Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: ปรับความเป็นธรรมชาติและความชัดเจน: ใช้กาลให้ถูกต้อง (เช่น present simple สำหรับนิสัยปัจจุบัน), แก้คำผิดและคำใช้ไม่เหมาะสม (เช่น “wheels” ควรเป็น “views”), ลดความซ้ำซ้อนและจัดประโยคให้สั้นกระชับ ไม่ควรเกิน 5 ประโยค โดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ แล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดที่เชื่อมโยงด้วย linking words (เช่น because, so, for example) เพื่อให้สอดคล้องกับกฎ Basic Structure และ Linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I like it because I can enjoy the views and see interesting architecture in other countries. For example, on a recent flight I enjoyed watching city skylines and historic buildings from above.

Sugerencia: แก้ไวยากรณ์และความสมบูรณ์ของประโยค: ใช้ tense ให้สอดคล้อง (past simple สำหรับเหตุการณ์ในอดีต), ลบคำซ้ำหรือผิดรูป (เช่น “to went to go to” ผิด), เพิ่มรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงและใช้ linking words (e.g., because, so) เพื่ออธิบายว่าทำไมมันน่าจดจำ และจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 5 ประโยค.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. When I was seven, my family and I spent a month in France, which was the longest trip I had with them. It was very memorable because we visited many museums and I tasted new foods for the first time. For example, I remember seeing the Eiffel Tower and visiting small villages in the countryside.

× Mm Yes, I did. I usually sit by the window when I travel to another country to see beautiful wheels and the fascinating architecture of other country.

✓ Mm yes. I usually sit by the window when I travel to another country to see beautiful views and the fascinating architecture of other countries.

The speaker used 'did' (past) but the rest of the sentence describes a habitual present action, so present tense 'I usually sit' is correct; remove the inconsistent past marker 'did'. 'Wheels' is incorrect word choice for scenery; 'views' is appropriate. 'Other country' needs plural or article: use 'other countries' because 'travel to another country' then general 'other countries' when referring to architecture in multiple places. Suggestions: avoid mixing past markers with habitual present, choose correct nouns for meaning, and ensure number agreement for 'country/countries'.

× Yes I did. When I was seven years old I went to France with my family for one month.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was seven years old, I went to France with my family for one month.

The sentence is mainly correct in tense but needs punctuation and natural pauses: commas after 'Yes' and the subordinate clause. Tense 'went' correctly expresses a past event at a specific time. Suggestion: add commas to improve sentence clarity; ensure past tense is used for completed past actions.

× I believe that is the longest journey with my family I've ever had.

✓ I believe that it was the longest journey I ever had with my family.

Original mixes present 'is' with past experience 'I've ever had' causing tense inconsistency. Use past 'was' to match 'ever had' referring to a past event. Also reorder to a more natural word order. Suggestion: keep tense consistent within the sentence when referring to a past event.

× It was a memorable journey for me to went to go to

✓ It was a memorable journey for me.

Phrase 'to went to go to' is ungrammatical: 'went' is past tense and cannot follow 'to'; 'go to' is unnecessary. Simply state 'It was a memorable journey for me.' Suggestion: avoid redundant verbs and ensure correct verb forms after 'to' (use base form) and remove unfinished fragments.