Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and correct pronunciation/word choice (e.g., 'skyscraper', 'quite a few').

Ejemplo: Yes. There are quite a few tall buildings near my home, including office towers and apartment blocks. For example, a large shopping mall and several residential skyscrapers dominate the skyline, so I often enjoy the view from the top.

Sugerencia: Use precise vocabulary and natural expressions. Begin with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons or examples linked with words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid awkward idioms like 'my memory is not like an elephant'—say 'my memory is poor' or 'I like to keep photos as reminders.'

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I enjoy architecture. For example, I take pictures of modern glass towers and historic churches and save them on my phone so I can remember the places I've visited.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Use present tense consistently and avoid unnecessary phrases. Mention one or two clear reasons why you want to visit.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower because it is an iconic landmark and offers spectacular views of Paris. Also, it appears in many films and photos, so I would love to go to the top and take pictures of the city.

Sugerencia: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear opinion, then add two specific benefits using linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Correct small errors (remove duplicate words like 'it it').

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it usually has good security and convenient facilities like elevators. Also, living high up would give me lovely views of sunsets and the city.

× Yes, there are quite few tall buildings the at the place where I live there are number of office towers, apartments where usually people live and even a shopping mall is in the Skyscapple.

✓ Yes, there are quite a few tall buildings. At the place where I live, there are a number of office towers and apartments where people usually live, and even a shopping mall in the skyscraper area.

Errors: missing articles and incorrect noun forms. Use 'a few' for plural countable nouns, add 'a' before 'number', pluralize consistently, and correct 'Skyscapple' to 'skyscraper area' or 'skyscrapers'. Also split run-on sentence into clearer sentences and place adverb 'usually' before the verb phrase 'live'. Suggestion: add appropriate articles ('a', 'the'), use correct plural forms, and break long sentences into shorter ones for clarity.

× I love to see the view from the top of the building and I love to capture such view as well.

✓ I love to see the view from the top of the building, and I love to capture such views as well.

Error: noun-number disagreement and repetition. 'View' in this context is countable and plural when referring to multiple scenes; use 'views'. Also adding a comma before 'and' improves flow. Suggestion: use plural when talking generally and avoid repeating identical phrases by varying vocabulary.

× Yes, I am a photogenic person.

✓ Yes, I enjoy photography.

Error: 'photogenic' describes someone who looks good in photos, not someone who takes photos. The student's intended meaning is likely 'I enjoy photography' or 'I am into photography.' Suggestion: use accurate adjectives/phrases that match intended meaning.

× I love to capture the buildings in my camera, for example, the modern architecture, even the historical places I visited.

✓ I love to capture buildings with my camera, for example modern architecture and historical places I have visited.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'in my camera' should be 'with my camera'. Use parallel structure when listing examples. Use present perfect 'have visited' to link past visits to the present. Suggestion: use 'with' for instruments and consistent verb tenses for clarity.

× My memory is not like an elephant.

✓ My memory is not like an elephant's.

Error: missing possessive form after comparison with 'elephant'. When comparing to an animal's characteristic (memory), use the possessive 'elephant's'. Suggestion: use possessive when comparing attributes.

× So usually I keep all the photographs in the phone so that I keep remember the places that I visited.

✓ So usually I keep all the photographs on my phone so that I can remember the places I have visited.

Errors: wrong preposition 'in the phone' -> 'on my phone'; unnecessary word 'keep' before 'remember'; incorrect tense 'visited' should be present perfect 'have visited' to connect past action to present. Also use modal 'can' to express ability. Suggestion: simplify structure, choose correct prepositions, and use present perfect for past experiences relevant now.

× Even this building has been appeared in many films and shows that makes it more beautiful and I really want to enjoy the view from the top and wants to take photos.

✓ This building has even appeared in many films and shows, which makes it more famous, and I really want to enjoy the view from the top and take photos.

Errors: incorrect passive 'has been appeared' should be 'has appeared'; relative clause connection 'that makes' should be 'which makes'; subject-verb agreement 'wants' incorrect after 'I' should be 'want'. Also 'more beautiful' is subjective; 'more famous' fits context of films. Suggestion: use correct perfect tense forms, relative pronouns, and match verb to subject.

× Yes, I would love to live in a tall building because it provides a number of amenities such as security and safety.

✓ Yes, I would love to live in a tall building because it provides a number of amenities such as security and convenience.

Issue: word choice redundancy 'security and safety' are similar; replace with distinct amenity 'convenience'. Modal usage 'would love to' is acceptable. Suggestion: choose non-redundant nouns and natural collocations.

× It also provides elevators so it it will make life more convenient and safe for me.

✓ It also has elevators, so it will make life more convenient and safer for me.

Errors: repeated 'it it'; use 'has' rather than 'provides' for elevators; comparative 'safer' pairs with 'more convenient' for parallel structure. Suggestion: remove duplication, choose appropriate verbs, and keep parallel adjective forms.

× Also enjoying the view from the high, especially the sunset would be amazing as well.

✓ Also, enjoying the view from high up, especially at sunset, would be amazing.

Errors: 'from the high' is incorrect; use 'from high up' or 'from a high floor'. Preposition 'at sunset' is natural. Remove redundant 'also' and 'as well'. Suggestion: use natural prepositional phrases and avoid redundancy.