Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 文法と語順、語彙の自然さを改善しましょう。具体的には前置詞（in the outskirts）、冠詞（the）や複数形の一致、単語の自然な配置を直すと流暢に聞こえます。また情報を一文のトピック文＋一文の詳細に整理し、不要な単語を省いて5文以内に収めてください。例：場所の説明→建物の種類→理由や感想。

Ejemplo: I live in the outskirts of New Zealand, so there aren’t any high-rise buildings near my house. Instead, the area mostly has traditional houses and small supermarkets, which gives it a relaxed, village-like atmosphere.

Sugerencia: 表現の正確さと時制、一貫性を改善してください。'depends on'、'take photos'、現在習慣は現在形で表現するなど基本を整え、理由を示す接続詞（because, but）でつなげると論理的になります。句や語順を簡潔にして具体例を一つ挙げると良いです。

Ejemplo: It depends on the situation. I usually take photos of buildings during special occasions like sports events or parties, but I rarely photograph the buildings near my home because I see them every day.

Sugerencia: 語彙の選択と冠詞、前置詞を修正し、理由と具体的な期待（何を買いたいか、何が魅力か）を加えて説明を豊かにしましょう。'Shibuya 109'など固有名詞は正確に書くこと、'in the center of Tokyo'や'popular with'を使うと自然です。

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Shibuya 109, a famous shopping building in the center of Tokyo. It’s popular with young people in Japan, and I’d like to browse its trendy clothing stores and try on some new outfits.

Sugerencia: 時制の一致や文の切り分け、自然な語順（I grew up in a high-rise apartment）を直しましょう。理由は2～3点に絞って明示し、接続詞（because, so）で論理的に繋げると説得力が増します。設備や具体的な好きな点を一つ挙げてください。

Ejemplo: Definitely. I grew up in a high-rise apartment in Japan, so I feel more comfortable living in one now. I also like the facilities such as a gym and security services, which make daily life convenient and safe.

× I'm currently living outskirts of New Zealand so it doesn't have high rise building near my house, instead they have many traditional house and supermarket.

✓ I'm currently living on the outskirts of New Zealand, so there aren't any high-rise buildings near my house; instead, there are many traditional houses and supermarkets.

文の構造と複数形・there be表現の誤りがあります。'living outskirts'は前置詞'on'が必要で、'outskirts'は可算名詞の複数形扱いです。また主語が場所なので'it doesn't have'は不自然で、場所について存在を述べる場合は'there are/there aren't'を使います。'high rise building'は複数形でハイフンで'high-rise buildings'と書き、'many traditional house and supermarket'は複数形に揃えて'traditional houses and supermarkets'とします。改善のために前置詞と複数形、there be構文を意識してください.

× It depends from my perspective.

✓ It depends on my perspective.

前置詞の選択ミスです。'depend'は' on 'と共に使われます。'depends from'は誤用なので' depends on 'に直してください.

× When I'm in special occasion like sports event or party I took a shot of it but when I'm in near my house I never took photos because I always see it.

✓ On special occasions like sporting events or parties I take shots, but when I'm near my house I never take photos because I always see it.

時制と語順、冠詞・前置詞の誤りがあります。質問は一般的な習慣を問うので現在形を使うべきです（'took'→'take'）。'in special occasion'は冠詞と複数形が必要で'special occasions'、'sports event'は'sporting events'などが自然です。'when I'm in near my house'は'when I'm near my house'が正しいです。'a shot of it'を繰り返すより' take photos/take shots'で統一するとよいです。習慣を述べるときは現在形を使い、前置詞と冠詞の使い方に注意してください.

× Yes, I would like to visit Sheba 109 building which is shopping building.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Sheba 109 Building, which is a shopping complex.

冠詞と名詞選択の誤りです。固有名詞に定冠詞が必要な場合や'building'の直後に説明句が来るときは'which is a ...'と冠詞を入れます。また'native usage'では'shopping complex'や'shopping mall'の方が自然です。固有名詞＋説明の構造では定冠詞と不定冠詞に注意してください.

× It's located in center of Tokyo and is famous between Japanese people.

✓ It's located in the center of Tokyo and is famous among Japanese people.

前置詞と冠詞の誤用です。'center'には定冠詞が必要で' in the center of Tokyo'が正しいです。'famous between'は不自然で' famous among 'や'well-known to'を使います。前置詞の搭配を覚えると自然な表現になります.

× I also want to shop clothes and try it on.

✓ I also want to shop for clothes and try them on.

動詞と目的語の形の誤りです。'shop'は目的語に'for'を伴うことが多く、複数の服を指すので'clothes'に対して' try them on '（複数代名詞）を使います。'try it on'は単数を指すため不適切です。目的語の一致と前置詞に注意してください.

× Definitely yes because I grow up in high rise apartment when I'm in Japan I live in my parents house so I feel more comfortable living in high rise apartment and I love the equipment of it.

✓ Definitely yes, because I grew up in a high-rise apartment. When I was in Japan I lived in my parents' house, so I feel more comfortable living in a high-rise apartment and I like the amenities.

時制と複数形・冠詞・所有格の誤りがあります。過去の経験を語るので'grow up'は過去形'grew up'が必要です。'high rise apartment'は'high-rise apartment'とハイフンを使い、不定冠詞'a'が必要です。'my parents house'は所有格で' my parents' house 'と表記します。'love the equipment of it'は不自然で'like the amenities'や'like the facilities'が適切です。過去の出来事には過去形を使い、冠詞・所有格・語彙選択に注意してください.