Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: ปรับความชัดเจนของประโยคและใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง รวมทั้งจัดโครงสร้างให้เป็นประโยคเริ่มต้นตอบตรงคำถามแล้วเสริมรายละเอียดโดยใช้คำเชื่อม ตัวอย่างจุดที่ต้องแก้: ใช้ “sit by the window” แทน “buy window” และ “travel” แทน “drawing”; เพิ่มเหตุผลเฉพาะเจาะจงและลำดับความคิดให้ชัด (เช่น บรรยายสิ่งที่ชอบมอง)

Ejemplo: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, I like seeing mountains, fields and small towns, which makes the journey more relaxing and interesting.

Sugerencia: ปรับให้ตอบเป็นอดีตกาลชัดเจน แก้คำศัพท์และชื่อสถานที่ให้ถูกต้อง ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น จุดหมาย ระยะเวลาและความประทับใจ พร้อมเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น ‘because’ หรือ ‘for example’

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. We traveled from my hometown to Hawaii, which took about four hours by plane, and I remember feeling excited to see the ocean and visit new places.

× Yes, I prefer to buy window when drawing because I love to look out about everyone. And yeah.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I love to look out at everything.

The student used incorrect verbs and nouns: 'buy window' and 'drawing' are wrong in this context. Use 'sit by the window' (correct collocation) and 'travelling' to match the examiner's question. 'Look out about everyone' is ungrammatical; use 'look out at everything' or 'look at everything' to express observing the view. Suggestion: learn common verb+noun collocations (sit by the window, sit in the window seat) and correct preposition for 'look out at'. Ensure vocabulary matches context (travelling, not drawing).

× Yes I have a long journey with my family at that time when I was young umm in my opinion the long the most of journey is going to Hui him because I'm from submarine and I we want to travel to Hawaii this take like 4 hours from here.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was young. In my opinion, the longest trip was going to Hawaii because I'm from Subic and we wanted to travel to Hawaii; it took about 4 hours from here.

Multiple errors: tense inconsistency ('I have a long journey' should be past 'I had a long journey' because it refers to childhood), incorrect superlative and word order ('the long the most of journey' -> 'the longest trip'), place names and nouns errors ('Hui him' -> 'Hawaii', 'submarine' likely intended 'Subic' or 'suburb' but keep it as a proper noun, adjusted to 'Subic' as plausible), verb agreement and tense for travel ('we want' -> 'we wanted'), and wrong verb form for duration ('this take' -> 'it took'). Suggestions: use past simple for completed past events, use regular superlative forms correctly (long -> longest), check proper nouns and spelling, and match verb tenses across related clauses.