Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I prefer the window seat), then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words (uh) and incomplete phrases. Use correct prepositions and article usage (e.g., “in the worst cases” or “in crowded situations”), and finish the sentence fully.

Ejemplo: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I feel less cramped there. For example, on crowded buses I often feel suffocated in the middle, so the window seat gives me more personal space and a view to relax.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and remove repetition and filler words. Add a linking phrase to make the answer coherent (e.g., “I remember one trip to…”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. I remember a trip to Shimla that took about seven hours by road, and we spent most of the time chatting, playing games and enjoying the mountain views.

× Yes, I mostly uh sit by the window when travelling because in the worst there are so many crowds so I feel suffocated when travelling and sit uh middle of the bus.

✓ Yes, I mostly sit by the window when travelling because often there are so many people that I feel suffocated when sitting in the middle of the bus.

The original sentence has tense and form issues and awkward wording. 'mostly uh sit' should be 'mostly sit' (remove filler). 'in the worst' is incorrect phrasing; use 'often' or 'at worst' depending on meaning. 'so many crowds' is unidiomatic; use 'so many people' or 'crowds' without 'many'. Also verb forms: 'I feel suffocated when travelling and sit middle of the bus' mixes actions; use 'when sitting in the middle of the bus'. This keeps present simple for habitual action and corrects preposition and noun choice.

× So I would like to prefer uh sit by the.

✓ So I would prefer to sit by the window.

The phrase 'would like to prefer uh sit by the' is ungrammatical and missing the object 'window'. Use 'would prefer to sit by the window.' 'Prefer' should be followed by 'to' + base verb. Remove filler sounds (uh) and complete the prepositional phrase.

× Yes, yes, I have a long journey when I travel with my family as a child.

✓ Yes, I had long journeys when I travelled with my family as a child.

The sentence refers to past events, so past simple should be used: 'had' instead of 'have' and 'travelled' instead of 'travel'. Also use plural 'journeys' if more than one, or 'a long journey' if singular. 'As a child' indicates habitual past action.

× I remember when I, I, when we are going to Shimla, uh, it uh, it takes uh, 7 hours to reach, to reach the Shimla city.

✓ I remember when we went to Shimla: it took seven hours to reach Shimla city.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses and contains repetitions and fillers. Use past tense 'went' and 'took' for a remembered past event. Remove repeated words ('I, I', 'it, it') and fillers (uh). 'The Shimla city' is unnatural; use 'Shimla' or 'Shimla city' without 'the'. Also write numbers as words in formal speech: 'seven hours'.