Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문법과 자연스러운 표현을 다듬고 응답을 조금 더 구체화하세요. 예: 'in a airplane'는 'on a plane' 또는 'in an airplane'으로 고치고, 연결어를 사용해 이유를 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한 여행 상황(비행기 외에 기차 등)이나 구체적 장면(일출, 산, 바다 등)을 덧붙이면 내용이 풍부해집니다. 문장 길이는 최대 5문장으로 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually prefer sitting by the window on a plane because I enjoy watching the landscape below. For instance, I like seeing mountains and coastlines during takeoff and landing, which makes the journey more memorable. So whenever possible, I choose a window seat when I book my ticket.

Sugerencia: 문장의 연결과 세부사항을 더 명확히 하세요. 예: 'The local food such as soup, Curry, I still remember the moment.'은 어순과 문장구조가 어색합니다. 구체적인 경험(어떤 동물, 어떤 음식, 기억에 남는 장면)을 추가하고 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 최대 5문장으로 응답을 구성하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, when I was a child my family took a long trip to Sapporo, Japan. I remember feeling very happy because we explored beautiful natural scenery and saw animals like deer. We also tried local dishes such as hot soup and Japanese curry, which tasted delicious. That trip left a strong impression on me because of the food and the peaceful landscapes.

× Yes, I prefer sitting by the window in a airplane because I want to see a beautiful landscape.

✓ Yes, I prefer sitting by the window on an airplane because I want to see beautiful landscapes.

'in a airplane' is incorrect preposition and article: use 'on an airplane'. 'a airplane' should be 'an airplane' for vowel sound. 'a beautiful landscape' is odd when speaking generally; use plural 'beautiful landscapes' or 'the beautiful landscape'. Use 'sitting' is acceptable after 'prefer'. Suggestion: say 'I prefer sitting by the window on an airplane because I want to see beautiful landscapes.'

× So I try to choose window seat when I buy tickets for travel.

✓ So I try to choose a window seat when I buy tickets for travel.

'choose window seat' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'window seat'. Use 'a window seat'. Also 'for travel' is grammatical but 'when I buy tickets to travel' or 'when I buy travel tickets' sounds more natural. Suggestion: 'I try to choose a window seat when I buy travel tickets.'

× Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?

✓ Did you have long journeys with your family as a child?

Question from examiner: 'Did you have a long journey...' may be acceptable, but student response should match plurality. No change required for student here; this suggestion not applicable to student answer. Note: keep tense consistency: use past simple 'did' for childhood events.'

× Yes, I did. When I was young, we visited Sapporo in Japan.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was young, we visited Sapporo, Japan.

Comma use: 'Sapporo in Japan' is acceptable, but more natural is 'Sapporo, Japan'. No tense error: past simple 'visited' correctly matches 'did'. Suggestion: 'When I was young, we visited Sapporo, Japan.'

× At the time I was really happy because we could see beautiful nature and many animals, and we also enjoyed it.

✓ At the time I was really happy because we could see beautiful nature and many animals, and we really enjoyed it.

'enjoyed it' is vague; 'really enjoyed it' is more natural. 'beautiful nature' is uncountable but acceptable; consider 'the beautiful natural scenery' for clarity. Suggestion: '...because we could see the beautiful natural scenery and many animals, and we really enjoyed it.'

× The local food such as soup, Curry, I still remember the moment.

✓ I still remember the local food, such as soup and curry, and the moment.

Original sentence is ungrammatical: misordered phrases and incorrect capitalization 'Curry'. 'Such as' should introduce examples within the noun phrase. Rearranged to 'I still remember the local food, such as soup and curry, and the moment.' Suggestion: 'I still remember the local food, such as soup and curry, and the moment.'