Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition like 'near close to'.

Ejemplo: Yes. There is a residential skyscraper near my flat. However, Zurich does not have many tall buildings compared with Shanghai, where skyscrapers are much more common.

Sugerencia: Make the purpose clearer and correct phrasing errors. Use linking words to connect reasons and avoid informal or vague words like 'funny looking' without description. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph unusual buildings to remember their appearance. I also share these photos with friends so they can see the unique architectural features I found interesting.

Sugerencia: Organise into a topic sentence plus specific supporting details and remove repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and be precise about what you expect to see.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because it offers spectacular views. For example, a friend who visited last year told me you can see the city skyline and the Hudson River from the observation deck.

Sugerencia: Eliminate hesitations and informal language. Give one clear reason and a brief personal plan or comparison. Correct vocabulary errors (e.g., 'bond' likely meant 'Bund' or 'harbour') and avoid slang like 'gonna'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer fantastic city views. In the future, I hope to live in Shanghai in a high-rise so I can enjoy views of the Bund, although I know it would be expensive.

× Yes, there is one tall building near close to my flat, but it's not an office building, it's a residential skyscraper.

✓ Yes, there is one tall building close to my flat, but it is not an office building; it is a residential skyscraper.

The phrase 'near close to' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use either 'near my flat' or 'close to my flat.' Also replace the contracted 'it's' with 'it is' for formality and separate independent clauses properly with a semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: choose one locative expression and ensure clauses are joined correctly.

× In the city that I live in, in Zurich, we don't have that many skyscrapers.

✓ In the city where I live, Zurich, we do not have many skyscrapers.

'In the city that I live in' is wordy and ends with a preposition; use 'where I live' or restructure. Also 'that' is unnecessary when naming the city. 'Don't have that many' is informal; 'do not have many' is clearer. Suggestion: streamline relative clause and avoid redundant prepositions.

× If I compare it to Shanghai, where there are a lot of skyscrapers.

✓ If I compare it to Shanghai, there are a lot more skyscrapers there.

This fragment begins with 'If' but lacks a main clause, making it incomplete. Change to a complete comparative sentence. Also add 'more' to show comparison and place 'there' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid starting with a conditional 'If' unless you complete the clause.

× Yes, I take pictures of funny looking buildings because I want to remember how they looked like.

✓ Yes, I take pictures of funny-looking buildings because I want to remember how they looked.

'Funny looking' should be hyphenated as the compound adjective 'funny-looking.' The phrase 'remember how they looked like' is incorrect: use either 'remember how they looked' or 'remember what they looked like.' The verb form 'looked' is correct for past appearance; choose one structure. Suggestion: use hyphenation for compound adjectives and avoid redundant 'like' after 'how.'

× Another reason is I want to show my friends the unique buildings that I saw in different cities so they can also laugh.

✓ Another reason is that I want to show my friends the unique buildings I have seen in different cities so they can also laugh.

When referring to experiences at unspecified times in the past that relate to the present, present perfect ('have seen') is appropriate. Include 'that' after 'reason is' for clarity. Also 'the unique buildings that I saw' is wordier; 'the unique buildings I have seen' is smoother. Suggestion: use present perfect for past experiences relevant now and include conjunctions for clarity.

× Yes, there is the Empire State Building in New York.

✓ Yes, the Empire State Building is in New York.

Use subject-predicate order for natural English. 'There is the Empire State Building in New York' is grammatical but awkward here; rephrasing as 'The Empire State Building is in New York' is clearer. Suggestion: prefer direct subject order when naming specific well-known buildings.

× I would love to visit.

✓ I would love to visit it.

Context requires an object; 'visit' is transitive here referring to the building. Omitting the object is possible in casual speech but adding 'it' makes the sentence complete. Suggestion: include the pronoun 'it' when the referent is clear.

× It's one of the tallest buildings and I heard from a friend who visited last year that the view is amazing.

✓ It is one of the tallest buildings, and I heard from a friend who visited last year that the view is amazing.

Main issue is punctuation and formality: expand contractions and add a comma before the conjunction connecting two independent clauses. The grammar is otherwise correct. Suggestion: use proper punctuation to join clauses and avoid contractions for formal answers.

× You see all over New York, you see the skyscrapers.

✓ When you look over New York, you can see the skyscrapers everywhere.

Original repeats 'you see' awkwardly and has unclear adverb placement. Change to 'When you look over New York' and add 'can' for ability, placing 'everywhere' at the end for clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetitive phrasing and place adverbs where they clearly modify the verb.

× You also see the Hudson River.

✓ You can also see the Hudson River.

Add 'can' to indicate the ability to see the river from the building; this makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: include modal 'can' when describing what is visible or possible.

× I would love to see.

✓ I would love to see it.

As before, 'see' needs an object referring to the view or the river. Omitting the object makes the sentence incomplete. Suggestion: include the pronoun 'it' to complete the thought.

× I would love to live in a tall building because when you look out of the window, you see, umm, the skyline of the city.

✓ I would love to live in a tall building because when you look out of the window, you can see the city's skyline.

Replace hesitations like 'umm' and use 'can see' to indicate ability. 'The skyline of the city' is wordy; 'the city's skyline' is more natural. Suggestion: remove fillers in responses and use concise noun phrases.

× You have an amazing and spectacular view.

✓ You have an amazing, spectacular view.

Using both 'amazing' and 'spectacular' is redundant; combine with a comma if both used or choose one. Adjectives in a coordinate series should be separated by a comma. Suggestion: prefer a single strong adjective or separate adjectives properly.

× Right now I don't live in a tall building, but in the future I would love to live in Shanghai in a tall building and see the bond, which is gonna be expensive.

✓ Right now I do not live in a tall building, but in the future I would love to live in Shanghai in a tall building and see the Bund, which will be expensive.

Several issues: use 'do not' instead of contraction for formality. 'See the bond' is a misspelling; the famous waterfront area in Shanghai is 'the Bund.' Informal 'gonna' should be replaced with 'will' for future tense. 'Which will be expensive' correctly links the clause. Suggestion: correct proper nouns, avoid informal slang, and use standard future tense 'will'.