Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct word order. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and fix grammar (e.g. “built are” → “are built”). Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word.

Ejemplo: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because Hong Kong has limited land, so most developments are high-rise towers. For example, several residential blocks nearby exceed 50 storeys, which makes the skyline very dense.

Sugerencia: Open with a clear direct answer, remove fillers, and combine sentences with a linking word. Give a specific example (where/when) to make the answer more vivid.

Ejemplo: Not usually. I only photograph buildings when they have unusual designs; for instance, I once photographed a triangular office tower near Central last year because its glass façade looked striking at sunset.

Sugerencia: Clarify the topic sentence and remove unclear fragments (e.g. “There aren't really abusing that”). Use linking words to structure reasons and emotions, and be more specific about which building. Avoid sentence fragments.

Ejemplo: There isn't a particular local building I plan to visit, but I would like to see the world’s tallest skyscraper, such as the Burj Khalifa. Although I think the view would be spectacular, I would feel nervous about the height, so I might only go up to a safe observation deck.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct answer, avoid repetition and stuttering, and use linking words to explain reasons. Mention a specific preference and a brief comparison to support your view.

Ejemplo: Not really. I’m afraid of heights, so I would prefer to live in a low-rise house like those commonly found in the United States or the UK because they offer more privacy and are not dozens of storeys high.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because Hong Kong has limited space, limited land, so almost all of the buildings are built are high rise building with over 50 stories.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because Hong Kong has limited space and limited land, so almost all of the buildings that are built are high-rise buildings with over 50 stories.

The sentence had singular/plural mismatches: 'high rise building' should be plural 'high-rise buildings' to agree with 'almost all of the buildings'. Also 'built are' needs a relative pronoun 'that' to connect clauses. Combine 'limited space, limited land' with 'and' for clarity. Hyphenate 'high-rise' as a compound modifier.

× I usually won't take photos of buildings unless they are special. They have special shapes, so I've taken, uh, a building before that looks like a triangle.

✓ I usually don't take photos of buildings unless they are special. They have special shapes, so I've taken a photo of a building before that looks like a triangle.

'Won't' implies future refusal; 'don't' is the correct habitual negative. 'Taken, uh, a building' is incorrect: use 'taken a photo of a building' — object requires 'photo' and the preposition 'of'. Maintain present perfect 'I've taken' for past experience.

× There aren't really abusing that. I would like to visit, but if you ask me, maybe the world's tallest building because I think it will be a rare sight and it will be very. It would be great to visit there, but I'm sure I will be very scared.

✓ There aren't really any buildings that I would like to visit, but if you ask me, maybe the world's tallest building because I think it would be a rare sight. It would be great to visit it, but I'm sure I would be very scared.

Original had garbled phrase 'aren't really abusing that' and sentence fragments. Replace with 'There aren't really any buildings that I would like to visit' for clarity. Use conditional/modal consistency: 'would' for hypothetical ('would be a rare sight', 'would be great', 'would be very scared'). Use 'visit it' not 'visit there'.

× Not really I'm really scared of heights so I actually want to live in a a house like those in United States or United United Kingdom unlike because unlike Hong Kong they're they are usually a house but not A50 story high buildings.

✓ Not really. I'm really scared of heights, so I would actually like to live in a house like those in the United States or the United Kingdom, because unlike Hong Kong, they are usually houses and not 50-story buildings.

Problems: missing punctuation causing run-on sentence; repeated words 'United United Kingdom'; incorrect pronoun/number agreement 'they are usually a house' should be 'they are usually houses'. 'A50 story high buildings' should be '50-story buildings'. Added articles 'the' before country names and 'because' placed correctly. Use 'would' for preference to match hypothetical tone.