 'watch out the window' is incorrect collocation; use 'look out of the window'. 'see a view' is unnatural; use 'see the view'. 'summon pass through by me keep constantly' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely meant 'people constantly passing by me'. Also punctuation and conjunction use improved. Suggestion: use common verb collocations (look out of the window, see the view) and keep subject and verb clear (people passing by me).

× No, I didn't have any long journey with my family.

✓ No, I didn't have any long journeys with my family.

Count noun 'journey' in this context should be plural because 'any' implies zero quantity of countable items. Use plural 'journeys'. Suggestion: after 'any' use plural for countable nouns (any long journeys).

× When I was young, my father worked six days a week, so we have only one holiday, so when we went to travel, just the one day trip.

✓ When I was young, my father worked six days a week, so we had only one day off; when we travelled, it was just a one-day trip.

Tense inconsistency: main clause is past ('When I was young, my father worked...') so follow-up should use past tense ('we had', 'we travelled'). 'one holiday' is better as 'one day off' or 'one holiday a week'; 'just the one day trip' should be 'just a one-day trip' or 'just a one-day trip'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout and use correct noun forms ('one-day trip').

× I didn't have any experience of a long journey.

✓ I didn't have any experience of a long journey.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'experience of' is fine. Alternatively, for naturalness use present perfect when speaking about past experiences up to now: 'I haven't had any experience of a long journey.' Suggestion: if referring to childhood specifically, past simple is fine; if referring to life experience generally, use present perfect.