Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief specific examples with one or two details each. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetition (e.g., '63 building' repeated). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. However, Seoul has many skyscrapers, such as the 63 Building, which has 63 floors, and the Lotte Tower, which is even taller. Both are well-known landmarks and good examples of modern architecture.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more direct and avoid repetition. Use one linking phrase to add a specific reason or example, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Replace vague phrases with concise descriptions.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings, especially at sunset, because the orange light reflects off the windows and creates striking colors. For example, I often shoot high-rise facades to capture the contrast between glass reflections and the evening sky.

Sugerencia: Be natural and avoid overly personal or repeated phrases. Begin with a clear topic sentence saying which building and why, then add one specific reason or activity. Remove redundant sentences and casual expressions like 'I'm really hoping this year would be my year.'

Ejemplo: I would like to visit Namsan Tower in Seoul because it offers panoramic city views and is a popular spot for couples. I’d like to go there with my girlfriend to take photos and enjoy the view at sunset.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide two brief, specific reasons with linking words. Avoid long hypothetical clauses and repetition of the negative. Use calm, measured language for clarity.

Ejemplo: No, I would not want to live in a tall building. Firstly, I’m afraid of heights, which would make me uncomfortable, and secondly, I worry about safety during events like earthquakes, which could make evacuation difficult.

× One of them is called 63 building.

✓ One of them is called the 63 Building.

Buildings that have a specific name commonly take the definite article and proper capitalization. Use 'the' before '63 Building' and capitalize 'Building' to treat it as a proper noun. Suggestion: say 'the 63 Building' or '63 Building'.

× It's called 63 because there are total 63 floors in that building.

✓ It's called 63 because there are a total of 63 floors in that building.

Missing article 'a' and preposition 'of' in the phrase 'a total of'. Use 'a total of 63 floors' for correct idiomatic expression. Also 'there are' is correct for plural 'floors'.

× Another example is of Lotte Tower.

✓ Another example is the Lotte Tower.

Incorrect use of 'of' after 'example'. Use 'Another example is the Lotte Tower' or 'Another example is Lotte Tower'. Include 'the' if using the full name with 'Tower'.

× Uh, it's much taller than 63 building though.

✓ Uh, it's much taller than the 63 Building, though.

Missing definite article and capitalization when referring to the named building. Add 'the' and capitalize 'Building'.

× I love taking photos of the buildings, especially during the sunset.

✓ I love taking photos of buildings, especially during sunset.

Definite article 'the' is unnecessary before plural 'buildings' in general statements. Also 'during sunset' is more natural than 'during the sunset' for habitual actions.

× It's so beautiful because the the orange color of the sunset reflects the windows and it makes buildings so pretty and the surroundings of the sky and setting of the sun makes it more beautiful.

✓ It's so beautiful because the orange color of the sunset reflects off the windows and makes the buildings and the sky look more beautiful.

Redundant 'the the' is a duplication error. Use 'reflects off the windows' not 'reflects the windows'. 'Makes buildings so pretty and the surroundings of the sky and setting of the sun makes it more beautiful' is repetitive and has subject-verb agreement issues ('surroundings ... makes' should be 'surroundings ... make'). The corrected sentence combines ideas concisely, uses correct verb-object relationships, and ensures subject-verb agreement.

× I would love to visit Namsa Tower in Seoul.

✓ I would love to visit Namsan Tower in Seoul.

Spelling error in proper noun: 'Namsan' is the correct name. Proper nouns must be accurate; no preposition error here but name correction is necessary.

× It's quite popular amongst the couples and I would love to take my girlfriend there and take photos and create a love log and make some memories.

✓ It's quite popular among couples, and I would love to take my girlfriend there to take photos, create a love log, and make some memories.

Use 'among' rather than 'amongst' in modern American English (both are acceptable but 'among' is more common). 'The couples' implies specific couples; use 'couples' generally. Use 'to' before the verb phrase showing purpose ('to take photos'). Parallel list of actions needs commas and 'and' for clarity.

× I'm really hoping this year would be my year to take her to Namsan Tower.

✓ I'm really hoping this year will be my year to take her to Namsan Tower.

Mixing present progressive 'I'm really hoping' with conditional 'would' is awkward. Use 'will' to express desired future outcome. Alternatively, 'would' could be used after a past reporting verb, but here 'will' fits the speaker's current hope.

× Not really because I'm scared of heights and I would keep thinking about what if earthquake happens and it would be hard for me to escape or the building collapses.

✓ Not really, because I'm scared of heights and I would keep thinking about what would happen if an earthquake occurred, and it would be hard for me to escape if the building collapsed.

Missing article 'an' before 'earthquake'. Sentence structure and conditional phrasing need improvement: use 'what would happen if an earthquake occurred' for clarity. Use consistent conditional forms: 'would keep thinking' is acceptable, but pair with 'if the building collapsed' for parallel conditional structure. Also add commas for readability.

× So no, I would not like to live in tall buildings.

✓ So no, I would not like to live in a tall building.

Speaker refers to living in a single tall building (general preference) so singular 'a tall building' is more natural. If the speaker meant 'tall buildings' in general, the original is possible, but singular fits better with fear of heights and escaping one building. Ensure noun number matches intended meaning.