Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct, correct grammar, avoid irrelevant words and give a brief supporting detail. Use a clear topic sentence, one linking phrase and one specific detail. Also correct vocabulary (e.g., “skyscraper”) and verb forms.

Ejemplo: No, there are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a semi-rural area. However, when I lived in the city centre I was surrounded by many skyscrapers, which were noisy and crowded.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, use linking words (for example, therefore, so) and give specific examples of what you photograph. Correct grammar (e.g., “teach him”, “different kinds”, “how buildings have evolved”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy architectural photography, especially to help my son who is studying for a diploma in architecture. For example, when I travel to other states I photograph different styles—modern glass facades and older colonial buildings—so I can explain how building design and construction methods have evolved over time.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct facts and tense, and add a specific reason why you want to visit. Use linking words like because or since to connect details.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love to visit the Taj Mahal in Agra because it is a world-famous monument known for its beautiful architecture and history. I have not had the chance yet, but I hope to visit one day to see its marble inlay work and learn about its historical significance.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with one clear reason, correct grammar and word choice, and provide a brief supporting detail using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid trailing off and unclear words.

Ejemplo: Not really. I lived on the 24th floor once, but I found the lifts unreliable and it was exhausting, so I moved to a semi-rural area to enjoy a quieter, more peaceful life.

× No, there is no any kind of Skype or high rise building in my surrounding because I'm living in semi rural area.

✓ No, there are no skyscrapers or high-rise buildings in my surroundings because I live in a semi-rural area.

Article errors (22) and singular/plural (1): 'no any' is incorrect; use 'no' with plural noun or 'not any'. 'Skype' is wrong word; likely 'skyscraper'. 'high rise building' should be plural and hyphenated: 'high-rise buildings'. 'my surrounding' should be plural 'my surroundings'. 'I'm living' in this general statement better as simple present 'I live'. Suggest using correct nouns and plural forms and simple present for general facts.

× But when I used to live in city center I was surrounded by lots of tower but those were very noisy and make me.

✓ But when I used to live in the city centre I was surrounded by lots of towers; they were very noisy and upset me.

Past tense issue (5) and article error (22): 'city center' needs definite article 'the city centre'. 'lots of tower' should be plural 'lots of towers'. 'make me' is incomplete and incorrect tense; use past 'upset me' or 'they bothered me'. Use punctuation to separate clauses. Also maintain past tense consistency when describing past habits.

× Oh, I love to do some architectural photography, especially for my son who is doing his diploma in architecture.

✓ Oh, I love doing architectural photography, especially for my son, who is doing a diploma in architecture.

Preposition/article issues (11,22): 'love to do' is acceptable but 'love doing' is more natural. 'his diploma' could be correct, but common collocation is 'a diploma in architecture'. Add commas around the relative clause. These changes improve naturalness and article use.

× Uh, so I do collect some photos whenever I visit in any other state, state of my country, uh, so I can educate on him, him about many different kind of designs and also the building process or evolved by the time.

✓ So I collect photos whenever I visit other states of my country so I can teach him about many different kinds of designs and how building processes have evolved over time.

Preposition (11), pronoun (12), plural and verb tense issues (1,6,9): Remove unnecessary 'in' after 'visit'. Use plural 'states'. 'educate on him, him' is wrong — use 'teach him'. 'many different kind' should be 'many different kinds'. 'the building process or evolved by the time' is ungrammatical; use 'how building processes have evolved over time' (present perfect for change over time).

× I'm highly interested to explore Taj Mahal, which is situated in Agra, just 10 kilometre away from Delhi.

✓ I'm very interested in exploring the Taj Mahal, which is situated in Agra, about 200 kilometres from Delhi.

Adjective/adverb and preposition issues (13,11) and article (22): 'highly interested to explore' is unidiomatic — use 'very interested in exploring'. 'Taj Mahal' usually takes the definite article 'the'. '10 kilometre' is likely incorrect distance; if intent was 200 km (commonly approx.), use 'about 200 kilometres'; if keeping original number, write '10 kilometres'. Use 'from' not 'away from' or use 'about X kilometres from'.

× Uh, it is also one of the 7th wonders of the world.

✓ It is also one of the seven wonders of the world.

Adjective/order/article errors (13,17): 'one of the 7th wonders' is incorrect — use 'one of the seven wonders'. Do not mix 'one of the' with an ordinal ('7th'); use the cardinal word form. Spell out small numbers for formality.

× But unfortunately I had never chance to go there and explore its beauty and magnificent building.

✓ But unfortunately I have never had the chance to go there and explore its beauty and magnificent architecture.

Past tense and article errors (5,22): 'had never chance' is missing 'the' and incorrect tense; use present perfect 'have never had the chance' to indicate life experience. 'magnificent building' is odd; use 'magnificent architecture' or 'the magnificent building'.

× But I'm really hopeful that one day I will go and see the.

✓ But I'm really hopeful that one day I will go and see it.

Sentence structure/omission (26): Sentence is incomplete — missing object 'it'. Add 'it' to refer to the Taj Mahal. Maintain future tense 'will go and see it'.

× Not really, I shifted to a 24th floor but I felt really tired and exhausting or just fed up from elevator issue.

✓ Not really. I used to live on the 24th floor, but I felt really tired and exhausted and fed up with elevator problems.

Tense and word choice (5,13,11): 'shifted to a 24th floor' is unnatural; use 'used to live on the 24th floor' or 'I moved to the 24th floor'. 'tired and exhausting' is wrong — 'exhausted' describes the person. 'fed up from' should be 'fed up with'. 'elevator issue' should be plural 'elevator problems'.

× That's why I shifted to Samir rural area just to live peacefully and in.

✓ That's why I moved to a semi-rural area to live peacefully.

Sentence structure and article errors (26,22): 'shifted to Samir rural area' is unclear and likely misspelled; use 'moved to a semi-rural area'. Remove the trailing 'and in' which is incomplete. Use 'to live peacefully' to complete purpose clause.