Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more fluent, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, and give one or two specific details with a linking word. Use correct articles and plural forms.

Ejemplo: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in a city. For example, there is a high-rise residential block and a shopping mall in a skyscraper, which make the area feel modern and very convenient.

Sugerencia: Be more organized and reduce repetition. Begin with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and one example. Use correct verb tenses and avoid filler words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I travel. For instance, I took pictures of modern skyscrapers in Seoul last year and usually share them on social media to help me remember the places.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence then add specific reasons and one concise supporting detail. Improve grammar (articles and word order) and avoid repeating obvious facts.

Ejemplo: Yes, I'd like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris. I want to see it in person because it's an iconic landmark, and I have been inspired by romantic films and travel videos that show the spectacular city views from the tower.

Sugerencia: Clarify and make reasons more specific and natural. Use linking words (for example, because, also) and correct phrasing (e.g., 'the view', 'comfortable facilities'). Limit to about two supporting details.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the view from high floors is usually fantastic. Also, many modern high-rises offer convenient facilities, such as a gym and a swimming pool, which would make daily life more comfortable.

× Yeah, there are quite few tall buildings close where I live since I lived in a city, uh, there, there high rise building is tall and even if a shopping mall in a skyscraper, uh, it makes life more modern and convenient.

✓ Yeah, there are quite a few tall buildings close to where I live since I live in a city. The high-rise buildings there are tall and even have shopping malls in some skyscrapers, which makes life more modern and convenient.

Original errors: 'quite few' should be 'quite a few' (quantifier with countable plural), 'close where I live' needs preposition 'close to', inconsistent tense 'since I lived' should match present 'I live', 'there, there high rise building is tall' has singular/plural mismatch and word order; 'a shopping mall in a skyscraper' needs article and pluralization to match meaning. Suggestion: use 'quite a few' for several, 'close to', keep consistent present tense for current residence, use plural 'high-rise buildings' or rephrase to singular consistently, and add relative clause 'which makes life...'.

× Yeah, definitely I sometimes capture the the view of picture view of tall buildings, especially when I travel I I uh, took photos and I share them with the social media.

✓ Yeah, definitely I sometimes capture pictures of tall buildings, especially when I travel. I take photos and share them on social media.

Original errors: wordiness and repetition 'the the view of picture view', incorrect noun 'picture view' should be 'pictures', inconsistent tense 'took' vs present habitual 'take' and wrong preposition 'with the social media' should be 'on social media'. The instruction limited to certain grammar types; here the main issues relate to verb tense and prepositions. Suggestion: use simple present 'I take' for habitual actions, 'capture pictures' or 'take pictures', and 'share them on social media'.

× This is because social media is a great way to remember places I.

✓ This is because social media is a great way to remember places I have visited.

Original error: sentence fragment 'places I.' lacks a verb or past participle; intended meaning requires past participle 'visited'. Use present perfect 'have visited' to link past experiences to present. Suggestion: complete the clause with 'have visited' or 'visited'.

× Yeah, in the future I'm going to visit the Eiffel Tower, which is located in Paris.

✓ Yeah, in the future I'm going to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris.

Original sentence is mostly correct but wordy 'which is located in Paris' is redundant. No major grammar error; simplified version is more natural. Suggestion: shorten to 'the Eiffel Tower in Paris.'

× This is because it's very famous and also enjoyable place.

✓ This is because it's a very famous and enjoyable place.

Original error: missing article 'a' before 'very famous and enjoyable place'. Adjective sequence is fine but article is required for singular countable noun. Suggestion: add 'a'.

× And also I saw this building in romantic films and videos on social media.

✓ I have also seen this building in romantic films and videos on social media.

Original uses simple past 'saw' which is acceptable, but present perfect 'have seen' better connects past viewing with present impression. Maintain consistency with previous 'going to visit' statement. Suggestion: use 'have seen' to show relevance to now.

× Yes, I would like to live in a tall building.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building.

Sentence is correct. 'Would like' appropriately expresses desire. No change necessary.

× This is because uh, watching from your view is more enjoyable when you live in a high up building as well as more modern.

✓ This is because the view is more enjoyable when you live in a high building, and it feels more modern.

Original errors: awkward phrase 'watching from your view' and 'high up building' should be 'high building' or 'a building high up', and 'as well as more modern' misconnects ideas. Suggestion: rephrase to 'the view is more enjoyable' and separate the ideas with 'and'.

× High buildings are safe and also have a lot of comfortables like swimming pool and gym.

✓ Tall buildings are safe and also have a lot of comfortable facilities like swimming pools and gyms.

Original errors: 'High buildings' is acceptable but 'tall buildings' more natural; 'comfortables' is not a noun — should be 'comfortable facilities' or 'amenities'; 'swimming pool and gym' need plural forms when speaking generally: 'swimming pools and gyms'. Suggestion: use 'amenities' or 'facilities' and pluralize specific items when speaking generally.