Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and grammar, shorten redundancy, and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct subject-verb agreement and avoid repeating ideas. Keep answer to under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, on road trips to the mountains I like looking at the peaks, rivers and cloud formations, which makes me feel relaxed and excited. Additionally, sitting by the window helps me take photos and notice small details I would miss otherwise.

Sugerencia: Focus on clear grammar, sentence structure and specific details. Use a correct subject order and tense, avoid filler words, and explain one vivid memory or typical routine. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make the answer coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes. As a child my family often took long trips around New Year to visit temples in different regions. For instance, one year we traveled for three days to a famous temple by the coast, and I remember enjoying the pilgrim processions and local food. Because of these trips I always looked forward to New Year holidays.

× They makes me feel so overwhelmed that I get.

✓ They make me feel so overwhelmed.

The subject 'They' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'make' not 'makes'. Also the clause 'that I get' is incomplete and unnecessary; remove it to form a complete, natural sentence. Suggestion: use 'They make me feel so overwhelmed.'

× New Year was the time when me and my family used to go to different sort of temples all around the world and travel them.

✓ New Year was the time when my family and I used to visit different kinds of temples around the world.

Use subject pronoun order 'my family and I' (not 'me and my family') when it functions as the subject of the clause. 'Go to' is acceptable but 'visit' is a more natural collocation with 'temples'. 'Different sort of' is incorrect; use 'different kinds of' or 'different types of'. 'Travel them' is not correct English; you 'visit' temples. Suggestion: 'New Year was the time when my family and I used to visit different kinds of temples around the world.'

× Uh, whenever New Year were closed, I would get excited because I get to G travel.

✓ Uh, whenever New Year was close, I would get excited because I got to travel.

'New Year' is singular, so use 'was' not 'were'. The sequence of tenses should match: past habitual 'would get excited' pairs with past 'got to travel' (not present 'get'). 'Close' is the correct adjective here; 'closed' suggests being shut. Remove stray 'G'. Suggestion: 'Whenever New Year was close, I would get excited because I got to travel.'

× Yes, I love sitting by the window when traveling because I get to see the views outside and whenever I am going on a road trip with my family and friends to mountains, I love seeing the scenic views of the mountains, the clouds, the rivers.

✓ Yes, I love sitting by the window when traveling because I get to see the views outside, and whenever I go on a road trip with my family and friends to the mountains, I love seeing the scenic views of the mountains, the clouds, and the rivers.

Use the simple present 'go' instead of the progressive 'am going' for habitual actions: 'whenever I go on a road trip'. Also add the article 'the' before 'mountains' when specifying a known location. Use commas to separate items in a list. Suggestion: '...whenever I go on a road trip with my family and friends to the mountains, I love seeing the scenic views of the mountains, the clouds, and the rivers.'