Part 1
Examinador
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Candidato
Yeah, there is a tall office building near just a few miles away from my home. I can see office workers dreaming in and out during rush hours every day.
Examinador
Do you take photos of buildings?
Candidato
I just take photos of a certain types. For example, I'm really crazy about the drawings and paintings created by the street artists on the walls. I think this kind of drawing are really creative and meaningful and also lots of them are carrying environmental messages like protecting endangered.
Examinador
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Candidato
I would like to visit the Plastic museum in the future. I really fascinated by the delicate antiques and also the long and rich history. I know it has been still there for over 600 years and I want to explore it in person.
Examinador
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Candidato
Yeah, but I prefer to live in a middle floor rather than the top or ground level cause not only can I enjoy a nice panorama of the whole city, but also it gives me chance to escape safely while I made some emergency situations like the fire.
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Puntuación: 58.0Sugerencia: 回答应更直接且自然,注意语法与用词准确性。第一句可以更简洁说明位置(例如:a tall office building a few miles from my home)。第二句语法和词汇错误("dreaming in and out" 不合适),应改为描述实际观察到的情景(如 people coming and going)。全段不超过5句,更注意拼写和搭配。
Ejemplo: Yes. There is a tall office building a few miles from my home. I often see people coming and going from it during rush hour, which makes the area feel very busy.
Do you take photos of buildings?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: 回答要注意语法一致和名词单复数("certain types" -> "certain types of buildings" 或 "certain subjects";"drawing are" -> "drawings are")。可以更简洁说明拍摄偏好并给出具体例子和原因,使用连接词增强连贯性。避免啰嗦或不完整的结尾(如 "protecting endangered" 不完整)。
Ejemplo: Not really buildings, but I often photograph street art. I love the murals painted by local artists because they are colorful, creative and often carry environmental messages, such as protecting endangered species.
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Puntuación: 62.0Sugerencia: 注意时态和形容词使用("I really fascinated" 应为 "I'm really fascinated" 或 "I was really fascinated";"has been still there" 不自然,应为 "has stood there" 或 "has been there")。可先直接回答,然后用一两句具体说明原因和细节,连贯且不超过5句。
Ejemplo: I would like to visit the Plastic Museum someday. I'm really fascinated by its delicate antiques and the long history—I've read it has stood for over 600 years—so I want to see the exhibits in person.
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Puntuación: 65.0Sugerencia: 答案结构总体可以,但要改进语法与用词("middle floor" -> "a middle floor";"cause" -> "because";倒装和从句使用更自然)。注意表达更简洁、逻辑连接清楚(使用 "not only... but also..." 时保持语法平行)。最后一句可更自然地说明原因,例如提到安全和视野。
Ejemplo: Yes, I would, but I'd prefer a middle floor rather than the top or ground level. Not only would I have a nice view of the city, but I would also feel safer and have a better chance to escape in an emergency, like a fire.
× Yeah, there is a tall office building near just a few miles away from my home.
✓ Yeah, there is a tall office building just a few miles away from my home.
句子中 near 与 away 重复表达位置关系,且 near 放置位置不当。应删除 near,保留 just a few miles away 表示“就在几英里外”。此外语序调整使表达更自然。
× I can see office workers dreaming in and out during rush hours every day.
✓ I can see office workers coming in and out during rush hours every day.
原句使用 dreaming(做梦)是不合语境的现在分词,应使用 coming(进来)/ going(出去)表示“进进出出”。在此应用动词的现在分词形式来描述持续动作,但要选语义正确的动词。
× I just take photos of a certain types.
✓ I just take photos of certain types.
a certain types 中同时出现不定冠词 a(单数)和复数名词 types,数不一致。应删除 a 或将 types 改为 type。这里上下文指“某些类型”,故删除 a 并去掉冠词。
× For example, I'm really crazy about the drawings and paintings created by the street artists on the walls.
✓ For example, I'm really crazy about the drawings and paintings created by street artists on the walls.
the street artists 暗示特指某些画家,但句子泛指墙上的街头艺术,去掉定冠词更自然,表示一般性的“街头艺术家”。(这是冠词使用问题)
× I think this kind of drawing are really creative and meaningful and also lots of them are carrying environmental messages like protecting endangered.
✓ I think this kind of drawing is really creative and meaningful, and many of them carry environmental messages like protecting endangered species.
this kind of drawing 主语视为单数,谓语应使用 is(主谓一致问题);另外 lots of them 后接现在时态 carry 更自然,而 carrying 表示进行时不合适;protected object 不完整,需补全 endangered species(濒危物种)。解释用词的语法与搭配问题。
× I would like to visit the Plastic museum in the future.
✓ I would like to visit the Plastic Museum in the future.
语法上 would like 用法正确,但专有名词 Museum 首字母应大写;这里属用词及大小写问题,保留句式。
× I really fascinated by the delicate antiques and also the long and rich history.
✓ I am really fascinated by the delicate antiques and by its long and rich history.
原句缺少系动词 am 来构成被动形态(I am fascinated),fascinated 为形容词/过去分词需与 be 连用;此外并列结构中需为两个介词短语保持一致性(by the antiques and by its history)。建议补上 be 动词并调整并列结构。
× I know it has been still there for over 600 years and I want to explore it in person.
✓ I know it has still been there for over 600 years, and I want to explore it in person.
时态与副词位置问题,完成时 has been 用于表示持续至今,副词 still 更自然放在 has 与 been 之间(has still been);此外句中其余部分时态无误。
× Yeah, but I prefer to live in a middle floor rather than the top or ground level cause not only can I enjoy a nice panorama of the whole city, but also it gives me chance to escape safely while I made some emergency situations like the fire.
✓ Yeah, but I prefer to live on a middle floor rather than the top or ground level because not only can I enjoy a nice panorama of the whole city, but it also gives me a chance to escape safely if I have an emergency, such as a fire.
多处错误:介词 use(live on a floor 而不是 in);because 更正式完整;并列结构中 also 应位于 can enjoy 对应位置后面;it gives me chance 缺少不定冠词 a;while I made some emergency situations 时态与连词错误,应该用 if I have an emergency(条件句现在时表示将来可能发生)并举例 like a fire 改为 such as a fire。这些属于介词、连词、时态和冠词等多个问题,按要求仅修正列表内类型。