Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (use possessive/name forms), avoid redundancy and irrelevant information.

Ejemplo: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, including Zizzi Landmark, a popular shopping mall. For example, it has many clothing stores and entertainment areas, such as game arcades, which attract families and shoppers.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct yes/no statement, then give one clear reason and a specific time or example. Use correct time expressions and reduce repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'especially when'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially at sunset, because the light creates beautiful colours and reflections. For instance, I like taking pictures of the city skyline as the sun sets, which produces dramatic silhouettes.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence naming the place, then explain why with specific reasons. Correct the building/place name and vocabulary (e.g. 'Bharatanatyam' seems incorrect for a building). Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases like 'I am carving'.

Ejemplo: Yes. I would like to visit a well-known shopping complex called Bharatnagar Market because it offers a wide range of international restaurants and specialty food stalls. For example, I want to try the seafood restaurants there, since I really enjoy fresh seafood.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons using linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so'). Correct awkward phrases and grammar (e.g. 'I would not mind' vs 'I would not want'). Keep it concise and natural.

Ejemplo: No, I would not want to live in a tall building because evacuating during emergencies like fires or earthquakes would be difficult. Therefore, I prefer a low-rise house where I would feel safer and could leave quickly if needed.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings near my house and one building name is Zizzi Landmark which is a famous shopping mall and it is opened by the other groups and it consists of many things such as clothes stores and it also consists of playing stations.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my house, and one building called Zizzi Landmark is a famous shopping mall. It was opened by another group and contains many things such as clothing stores and play areas.

Multiple errors: 'one building name is' is unidiomatic and should be 'one building called' (phrase choice). 'opened by the other groups' is unclear; use 'opened by another group' (article/pronoun and singular/plural clarity). 'consists of many things such as clothes stores' — verb choice and noun form: use 'contains' and 'clothing stores'. 'it also consists of playing stations' — 'playing stations' is awkward; use 'play areas'. Suggestions: use 'called' to name buildings, 'opened by another group' for singular actor, use 'contains' or 'includes' for what a building has, and use correct noun forms like 'clothing stores' and idiomatic 'play areas'.

× Yes, I take the photos of innings when it is a nearly or midnight time and when that the sun goes down and it makes a beautiful scenario of that building and it makes the good image of building also.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings near midnight when the sun goes down because it creates a beautiful view and makes the building look good.

Errors: 'photos of innings' is incorrect word choice — should be 'photos of buildings'. 'when it is a nearly or midnight time' is ungrammatical; use 'near midnight'. 'when that the sun goes down' is redundant; use 'when the sun goes down'. 'it makes a beautiful scenario' — 'scenario' is wrong here; use 'beautiful view'. 'it makes the good image of building also' — awkward; use 'makes the building look good'. Suggestions: use concise clauses, correct noun choices, and common collocations like 'near midnight', 'when the sun goes down', and 'creates a beautiful view'.

× Yes, there is one building I would like to visit which is a Bharatanatyam.

✓ Yes, there is one building I would like to visit, which is named Bharatanatyam.

Problem: 'which is a Bharatanatyam' is incorrect because Bharatanatyam is a dance form, not typically a building name; at minimum use 'named Bharatanatyam'. The structure 'there is one building I would like to visit which is...' needs a comma before 'which'. Suggestions: use 'named' to indicate the building's name and add the comma for the nonrestrictive clause.

× It is a famous store of Nepal and it consists of various kinds of stores and it mainly popular for the international foods such as seafood which is I love to eat and I am carving.

✓ It is a famous store in Nepal and contains various kinds of shops; it is mainly popular for international foods such as seafood, which I love to eat and crave.

Preposition and word choice errors: use 'in Nepal' not 'of Nepal'. 'consists of various kinds of stores' is awkward; use 'contains various kinds of shops'. 'mainly popular for' should be 'mainly popular for' or better 'is mainly known for'. 'such as seafood which is I love to eat and I am carving' has pronoun and verb errors: should be 'which I love to eat and crave'. Suggestions: use 'in' for location, 'shops' for retail places, 'known for' or 'popular for', and correct verb forms 'I love' and 'I crave'.

× No, I would not mind to live in tall building because if there is an emergency such as fire and earthquake then it will be difficult for me to go down in an emergency situation which makes my life freaks.

✓ No, I would not want to live in a tall building because if there is an emergency such as a fire or an earthquake, it would be difficult for me to get down, which would scare me.

Modal and verb pattern issues: 'would not mind to live' is incorrect collocation; use 'would not want to live' or 'would not mind living'. 'in tall building' needs an article: 'in a tall building'. 'such as fire and earthquake' needs articles and conjunction: 'such as a fire or an earthquake'. 'it will be difficult for me to go down in an emergency situation' is wordy; 'it would be difficult for me to get down' matches conditional mood. 'which makes my life freaks' is ungrammatical; use 'which would scare me'. Suggestions: choose correct modal collocations (would not mind + -ing), include articles, and use 'would' for hypothetical situations.

× So I would choose to live in a small building.

✓ So I would choose to live in a small building instead.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but slightly abrupt. Adding 'instead' clarifies contrast with the previous statement. Suggestion: use linking words like 'instead' to improve coherence.