Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 発音や語法の誤り、文法の乱れ、語彙の不適切な使用が目立ちます。まずは簡潔なトピック文を作り、続けて具体的な詳細（どんな景色が好きか、いつ見るか、気持ちの説明など）を1～2文で付け加えてください。つなぎ言葉（for example, because, when）を使うことでまとまりが良くなります。また不自然な語句（Runescape, vessel, drinking away など）を日常的な語彙（countryside, window, while travelling）に置き換え、文法は現在形で統一しましょう。練習例：短く自然な一文で始め、その後に理由と具体例をつける。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I especially enjoy watching the countryside because the rolling fields and trees make me feel relaxed. For example, I like to watch farmers working or birds flying, which helps me unwind during long journeys.

Sugerencia: 文法（動詞形・時制）の誤りと不自然な表現が多いです。まず主文で直接回答し、その後に理由や状況を一文で説明しましょう。接続詞（because, but, however）を正しく使い、冗長な語句は避けてください。また‘take photos’に関する具体例（どんな被写体、どのタイミングで撮るか）を入れると説得力が増します。窓が開かないことを説明する際は簡潔に述べ、感情表現も自然な語彙で表しましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the window of a train or bus. I prefer to open the window because it lets me take clearer pictures, but recent trains usually have fixed windows, so I sometimes feel frustrated when my photos have reflections.

Sugerencia: 答えは伝わりますが、語順や語彙選択、文のまとまりが改善できます。まずは簡潔な意見（I prefer the mountains.）で始め、続けて理由を2つ程度示してください（clean air, peaceful atmosphereなど）。‘refresh’の使い方は良いが、その後の表現（green soap）は不適切なので‘green scenery’や‘lush greenery’に直しましょう。接続語（because, when）を使って理由を明確に述べてください。

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because hiking there refreshes me. The air is cleaner and the lush greenery and quiet trails help me relax and escape from city noise.

× I often taking picture from the window of train or buses.

✓ I often take pictures from the window of trains or buses.

The original sentence uses the progressive form 'taking' incorrectly after 'often', which indicates a habitual action and requires the base form 'take'. Also use plural 'pictures' and plural 'trains'/'buses' for general statements. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions: 'I often take pictures from the window of trains or buses.'

× I love seeing beautiful Runescape wilderness dropping like wilderness from the window of the vessel.

✓ I love seeing beautiful wilderness from the window of the vehicle.

The phrase 'dropping like wilderness' is unclear and 'from the window of the vessel' is unnatural; 'vehicle' is a better general noun and 'from the window' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also remove redundant words. Suggestion: simplify to 'I love seeing beautiful wilderness from the window of the vehicle.'

× The train or car can go very tranquil and calm nature and easily and I can see with drinking away.

✓ When I travel by train or car, the scenery can be very tranquil and calm, and I can relax while looking out.

The original sentence has mixed and incorrect clauses ('go very tranquil and calm nature', 'see with drinking away') and wrong word choices. Restructure the sentence to use a time clause and clear verbs: 'When I travel..., the scenery can be..., and I can relax while looking out.' Use 'relax' instead of the unclear 'drinking away.'

× Although I love to open the window and take picture because I can take a beautiful and more clean picture.

✓ Although I love to open the window and take pictures because I can take cleaner, more beautiful pictures.

Use plural 'pictures' and place adjectives in correct order ('cleaner, more beautiful'). Also 'more clean' is unidiomatic; use comparative 'cleaner.' Keep parallel structure: 'take cleaner, more beautiful pictures.'

× But the reasons latest trains cannot open the window so I miserably.

✓ But recently trains cannot open their windows, so I feel disappointed.

The original sentence is ungrammatical: 'the reasons latest trains' is incorrect word order; 'so I miserably' lacks a verb. Correct to 'recently trains cannot open their windows' and use an appropriate verb 'feel disappointed.' Suggestion: 'But recently trains cannot open their windows, so I feel disappointed.'

× I prefer going mountains, going or seeing mountains.

✓ I prefer going to the mountains or seeing mountains.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'going' and include the definite article 'the' before 'mountains' when speaking generally: 'the mountains.' Also avoid repetition. Suggestion: 'I prefer going to the mountains.'

× It is because as I hike up mountain I can refresh when it's very clean air and the nature and green soap I can't.

✓ It is because when I hike up a mountain I can feel refreshed by the clean air and nature.

The original mixes tenses and has incorrect nouns ('green soap') and missing articles ('a mountain'). Use 'when I hike up a mountain' and 'feel refreshed' (adjective) with correct nouns 'clean air and nature.' Remove unclear phrase 'green soap.' Suggestion: 'It is because when I hike up a mountain I feel refreshed by the clean air and nature.'