Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition and sentence fragments. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words.

Ejemplo: Yes. I live in downtown Shanghai, so there are many tall buildings nearby. Most are high‑rise apartment towers because the city is very large and densely populated, so developers build upward to provide more housing.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then give a clear condition and a specific example. Remove fillers and duplicated words, and use a linking word to show condition.

Ejemplo: Not usually. However, if I visit cities like New York or Chicago with iconic architecture, I always take photos because those buildings are unique and memorable.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, avoid broken sentences, and provide a clear reason and a concrete example or type of building you would visit. Remove fillers and correct grammar.

Ejemplo: I don't have a particular building in mind because, although Shanghai has many skyscrapers, most do not stand out. If I had to choose, I would prefer to visit a historically significant or uniquely designed building, such as a landmark with traditional architecture or an innovative skyscraper with unusual features.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear, concise statement of preference, then explain reasons with linking words and specific details. Avoid repetition and informal fillers.

Ejemplo: I would prefer to try something different. Having lived in a tall building for twenty years, I would like to experience life in the countryside or in a smaller apartment for a quieter and more independent lifestyle.

× Yes, I live in downtown Shanghai so there are many tall buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, I live in downtown Shanghai, so there are many tall buildings near my home.

Missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'so' linking two independent clauses. Add comma to improve clarity; the verb 'are' and 'there' usage is correct.

× Most of the most of them are are high rise apartment towers.

✓ Most of them are high-rise apartment towers.

Redundant phrase 'Most of the most of' and repeated 'are'. Also compound adjective 'high-rise' should be hyphenated before a noun. Remove duplication and correct hyphenation.

× Because Shanghai is a very large and densely populated city.

✓ Shanghai is a very large and densely populated city.

The original is a sentence fragment beginning with 'Because' and lacks a main clause. Remove 'Because' or attach it to the previous sentence to form a complete sentence.

× So uh developers tend to provide more housing, more tall buildings for housing.

✓ So developers tend to provide more housing and more tall buildings for people to live in.

Awkward phrasing and repetition. 'Uh' is a filler that should be omitted in written speech. Clarify purpose with 'for people to live in' and use 'and' instead of a comma to connect items.

× I don't usually take photos of buildings but that depends.

✓ I don't usually take photos of buildings, but it depends.

Use 'it depends' rather than 'that depends' in this context. Also add a comma before 'but' joining independent clauses.

× If you travel to like New York or Chicago and there are many many extraordinary or unique tall buildings than taking photos of them would be would be a must do thing.

✓ If you travel to places like New York or Chicago where there are many extraordinary or unique tall buildings, taking photos of them would be a must.

Use 'where' to introduce the clause about buildings. Replace 'than' with correct structure; remove duplicate 'would be' and awkward 'must do thing' with 'a must'. Also insert comma before result clause.

× I don't think there is a specific building that I would like to visit because Shanghai.

✓ I don't think there is a specific building that I would like to visit in Shanghai.

Fragment caused by misplaced 'because Shanghai.' Use 'in Shanghai' to indicate location. 'There is' structure is acceptable when corrected.

× Although Shanghai has many skyscrapers but but most of them just don't stand out.

✓ Although Shanghai has many skyscrapers, most of them just don't stand out.

'Although' and 'but' should not be used together; they are redundant. Remove 'but' and the repeated 'but'. Add comma after introductory concessive clause.

× So if I have to choose, I'd prefer to visit like umm like a more unique one or more characteristic 1.

✓ So if I had to choose, I'd prefer to visit a more unique or distinctive building.

Conditional should use 'had to' (subjunctive/modal preference) or 'have to' depending on nuance; 'if I have to choose' is acceptable but 'if I had to' is more natural here. Remove filler 'umm like' and unclear 'more characteristic 1'; use 'distinctive' for clarity.

× Actually I would like to try something different.

✓ Actually, I would like to try something different.

Add comma after introductory 'Actually' for clarity. Sentence is otherwise correct.

× I was born and raised up in in a tall building.

✓ I was born and raised in a tall building.

Do not use 'raised up'—'raised' is sufficient. Remove duplicate 'in'.

× I lived here for like 20 years.

✓ I lived here for about 20 years.

Use 'lived' past tense is fine; replace informal 'like' with 'about' for formal correctness and clarity.

× So maybe it's time for something different for experiencing some like living in the countryside or living in a small department, small apartment for a more quieter, more independent lifestyle.

✓ So maybe it's time to try something different, like living in the countryside or in a small apartment for a quieter, more independent lifestyle.

Awkward phrase 'time for something different for experiencing' should be 'time to try something different'. Remove redundant 'living' repetition and correct 'department' to 'apartment'. Use 'quieter' without 'more' (avoid double comparative) and reorder for natural flow.